for A 180 turn (On Hold)6/14/2021 c2 Guest
I Love This Story I Hope Someone Can Make A DXD Story Where Yumi Amane Is The Villain In Place Of Raynare.
I Love This Story I Hope Someone Can Make A DXD Story Where Yumi Amane Is The Villain In Place Of Raynare.
7/18/2019 c6 
3Gundam Wing Zero
Like the whole combo attack at the end, this chapter seems less rushed.
3Gundam Wing ZeroLike the whole combo attack at the end, this chapter seems less rushed.
7/18/2019 c5 Gundam Wing Zero
I like the whole concept you have going on he, but I think you need to slow down a bit and add some more detail.
I like the whole concept you have going on he, but I think you need to slow down a bit and add some more detail.
7/18/2019 c4 Gundam Wing Zero
Ok that was a bit rushed, but hey who doesn't love KFC jokes with riser.
Ok that was a bit rushed, but hey who doesn't love KFC jokes with riser.
7/18/2019 c3 Gundam Wing Zero
The whole adding Grafiya to the harem is very random and the death of Yumi is sad.
The whole adding Grafiya to the harem is very random and the death of Yumi is sad.
7/18/2019 c2 Gundam Wing Zero
Love how Raynare in way gain compassions and an understanding of death.
Love how Raynare in way gain compassions and an understanding of death.
7/18/2019 c1 Gundam Wing Zero
It does feel a little rush, other than that it's solid. Not a lot went on here, other than Raynare is in the hospital.
It does feel a little rush, other than that it's solid. Not a lot went on here, other than Raynare is in the hospital.
12/20/2017 c1 Guest
Try to add more... interval text. Describe how both is feeling or he setting they are in. Like it's great you have dialogue, that's always good. But just add more text between dialogue.
Try to add more... interval text. Describe how both is feeling or he setting they are in. Like it's great you have dialogue, that's always good. But just add more text between dialogue.
12/17/2017 c6 49scouttroop
Okay looking forward for more Raynare moments after all that absent she had in most of chapters you put in.
And HAIL HYDRA!
49scouttroopOkay looking forward for more Raynare moments after all that absent she had in most of chapters you put in.
And HAIL HYDRA!
12/16/2017 c6 darth56
this is a great story keep it up and thank you for your time spend in writing this for us to read
this is a great story keep it up and thank you for your time spend in writing this for us to read
12/16/2017 c6 2Xerzo LotCN
the chapters were quite similar but i think he knocked out 3 pawns instead of 2 and almost a third and he knocked out ravel different and he used a senjutsu enhanced dragon laser so not just external damage but internal damage do painful i think that could have just taken him out straight out the gate nearly destroy his entire body and then damn his soul as well yea but more pain
idr if koneko know he know it will he help train her and conquer her fear thus becoming busty faster if your wanting her to loli koneko just as good hmmm
the count still confuses me it says 20 min but it counts down like 20 second unless that little bit happen each minute meh whatever
2Xerzo LotCNthe chapters were quite similar but i think he knocked out 3 pawns instead of 2 and almost a third and he knocked out ravel different and he used a senjutsu enhanced dragon laser so not just external damage but internal damage do painful i think that could have just taken him out straight out the gate nearly destroy his entire body and then damn his soul as well yea but more pain
idr if koneko know he know it will he help train her and conquer her fear thus becoming busty faster if your wanting her to loli koneko just as good hmmm
the count still confuses me it says 20 min but it counts down like 20 second unless that little bit happen each minute meh whatever