6/7/2021 c34 64LadyCordeliaStuart
New SYOT? Maybe a slot for me?
I'm glad to see Inky get a happy ending. I got her before you and liked her but she didn't end up winning. I love it when other people give Tributes a chance- it increases the odds for happy endings! It's also cool to go into her first mentoring experience. With most SYOT it's hard because the next story has a new cast of main characters but the mentors are still important and their lives still go on after they win.
New SYOT? Maybe a slot for me?
I'm glad to see Inky get a happy ending. I got her before you and liked her but she didn't end up winning. I love it when other people give Tributes a chance- it increases the odds for happy endings! It's also cool to go into her first mentoring experience. With most SYOT it's hard because the next story has a new cast of main characters but the mentors are still important and their lives still go on after they win.
5/13/2017 c4 Fire and Starlight
The sprite girl and the protected are the awesome out of this chapter. This story is so amazing that every chapter I read is a surprise
The sprite girl and the protected are the awesome out of this chapter. This story is so amazing that every chapter I read is a surprise
5/13/2017 c3 Fire and Starlight
2 is okay. I pity Iridia or whatever the name is. 4 is very interesting, I pity Tiana I think her name is called. I look forward to see the rest of the reaping
2 is okay. I pity Iridia or whatever the name is. 4 is very interesting, I pity Tiana I think her name is called. I look forward to see the rest of the reaping
5/13/2017 c1 Fire and Starlight
First chapter is boring but it has a good start to it. I'm looking forward to read more
First chapter is boring but it has a good start to it. I'm looking forward to read more
5/7/2017 c34 25CelticGames4
Congratulations on a great story with a great Victor! Sorry for the late review, I didn't get a notification for the update.
Anyways, I'm so excited to see the 111th Games a little bit! Poor Kyle, I was really hoping he was going to win :( It was nice to see Incy mentoring, though, and I can't wait to see her in SNOFS! I think I've done all of my sappy rambles, so I'll just say this: I can't wait for what's to come! :D Keep up the good work!
Congratulations on a great story with a great Victor! Sorry for the late review, I didn't get a notification for the update.
Anyways, I'm so excited to see the 111th Games a little bit! Poor Kyle, I was really hoping he was going to win :( It was nice to see Incy mentoring, though, and I can't wait to see her in SNOFS! I think I've done all of my sappy rambles, so I'll just say this: I can't wait for what's to come! :D Keep up the good work!
5/7/2017 c34 9Platrium
Email alerts are not working at the moment, so I didn't realize this updated, since I relied too much on the emails. I suggest you put an author's note on the sequel that this chapter is up, just in case others didn't see it.
Anyway, I really like this chapter! We got to delve into the missing year between this story and the sequel. I like a fiery arena! In fact, I've never seen such a simple arena idea being written before. This arena is hot, very hot! ;) Incy naturally felt guilty about her tribute going down in the bloodbath, but it was just Adela's bad luck. Eventually, she'll get used to some tributes really getting eliminated in the bloodbath. At least neither D8 tribute got to face a D9 one and lost to it. That would really hurt Incy and bring her back some memories of Citlali. :P The mysterious insane victor though, now we got to see it. From the way he was written, even though it was just short, it looks like he really is insane. Insanity is good in the arena as long as it's still a good percentage sane. Outside of the arena though, well, we saw what happened in the sequel. I'm glad that mystery was answered here in this story, after that chapter was released. :o
Once again, thanks for letting me participate in this story! We're finally moving on to SNOFS. I wonder how you will write the reapings, because it was 'weak' last time, earlier in this story. I'm pretty sure it will be better than last time though. :) Even a fellow reviewer said not to be afraid of adding some length into tribute introductions. Also, just a friendly reminder, creative liberty is encouraged, but please do not change a big part of a tribute's backstory, personality, etc. That's my constructive criticism from what happened to Meric's part before it was replaced. :) *thumbs up*
I would've been sad that this story has officially come to an end. However, I'll still be in the sequel since my sequel tribute is also there. Congratulations on finishing your 1st SYOT! :D
Email alerts are not working at the moment, so I didn't realize this updated, since I relied too much on the emails. I suggest you put an author's note on the sequel that this chapter is up, just in case others didn't see it.
Anyway, I really like this chapter! We got to delve into the missing year between this story and the sequel. I like a fiery arena! In fact, I've never seen such a simple arena idea being written before. This arena is hot, very hot! ;) Incy naturally felt guilty about her tribute going down in the bloodbath, but it was just Adela's bad luck. Eventually, she'll get used to some tributes really getting eliminated in the bloodbath. At least neither D8 tribute got to face a D9 one and lost to it. That would really hurt Incy and bring her back some memories of Citlali. :P The mysterious insane victor though, now we got to see it. From the way he was written, even though it was just short, it looks like he really is insane. Insanity is good in the arena as long as it's still a good percentage sane. Outside of the arena though, well, we saw what happened in the sequel. I'm glad that mystery was answered here in this story, after that chapter was released. :o
Once again, thanks for letting me participate in this story! We're finally moving on to SNOFS. I wonder how you will write the reapings, because it was 'weak' last time, earlier in this story. I'm pretty sure it will be better than last time though. :) Even a fellow reviewer said not to be afraid of adding some length into tribute introductions. Also, just a friendly reminder, creative liberty is encouraged, but please do not change a big part of a tribute's backstory, personality, etc. That's my constructive criticism from what happened to Meric's part before it was replaced. :) *thumbs up*
I would've been sad that this story has officially come to an end. However, I'll still be in the sequel since my sequel tribute is also there. Congratulations on finishing your 1st SYOT! :D
5/6/2017 c34 2Winter's Writing
AAAAAA OMG
KYLE
KYLE
KYLE
Eat all the potatoes and kale in heaven! (Sorry, inside joke.)
But seriously, Incy is an awesome mentor.
AAAAAA OMG
KYLE
KYLE
KYLE
Eat all the potatoes and kale in heaven! (Sorry, inside joke.)
But seriously, Incy is an awesome mentor.
5/2/2017 c33 25CelticGames4
This chapter was fantastic! The traveling library is a great idea and very realistic to Incy's character without being too rebellious or revolutionary for the Capitol. I think an epilogue might give the story just a bit more closure (or even provide a segue into SNOFS)! I believe strongly in epilogues, but that's a personal thing, it's ultimately up to you. If this is the final chapter, though, I must say that saying goodbye is quite sad and I will miss this story a lot! But, it is also a new beginning, which is awesome! Congratulations on a successful, exciting story, I can't wait for more from you! Heed to hoping you hit 300!
This chapter was fantastic! The traveling library is a great idea and very realistic to Incy's character without being too rebellious or revolutionary for the Capitol. I think an epilogue might give the story just a bit more closure (or even provide a segue into SNOFS)! I believe strongly in epilogues, but that's a personal thing, it's ultimately up to you. If this is the final chapter, though, I must say that saying goodbye is quite sad and I will miss this story a lot! But, it is also a new beginning, which is awesome! Congratulations on a successful, exciting story, I can't wait for more from you! Heed to hoping you hit 300!
5/1/2017 c33 9Platrium
Ooh! I don't know, but maybe another chapter will surely reach the count to 300? I don't know what will be in the epilogue, if it will exist. No wait, Incy's life will surely be there, but probably some scenes connecting to the sequel too? 2 years apart, but I think it's possible.
Meric's parents didn't bring his older and his younger sister eh? They were never mentioned in the story, but I don't mind that in this story since they don't really have another significance. Same can't be said for SNOFS. That girl on the pedestal surely looks devastated. I wonder if we'll see her in the sequel. ;) Hehe.
What I really like about this chapter is the victory tour itself. I have not read one in a long time, probably because not everybody writes about the victory tour. This chapter was well-written overall! I don't even know if I could write a victory tour myself at this point.
That's about it. If you ask me, I'll still want that epilogue because we'll be ending at an even numbered chapter that way. :P Although if you wanna start with SNOFS, that'd be great too. I'm excited to see a tribute of mine be written again! :D
Ooh! I don't know, but maybe another chapter will surely reach the count to 300? I don't know what will be in the epilogue, if it will exist. No wait, Incy's life will surely be there, but probably some scenes connecting to the sequel too? 2 years apart, but I think it's possible.
Meric's parents didn't bring his older and his younger sister eh? They were never mentioned in the story, but I don't mind that in this story since they don't really have another significance. Same can't be said for SNOFS. That girl on the pedestal surely looks devastated. I wonder if we'll see her in the sequel. ;) Hehe.
What I really like about this chapter is the victory tour itself. I have not read one in a long time, probably because not everybody writes about the victory tour. This chapter was well-written overall! I don't even know if I could write a victory tour myself at this point.
That's about it. If you ask me, I'll still want that epilogue because we'll be ending at an even numbered chapter that way. :P Although if you wanna start with SNOFS, that'd be great too. I'm excited to see a tribute of mine be written again! :D
4/29/2017 c32 18tracelynn
Wow! This is just stellar, I love how you wove in all of these things into one cohesive chapter! The descriptions were great and Incy's reactions to things were believable. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter from start to finish, and I cannot WAIT for the Victory Tour! :D
Wow! This is just stellar, I love how you wove in all of these things into one cohesive chapter! The descriptions were great and Incy's reactions to things were believable. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter from start to finish, and I cannot WAIT for the Victory Tour! :D
4/28/2017 c32 2Ginny Westwood
That was one of the best endings I've ever seen. It was well written, and the part with Petal was interesting. Incy did well. Congratulations tracelynn for your victor!
That was one of the best endings I've ever seen. It was well written, and the part with Petal was interesting. Incy did well. Congratulations tracelynn for your victor!
4/28/2017 c32 MadisonTheReader
Well it never posted my other review so I'll put it here.
I wanted Citlali to win, but I guess you don't always get what you want. Since it's the 110th games already, you could pull a LadyCordeliaStuart and do a resurrection story for her, like Patriot Games or Calvary Road. They'd probably have the technology already and I'm sure it would ease ace's (and petals) 2nd place pain. XD I would actually read that.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Well it never posted my other review so I'll put it here.
I wanted Citlali to win, but I guess you don't always get what you want. Since it's the 110th games already, you could pull a LadyCordeliaStuart and do a resurrection story for her, like Patriot Games or Calvary Road. They'd probably have the technology already and I'm sure it would ease ace's (and petals) 2nd place pain. XD I would actually read that.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
4/28/2017 c32 25CelticGames4
Yay, Victor Incy in action! I really liked this chapter and I think you did well with showing Incy'a emotions and giving time to some of he other tributes. I especially liked the part with Petal at the end, that was sad but well-done. Great work on this! I can't believe it'll be over so soon! :O
Yay, Victor Incy in action! I really liked this chapter and I think you did well with showing Incy'a emotions and giving time to some of he other tributes. I especially liked the part with Petal at the end, that was sad but well-done. Great work on this! I can't believe it'll be over so soon! :O