for Absolutely Not a Date10/28/2018 c1 
21moonrainer
i love that you chose to portray the relationship between Lily and Lorcan. nice characterisation! the way they talk to each other is so entertaining to read. i also enjoyed Lily reminiscing about their childhood quarrels, as well as the ending - spot-on!
however, here's some (hopefully constructive) criticism:
- have you thought about inserting more descriptive language into your dialogue? at times it seemed a bit bare to me.
- a word of caution: make sure to check your grammar and spelling. the careless mistakes distract from your wonderful story!
but all in all, it was such a lovely little read! now i'm curious who Lorcan's crush is, so i'm hoping for another chapter.
21moonraineri love that you chose to portray the relationship between Lily and Lorcan. nice characterisation! the way they talk to each other is so entertaining to read. i also enjoyed Lily reminiscing about their childhood quarrels, as well as the ending - spot-on!
however, here's some (hopefully constructive) criticism:
- have you thought about inserting more descriptive language into your dialogue? at times it seemed a bit bare to me.
- a word of caution: make sure to check your grammar and spelling. the careless mistakes distract from your wonderful story!
but all in all, it was such a lovely little read! now i'm curious who Lorcan's crush is, so i'm hoping for another chapter.
7/16/2017 c1 5LadyMuis
This story is adorable as much as hilarious. It surprises me though the way you made Lorcan a bit of a jerk and not dreamy. I love the way how you made this returned hate relation between the two and the bits on how their 'hate' relation developed. It is adorable how Lorcan seems a bit in denial at the end when lily confronts him on his secret crush. Very well written, thanks for the good read!
5LadyMuisThis story is adorable as much as hilarious. It surprises me though the way you made Lorcan a bit of a jerk and not dreamy. I love the way how you made this returned hate relation between the two and the bits on how their 'hate' relation developed. It is adorable how Lorcan seems a bit in denial at the end when lily confronts him on his secret crush. Very well written, thanks for the good read!
12/2/2016 c1 18RainyDaysAndGoodBooks
This was cute! I really liked the back stories, and I loved the dialect. Nice job!
18RainyDaysAndGoodBooksThis was cute! I really liked the back stories, and I loved the dialect. Nice job!