for The Third Code3/17/2019 c18 DollarPizza
I really hope you're still active! This story is amazing and if you're still on this site I hope you finish it!
I really hope you're still active! This story is amazing and if you're still on this site I hope you finish it!
5/7/2018 c8 Guest
This story is too dramatic for my taste. Id recommend that you reboot it. You focus too much on the dramatics and arguing part of the characters interraction that you leave little time for us to endear ourselves to them, rendering bland any and every argument. Example, given that Rose and Scorpius are head, it should be common to see them talking. Not something Bianca/albus can create gossip over and Maxima can cry a out. Then theres the Maxima and Albus relationship, two "study sessions" and a party is suppose to lead me to believe Albus know her to a point where he understand her every motive in her relationship with Scorp, or make me see his interractions with the couple as anything more than a playboy seeking forbiden fruit. I get you want to make it "spicy" but without proper character developement, your characters just come out as one dimensional and annoying. Rose the head girl, Roxanne the sexy tomboy, Albus the misunderstood playboy, Maxima the governed hieress that wishes for choice. Not to mention that all of this should be B plot, main story being the apparent war and death threats. Written o so sloppy. When you first introduced it, i felt it was going to be like some scavenger hunt. Then you added the foreign politics, ransacking rooms, death theaths and whatever the fuck Biana, Ivan and the dark objects fit into it. The story is very.. odd. With potential but odd.
This story is too dramatic for my taste. Id recommend that you reboot it. You focus too much on the dramatics and arguing part of the characters interraction that you leave little time for us to endear ourselves to them, rendering bland any and every argument. Example, given that Rose and Scorpius are head, it should be common to see them talking. Not something Bianca/albus can create gossip over and Maxima can cry a out. Then theres the Maxima and Albus relationship, two "study sessions" and a party is suppose to lead me to believe Albus know her to a point where he understand her every motive in her relationship with Scorp, or make me see his interractions with the couple as anything more than a playboy seeking forbiden fruit. I get you want to make it "spicy" but without proper character developement, your characters just come out as one dimensional and annoying. Rose the head girl, Roxanne the sexy tomboy, Albus the misunderstood playboy, Maxima the governed hieress that wishes for choice. Not to mention that all of this should be B plot, main story being the apparent war and death threats. Written o so sloppy. When you first introduced it, i felt it was going to be like some scavenger hunt. Then you added the foreign politics, ransacking rooms, death theaths and whatever the fuck Biana, Ivan and the dark objects fit into it. The story is very.. odd. With potential but odd.
1/15/2018 c18 MeAFanficAddict
oh oh OH! A CLIFFHANGER!
i knew it! there was somethin wrong with Ivan from the starting.
i am really curious what's inside the memory. hope Ivan doesn't notice the bottle missing.
long chapters are the best!
oh oh OH! A CLIFFHANGER!
i knew it! there was somethin wrong with Ivan from the starting.
i am really curious what's inside the memory. hope Ivan doesn't notice the bottle missing.
long chapters are the best!
1/13/2018 c18 Guest
THIS fanfic is really good can’t wait to read more !
THIS fanfic is really good can’t wait to read more !
1/7/2018 c18 Guest
I was not expecting memories. It’s so interesting I can’t ”wait to see what happens!
I was not expecting memories. It’s so interesting I can’t ”wait to see what happens!
41/3/2018 c17 Guest
This is very interesting. Post soon, i can’t to find out what happens!
This is very interesting. Post soon, i can’t to find out what happens!
1/3/2018 c17 MeAFanficAddict
i was kind of waiting for Maxima and Scorpius to attend the famous Weasley family dinner.
still hate Roxanne but atleast she is cooperating.
it would be quite fun the the school reopens again.
happy new year!
liked this chapter
i was kind of waiting for Maxima and Scorpius to attend the famous Weasley family dinner.
still hate Roxanne but atleast she is cooperating.
it would be quite fun the the school reopens again.
happy new year!
liked this chapter
12/31/2017 c16 libbypotter
The plot has thickened so much it needs a knife to cut it. I am looking forward to where you are taking it next. I assume at some stage they are going to talk to an adult
I now quite like Albus and Maxima together and of course I love Rose and Scorpius as a couple
The plot has thickened so much it needs a knife to cut it. I am looking forward to where you are taking it next. I assume at some stage they are going to talk to an adult
I now quite like Albus and Maxima together and of course I love Rose and Scorpius as a couple
12/25/2017 c16 MeAFanficAddict
...and yes. i still hate Roxanne. does she have another job other than making things even bad
...and yes. i still hate Roxanne. does she have another job other than making things even bad
12/25/2017 c16 MeAFanficAddict
I was dying to read this chapter!
and now i am dying to read more of it.
at first everything was going on fine and then suddenly it became all tensed.
was the misister really killed? who did it? there are so many questions. but nice chapter!
update soon!
I was dying to read this chapter!
and now i am dying to read more of it.
at first everything was going on fine and then suddenly it became all tensed.
was the misister really killed? who did it? there are so many questions. but nice chapter!
update soon!
12/25/2017 c10 libbypotter
Not sure how I feel about Albus moving on so quickly. However I really like this story and can’t wait to see how it develops
Not sure how I feel about Albus moving on so quickly. However I really like this story and can’t wait to see how it develops
12/24/2017 c15 soraine28
I LOVE SCOROSE! Omg I'm so upset about all the drama that keeps them from showing their true feelings out loud and about Lorcan-he really is an idiot, why would he do such thing? Ugh, nevermind.
Talking about other subjects, I really like how the plot is going and I truly believe Rose's theories (I mean, they live in the Wizarding World, they should not be surprised at alll- yes, I'm talking about that Lorcan git. Please upload another chapter, I can't wait!
I LOVE SCOROSE! Omg I'm so upset about all the drama that keeps them from showing their true feelings out loud and about Lorcan-he really is an idiot, why would he do such thing? Ugh, nevermind.
Talking about other subjects, I really like how the plot is going and I truly believe Rose's theories (I mean, they live in the Wizarding World, they should not be surprised at alll- yes, I'm talking about that Lorcan git. Please upload another chapter, I can't wait!