for What the Heart Hides2/14/2020 c7 Megan Lyle
Wow! This is a awesome, exciting, dramatic, and romantic chapter! Please keep writing.
Wow! This is a awesome, exciting, dramatic, and romantic chapter! Please keep writing.
12/17/2019 c6 Inertia
Hello Sunrise19!
I wanted to start by stating that as a longtime Pocahontas/JS fan I've never bothered scavenging the internet for new fanfiction in years because 1) their presence in the fandom/fanfiction world has decreased since the movie's release back in 1995 and 2) because it is quite hard to come across a 'mature writer' specifically when it comes to movies more children oriented. Myself being a fan in her thirties, I was pleasantly surprised to come across your talent that portrays this passionate couple in such a realistic, believable and 'in character' way. The flow of your writing, descriptions and entertaining dialogue between the characters makes me wish for a Pocahontas III movie with your plot.
I started reading through all of your stories and I must say I definitely noticed how your writing has evolved during the years ( I 100% mean this as a compliment!). I know life is busy and stressful but I would truly appreciate if you would continue on with this story, I'm dying to see what adventures John's Smith plans to bring our dear Pocahontas on. I love how they are somewhat "forced" to keep their love and passion undercover for the sake of obligations and image. It makes their dynamic that much sexier and passionate!
Anyhow, I congratulate you on your admirable talent and creativity, like I said previously, it it such a treat to come across a writer who understands the depths of these characters and bring them to life the way you do ! Bravo!
Hello Sunrise19!
I wanted to start by stating that as a longtime Pocahontas/JS fan I've never bothered scavenging the internet for new fanfiction in years because 1) their presence in the fandom/fanfiction world has decreased since the movie's release back in 1995 and 2) because it is quite hard to come across a 'mature writer' specifically when it comes to movies more children oriented. Myself being a fan in her thirties, I was pleasantly surprised to come across your talent that portrays this passionate couple in such a realistic, believable and 'in character' way. The flow of your writing, descriptions and entertaining dialogue between the characters makes me wish for a Pocahontas III movie with your plot.
I started reading through all of your stories and I must say I definitely noticed how your writing has evolved during the years ( I 100% mean this as a compliment!). I know life is busy and stressful but I would truly appreciate if you would continue on with this story, I'm dying to see what adventures John's Smith plans to bring our dear Pocahontas on. I love how they are somewhat "forced" to keep their love and passion undercover for the sake of obligations and image. It makes their dynamic that much sexier and passionate!
Anyhow, I congratulate you on your admirable talent and creativity, like I said previously, it it such a treat to come across a writer who understands the depths of these characters and bring them to life the way you do ! Bravo!
9/11/2019 c6 
176HC247
Okay. *cracks knuckles* I have a lot of feelings , so let's get started:
Patricia's greeting was ...interesting. She's certainly bold, isn't she? I feel like her heart was in the right place even if her methods were bit blunt. Then again, if the dress she's wearing is the one we have in the modern portrait, than a., kudos to you for the historical details and b., can't really say I blame Patricia then haha.
Speaking of Patricia, she reminds me a bit of a hyperactive poodle. Like, you can't help but love her and she has a huge heart, but at the same time she's so nervous and jumpy. I have a soft spot for her. Although homegirl clearly has a thing for a certain diplomat. Bless her, she's trying to be cool about it, but she just can't get it together, but the kiss broke her. Poor girl- we've all been there. Still... Maybe lay off the wine for a bit, sweetie.
BUT CAN WE TALK ABOUT SNEAKY MCSNEAKERSON SMITH OVER HERE? tHE HAND ACTION UNDER THE TABLE HAD ME GRINNING LIKE A FOOL AND i AM HERE FOR IT.
And the end! He's such a smooth operator, isn't he? I love it.
This whole chapter was great and I need to know what kind of mischief our favorite couple get up to at that other party. Just don't stay out all night, kids. Rolfe's carriage is coming in the morning!
Then again, that might be the opportunity Patricia could use to her advantage. Get it, girl. lol.
Anyway, Great work and I can't wait for more!
176HC247Okay. *cracks knuckles* I have a lot of feelings , so let's get started:
Patricia's greeting was ...interesting. She's certainly bold, isn't she? I feel like her heart was in the right place even if her methods were bit blunt. Then again, if the dress she's wearing is the one we have in the modern portrait, than a., kudos to you for the historical details and b., can't really say I blame Patricia then haha.
Speaking of Patricia, she reminds me a bit of a hyperactive poodle. Like, you can't help but love her and she has a huge heart, but at the same time she's so nervous and jumpy. I have a soft spot for her. Although homegirl clearly has a thing for a certain diplomat. Bless her, she's trying to be cool about it, but she just can't get it together, but the kiss broke her. Poor girl- we've all been there. Still... Maybe lay off the wine for a bit, sweetie.
BUT CAN WE TALK ABOUT SNEAKY MCSNEAKERSON SMITH OVER HERE? tHE HAND ACTION UNDER THE TABLE HAD ME GRINNING LIKE A FOOL AND i AM HERE FOR IT.
And the end! He's such a smooth operator, isn't he? I love it.
This whole chapter was great and I need to know what kind of mischief our favorite couple get up to at that other party. Just don't stay out all night, kids. Rolfe's carriage is coming in the morning!
Then again, that might be the opportunity Patricia could use to her advantage. Get it, girl. lol.
Anyway, Great work and I can't wait for more!
9/10/2019 c6 1twillight forever
OK so, I'm getting serious vibes of "Titanic" first-class party vs. third-class party when John Smith says "would you rather stay here and listen to Patricia's laments, or join me at an actual party?" I can't wait to see what his party is like. Are they going to a pub? A country dance? [Jacobean country dances]
Patricia totally loves Rolfe. She was wailing in French, "am I not beautiful?"
And, major props for including the portrait dress that came down to us through history.
1twillight foreverOK so, I'm getting serious vibes of "Titanic" first-class party vs. third-class party when John Smith says "would you rather stay here and listen to Patricia's laments, or join me at an actual party?" I can't wait to see what his party is like. Are they going to a pub? A country dance? [Jacobean country dances]
Patricia totally loves Rolfe. She was wailing in French, "am I not beautiful?"
And, major props for including the portrait dress that came down to us through history.
6/20/2019 c5 1pearl037
I like this. I like it a lot. It took me a while to get used to the very British voice that your characters and narrator have, but I like the tension, and I LOVE the present tense description of John Smiths recovery. I felt that. Truly. :) I saw that you updated at the end of May. Maybe you'll post at the end of this month too? Would love to see where this goes!
1pearl037I like this. I like it a lot. It took me a while to get used to the very British voice that your characters and narrator have, but I like the tension, and I LOVE the present tense description of John Smiths recovery. I felt that. Truly. :) I saw that you updated at the end of May. Maybe you'll post at the end of this month too? Would love to see where this goes!
6/5/2019 c5 176HC247
Goodness, it's taken me forever and a day to get this to you and I've read this thing like five times by now, but I am HERE and I am EXCITED!
This was probably my favorite chapter to date for myriad reasons. I know I've said I adore Eva, but this just was the icing on the cake for me. I love when John showed up and she was like "NO, you must eat with us." and basically dragged him inside. She's such a mom and I wouldn't have her any other way. I love how she tried to knock some sense into both of their stubborn heads.
Also, can we talk about John here? The poor guy is so awkward and mumbly- It's amazing. "You look nice" and "the whole "decent carriage" bit. I will admit to LOLing at those(even if maybe you didn't mean for that, I found it charming and it amused me. I'm simple. What can I say?). In fact, the entire carriage ride was awkward and of course, makes for some of the best parts. So fun! (for us, not them XD)
And that kiss? The first one may have been a mistake (read: "mistake"), but homegirl can't try that excuse with the second. Nope. That was intentional and I loved every second of it. And John's right path line in response? Dead, dead. I am dead and it is your fault.
The end! John is such a cheeky devil with his packages and smiles and sauntering, all dramatic and such. He knows very well what he's doing, doesn't he?
Bottom line: I love this. I think it's one of my favorite things you've written and you need to update soon because I need my happy ending and I need it asap.
176HC247Goodness, it's taken me forever and a day to get this to you and I've read this thing like five times by now, but I am HERE and I am EXCITED!
This was probably my favorite chapter to date for myriad reasons. I know I've said I adore Eva, but this just was the icing on the cake for me. I love when John showed up and she was like "NO, you must eat with us." and basically dragged him inside. She's such a mom and I wouldn't have her any other way. I love how she tried to knock some sense into both of their stubborn heads.
Also, can we talk about John here? The poor guy is so awkward and mumbly- It's amazing. "You look nice" and "the whole "decent carriage" bit. I will admit to LOLing at those(even if maybe you didn't mean for that, I found it charming and it amused me. I'm simple. What can I say?). In fact, the entire carriage ride was awkward and of course, makes for some of the best parts. So fun! (for us, not them XD)
And that kiss? The first one may have been a mistake (read: "mistake"), but homegirl can't try that excuse with the second. Nope. That was intentional and I loved every second of it. And John's right path line in response? Dead, dead. I am dead and it is your fault.
The end! John is such a cheeky devil with his packages and smiles and sauntering, all dramatic and such. He knows very well what he's doing, doesn't he?
Bottom line: I love this. I think it's one of my favorite things you've written and you need to update soon because I need my happy ending and I need it asap.
5/28/2019 c5 Megan Lyle
Wow! This is a dramatic, shocking, romantic, and awesome chapter! Keep writing.
Wow! This is a dramatic, shocking, romantic, and awesome chapter! Keep writing.
5/28/2019 c5 1twillight forever
Damn I love these two. Looks like they will get together in the end!
Now if she could just break it gently to Rolfe ...
1twillight foreverDamn I love these two. Looks like they will get together in the end!
Now if she could just break it gently to Rolfe ...
10/26/2018 c4 Huge fan
You are an incredibly talented writer! This story is amazing! I really do hope you continue to write this story, I cannot wait to find out what happens next.
You are an incredibly talented writer! This story is amazing! I really do hope you continue to write this story, I cannot wait to find out what happens next.
9/3/2018 c4 Guest14-15
Will you update really soon? Because you are very good at writing fanfic!
Will you update really soon? Because you are very good at writing fanfic!
7/3/2018 c4 Guest
Dear Sunrise19,
So happy to hear that my reviews encouraged you so. Do keep up the good work, this was a wonderful transition chapter, and I hope that you keep finding inspiration in your writing! Looking forward to the next chapters here and also the conclusion of Before Dawn.
-Guest
Dear Sunrise19,
So happy to hear that my reviews encouraged you so. Do keep up the good work, this was a wonderful transition chapter, and I hope that you keep finding inspiration in your writing! Looking forward to the next chapters here and also the conclusion of Before Dawn.
-Guest
6/27/2018 c4 176HC247
Yes, I know. I'm late. I'm sorry. BUT I AM HERE AND HAVE READ YE CHAPTER!
Ahem...sorry.
Well, this may be a filler chapter, but it's an important one. Looks like somethings are starting to come back to memory here (you should also know I'm very much resisting the urge to break into Celine Dion-esque song "It's All Coming Back to Me" right now).
I think I've said this before, but I really like Eva. She's such a mom and the way she cares for Pocahontas and still calls her out are such "mom" things. Hopefully she'll continue to set her straight in all matters..lol
Great update! Can't wait to read more!
176HC247Yes, I know. I'm late. I'm sorry. BUT I AM HERE AND HAVE READ YE CHAPTER!
Ahem...sorry.
Well, this may be a filler chapter, but it's an important one. Looks like somethings are starting to come back to memory here (you should also know I'm very much resisting the urge to break into Celine Dion-esque song "It's All Coming Back to Me" right now).
I think I've said this before, but I really like Eva. She's such a mom and the way she cares for Pocahontas and still calls her out are such "mom" things. Hopefully she'll continue to set her straight in all matters..lol
Great update! Can't wait to read more!
6/24/2018 c4 15Azalea542
Glad to see you're back! I had given up nagging you for new chapters! ;) Whatever it was going on in your life I hope it wasn't too tragic and things get better for you. You are a good writer, but there is one point on which you could improve: I am not always sure which character is speaking. I look forward to more chapters!
15Azalea542Glad to see you're back! I had given up nagging you for new chapters! ;) Whatever it was going on in your life I hope it wasn't too tragic and things get better for you. You are a good writer, but there is one point on which you could improve: I am not always sure which character is speaking. I look forward to more chapters!