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2/26/2017 c1 15Valawenel
Enjoyable. Congrats! :)
2/23/2017 c1 595Ghostwriter
I love it. Well done.
2/21/2017 c1 2KelseyNicole08
I love eliot stories! there aren't enough.. especially eliot x oc stories.. I wish someone would do a series with him and the Nurse.. I think that would be fabulous
2/8/2017 c1 Wanda
I really liked your story. Elliot is my favorite character. I would like to read more stories about him. Thanks :-)
12/26/2016 c1 26Gilbert H. Karr
I like the premise of this-especially the platforms. That concept was interesting to me, and I understood that he was dreaming. I'm not sure Eliot would be as forthcoming with Nate about his mindset as he was in this story. He's a soldier at heart, and anything that is personal can be used against him-any perceived weakness exploited, and even though he trusts the team, that training is hard to get away from.

There were also a few grammar issues, mostly having to do with word choice. Nothing a good beta reader couldn't help you with.

Overall, I really liked this story, and I'll look forward to reading your other stories.
12/20/2016 c1 Wanda
I liked your story :-)

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