for Trudging On7/28/2020 c1 TOMMY
Not bad, not bad, some spelling and grammar errors though. The piece is not very emotionally charged, which can be worked on. Surely the group had a bigger reaction to a plane crashing on them and killing 2 people than "Silently they packed what supplies survive and started walking." I like the rest, the idea is good, lots of potential, but the execution could have been better
Not bad, not bad, some spelling and grammar errors though. The piece is not very emotionally charged, which can be worked on. Surely the group had a bigger reaction to a plane crashing on them and killing 2 people than "Silently they packed what supplies survive and started walking." I like the rest, the idea is good, lots of potential, but the execution could have been better