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7/28/2020 c1 TOMMY
Not bad, not bad, some spelling and grammar errors though. The piece is not very emotionally charged, which can be worked on. Surely the group had a bigger reaction to a plane crashing on them and killing 2 people than "Silently they packed what supplies survive and started walking." I like the rest, the idea is good, lots of potential, but the execution could have been better

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