
10/25/2021 c32
4Fire Lord Zuzu
Holy shit... It's honestly been a few years since I've read or reviewed this story. Now I come back and it's over 500K words long? What the heck. XD
And to think back then I had a completely different pen name lmao. Glad to see you're still writing! Seriously, this is a major accomplishment to see how far this story's come. Honestly, it's insane lol.
I wish you good luck in further updates! Have a good one.

Holy shit... It's honestly been a few years since I've read or reviewed this story. Now I come back and it's over 500K words long? What the heck. XD
And to think back then I had a completely different pen name lmao. Glad to see you're still writing! Seriously, this is a major accomplishment to see how far this story's come. Honestly, it's insane lol.
I wish you good luck in further updates! Have a good one.
10/23/2021 c10 Miideokor
Did you just shove a highly unrealistic weather disaster into the middle of an incest romance story just so you can bash "the bad orange man." I address because 1) one could forgive all the surface level political mudslinging until Lisa's bashing Trump ("Everything woke turns to shit") and b) all the cartoony shit really doesn't mix with edgy moments like Leni killing a man in cold after that guy just bashed another man's head in.
And yes BewareTheBear, Leni surviving that tornado just like how Luna and Lincoln managed was fucking bullshit thank for pointing to the everyone just gushing over this chapter because of '''emotions'''. This has nothing to do with "get politics out fiction and entertainment", I am not arguing that. I am saying your shit politics inserted a scenario you could only found in fiction, puling on the heartstrings so hard I'm surprised the baby wasn't dead, and mouthpieces so wooden that they put the wood in Hollywood.
Did you just shove a highly unrealistic weather disaster into the middle of an incest romance story just so you can bash "the bad orange man." I address because 1) one could forgive all the surface level political mudslinging until Lisa's bashing Trump ("Everything woke turns to shit") and b) all the cartoony shit really doesn't mix with edgy moments like Leni killing a man in cold after that guy just bashed another man's head in.
And yes BewareTheBear, Leni surviving that tornado just like how Luna and Lincoln managed was fucking bullshit thank for pointing to the everyone just gushing over this chapter because of '''emotions'''. This has nothing to do with "get politics out fiction and entertainment", I am not arguing that. I am saying your shit politics inserted a scenario you could only found in fiction, puling on the heartstrings so hard I'm surprised the baby wasn't dead, and mouthpieces so wooden that they put the wood in Hollywood.
9/24/2021 c17
3LucklessBlock86
I used to read this story in my sophomore year of high school, I lost touch with bbn it, but I found this story again last week and I've read it from the start again. This has always been one of my favorite stories. I've cried and laughed to this story. 'Every Time We Touch' is my new favorite song and I find the political stuff funny. C-137 is pretty funny, I didn't understand that the first time I read, but I do now.

I used to read this story in my sophomore year of high school, I lost touch with bbn it, but I found this story again last week and I've read it from the start again. This has always been one of my favorite stories. I've cried and laughed to this story. 'Every Time We Touch' is my new favorite song and I find the political stuff funny. C-137 is pretty funny, I didn't understand that the first time I read, but I do now.
9/2/2021 c10
5Takamura Rules
This is my honest criticism here. I'm not totally caught up with your story, but the Tornado kinda sucked away my emersion. (Pun not intended(#Luanwouldbepround)) the scale you made the tornado is just frankly was too big. I know you wanted to stress how bad it was but you made the tornado make Hurricane Katrina look tame which is simply not possible for a tornado, especially with modern US infrastructure around a major city especially one right out side of tornado alley. I think you should have just stuck with deadliest tornado instead of going for "worst US disaster" and the point would have still struck home. I think your death toll as well should have been lower to at least 700 or 650 if you wanted to go that angle. I feel like you wanted to ratchet up the stakes to portray the severity of the situation but you already did that with character death, adding that on top of it is just over the top

This is my honest criticism here. I'm not totally caught up with your story, but the Tornado kinda sucked away my emersion. (Pun not intended(#Luanwouldbepround)) the scale you made the tornado is just frankly was too big. I know you wanted to stress how bad it was but you made the tornado make Hurricane Katrina look tame which is simply not possible for a tornado, especially with modern US infrastructure around a major city especially one right out side of tornado alley. I think you should have just stuck with deadliest tornado instead of going for "worst US disaster" and the point would have still struck home. I think your death toll as well should have been lower to at least 700 or 650 if you wanted to go that angle. I feel like you wanted to ratchet up the stakes to portray the severity of the situation but you already did that with character death, adding that on top of it is just over the top
8/5/2021 c32
2nuuo
Awesome to see updates! I'm stuck back in chapter 20 I think, sad I'm not following but the story was so good I took a break from reading if that makes sense.

Awesome to see updates! I'm stuck back in chapter 20 I think, sad I'm not following but the story was so good I took a break from reading if that makes sense.
8/4/2021 c32
3Nobody245
Well there was a lot more meat to this chapter than other ones. And it seems like Lincoln is going to have some relationship troubles soon. Technically so can Luna if she and Luan do something under the drugs (well, more that what happened already.) And who's this guy who just appear at the door? Could they still be under the drugs and not know it.
In any case, glad to see a new chapter and I look forward to the next one whenever it comes out.

Well there was a lot more meat to this chapter than other ones. And it seems like Lincoln is going to have some relationship troubles soon. Technically so can Luna if she and Luan do something under the drugs (well, more that what happened already.) And who's this guy who just appear at the door? Could they still be under the drugs and not know it.
In any case, glad to see a new chapter and I look forward to the next one whenever it comes out.
8/4/2021 c32 Keo namikaze
So many long waiting time finally lincoln has fun with lynn..hehehe and the best way to unite the fraternal lasos ... I hope the next one is luan.
So many long waiting time finally lincoln has fun with lynn..hehehe and the best way to unite the fraternal lasos ... I hope the next one is luan.
8/4/2021 c32 MDM11
I can’t wait for your next upload and I hope next chapter has some lemons involving Lincoln and Luan and Lincoln and Luna and this is my favorite fic on this website so can’t wait for more btw I’ve been reading this story since chapter 3 first came out I really love this story
I can’t wait for your next upload and I hope next chapter has some lemons involving Lincoln and Luan and Lincoln and Luna and this is my favorite fic on this website so can’t wait for more btw I’ve been reading this story since chapter 3 first came out I really love this story
8/4/2021 c32
13364wii
I remember that art also holy spit Linc and Lynn jr man this chapter had it all.

I remember that art also holy spit Linc and Lynn jr man this chapter had it all.
8/4/2021 c32 yami15147
I'm starting to wonder if the writer is on drugs now this chapter was great, also welcome back.
I'm starting to wonder if the writer is on drugs now this chapter was great, also welcome back.
8/4/2021 c32 Jeff
Well, at least Lincoln and Lynn didn't get hurt during that acid trip, although with that really steamy moment they had at the end of the chapter, Lincoln'll probably feel incredibly guilty given that he's already in a relationship with Luna.
Well, at least Lincoln and Lynn didn't get hurt during that acid trip, although with that really steamy moment they had at the end of the chapter, Lincoln'll probably feel incredibly guilty given that he's already in a relationship with Luna.
8/4/2021 c32 Yidi
Glad you're back man! I enjoyed the chapter and am looking forward to what happens next. You're the best, dude.
Glad you're back man! I enjoyed the chapter and am looking forward to what happens next. You're the best, dude.