for Rias' Black Knight8/28 c13 Guest
I love this story! I am looking forward to the next chapter being lRiser’s beat down and defeat at Issei’s hands/claws. Maybe have Russ’ older brother Have Lelouch join the fight and expose his true identity and power- Somehow, bringing back the power of his geass to its full potential, And potentially switched the wedding to be for Shirone and Lelouch as a twist. Please continue the story, there is still the Ophir issue to be resolved as well. I hope you have many more chapters to come!
Best regards,
V
I love this story! I am looking forward to the next chapter being lRiser’s beat down and defeat at Issei’s hands/claws. Maybe have Russ’ older brother Have Lelouch join the fight and expose his true identity and power- Somehow, bringing back the power of his geass to its full potential, And potentially switched the wedding to be for Shirone and Lelouch as a twist. Please continue the story, there is still the Ophir issue to be resolved as well. I hope you have many more chapters to come!
Best regards,
V
8/15 c13 
1VincentFS
Very lame way to end the fight. I genuinely feel like Lelouch has made zero progress because you decide to always have him exhausted three paragraphs into a battle. It’s underwhelming and even pathetic at some points.
I’m interested in seeing him develop, but considering you haven’t updated the story in over a year, this waste of reading is all I have to go on. So, Lelouch is ultimately just a waste of space who had absolutely no impact on base DxD’s overarching story.
Wow.
1VincentFSVery lame way to end the fight. I genuinely feel like Lelouch has made zero progress because you decide to always have him exhausted three paragraphs into a battle. It’s underwhelming and even pathetic at some points.
I’m interested in seeing him develop, but considering you haven’t updated the story in over a year, this waste of reading is all I have to go on. So, Lelouch is ultimately just a waste of space who had absolutely no impact on base DxD’s overarching story.
Wow.
8/15 c3 VincentFS
“You’ve finally awakened. Don’t forget your power, young Demon Emperor.”
Your letter jungle doesn’t have power over one who grew up with pagers and early 2000 texting.
“You’ve finally awakened. Don’t forget your power, young Demon Emperor.”
Your letter jungle doesn’t have power over one who grew up with pagers and early 2000 texting.
8/1 c1 killadomain
you made lelouch a slave. the man who sacrificed his own life so people can be free and you made him a useless ass slave.
you made lelouch a slave. the man who sacrificed his own life so people can be free and you made him a useless ass slave.
1/27 c1 Zepolmoon
Great so far, will Lelouch have his Geass as a devil? Does he even have ir in this world, or is that black armor from his dream his new ability? Or will he have both?
Great so far, will Lelouch have his Geass as a devil? Does he even have ir in this world, or is that black armor from his dream his new ability? Or will he have both?
8/5/2023 c13 QuinkingEmperorLelouch
I hope that at some point this story (which is fantastic btw) gets continued. You're honestly gifted when it comes to keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.
I hope that at some point this story (which is fantastic btw) gets continued. You're honestly gifted when it comes to keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.
7/9/2023 c13 andreevmix111
it’s already becoming uncomfortable from Lelouch’s self-reflection - he was always quite balanced, and only when something really shocked him confused him. The action with Koneko seems rather forced to me. And I don’t know why Issei exists here at all, he could be replaced by Lelouch alone.
it’s already becoming uncomfortable from Lelouch’s self-reflection - he was always quite balanced, and only when something really shocked him confused him. The action with Koneko seems rather forced to me. And I don’t know why Issei exists here at all, he could be replaced by Lelouch alone.
6/24/2023 c2 Onion-00
oi, give him some mature waifus, MCs who's main interest is koneko are closet pedophiles
oi, give him some mature waifus, MCs who's main interest is koneko are closet pedophiles
6/21/2023 c10 9Tri-Edge
Huh, so Lelouch wouldn't have died even if he wasn't resurrected as a devil. That has to sting, know that he'd have been free. Anyway, what's up with all thing sudden angst? It's beyond melodramatic at this point. Especially when you write Lelouch flip-flopping between moping for himself, getting over it, and then going right back to it.
9Tri-EdgeHuh, so Lelouch wouldn't have died even if he wasn't resurrected as a devil. That has to sting, know that he'd have been free. Anyway, what's up with all thing sudden angst? It's beyond melodramatic at this point. Especially when you write Lelouch flip-flopping between moping for himself, getting over it, and then going right back to it.
6/21/2023 c9 Tri-Edge
Okay, the whole "empowerment" shtick with the Seven Deadly Sins was an interesting concept, but now it's just boring. Really, all it does it make Lelouch into an edge-lord and "lose control" of himself. I almost just skipped right past all that cringe.
Ophis is interesting though. What exactly has she been "waiting" for? And what is it that Lelouch apparently doesn't remember?
Okay, the whole "empowerment" shtick with the Seven Deadly Sins was an interesting concept, but now it's just boring. Really, all it does it make Lelouch into an edge-lord and "lose control" of himself. I almost just skipped right past all that cringe.
Ophis is interesting though. What exactly has she been "waiting" for? And what is it that Lelouch apparently doesn't remember?
6/21/2023 c6 Tri-Edge
This chapter brought to my attention the rating games, and the opportunity they represent for Lelouch. It would be bizarre if he doesn't attempt a play for freedom in exchange for helping Rias win.
This chapter brought to my attention the rating games, and the opportunity they represent for Lelouch. It would be bizarre if he doesn't attempt a play for freedom in exchange for helping Rias win.
6/21/2023 c5 Tri-Edge
Bit of an odd decision to start this chapter off by unnecessarily describing Lelouch's current outfit.
I didn't really like the fight scene either. Canon Lelouch tread a fine line between being dramatic, and being cringe. After this chapter? I cannot say you've successfully emulated that. This was pretty needlessly edgy and entirely cringe-filled. From the dialogue to the action, it was near unbearably bad.
The scene with Kiba and Lelouch hashing things out though, while needing refinement, was pretty enjoyable. It's almost pretty interesting how you involved the Infinity Dragon.
Bit of an odd decision to start this chapter off by unnecessarily describing Lelouch's current outfit.
I didn't really like the fight scene either. Canon Lelouch tread a fine line between being dramatic, and being cringe. After this chapter? I cannot say you've successfully emulated that. This was pretty needlessly edgy and entirely cringe-filled. From the dialogue to the action, it was near unbearably bad.
The scene with Kiba and Lelouch hashing things out though, while needing refinement, was pretty enjoyable. It's almost pretty interesting how you involved the Infinity Dragon.
6/21/2023 c4 Tri-Edge
Uh. I kind of liked the conversation between Konek and Lelouch, and I kind of didn't? A lot of it was way too on the nose and full of cliches and the likes; even what wasn't, was all over the place and not at all fitting with the tone of the scene. I did like the intimacy of it all though.
On a different topic: going in depth on the "percentages" of power used and similar mechanics is a pitfall. Not only are you going to severely limit yourself, but you're also depriving creative potential by halfheartedly doing so; it would be one thing if you had gone into true detail, but you did not.
Now it just comes across as a cliche plot device to excuse Lelouch's successes and victories.
Anyway, bit of a curious choice in having Lelouch's defining sin be Wrath rather than Pride. I'm amicable to it though. Also, you might want to take a look at these last few chapters. There are a fair few typos, grammatical errors, and mistakes in punctuation.
Uh. I kind of liked the conversation between Konek and Lelouch, and I kind of didn't? A lot of it was way too on the nose and full of cliches and the likes; even what wasn't, was all over the place and not at all fitting with the tone of the scene. I did like the intimacy of it all though.
On a different topic: going in depth on the "percentages" of power used and similar mechanics is a pitfall. Not only are you going to severely limit yourself, but you're also depriving creative potential by halfheartedly doing so; it would be one thing if you had gone into true detail, but you did not.
Now it just comes across as a cliche plot device to excuse Lelouch's successes and victories.
Anyway, bit of a curious choice in having Lelouch's defining sin be Wrath rather than Pride. I'm amicable to it though. Also, you might want to take a look at these last few chapters. There are a fair few typos, grammatical errors, and mistakes in punctuation.
6/21/2023 c3 Tri-Edge
Lelouch's interal dialogue after Koneko's loaded question about betrayal was rather lackluster. It doesn't seem quite right for him to be so seemingly attached this soon.
Lelouch's interal dialogue after Koneko's loaded question about betrayal was rather lackluster. It doesn't seem quite right for him to be so seemingly attached this soon.
6/21/2023 c2 Tri-Edge
You have a problem with head-hopping from character to character in any given scene, in a story that is clearly meant to me third-person limited and not omniscient.
You have a problem with head-hopping from character to character in any given scene, in a story that is clearly meant to me third-person limited and not omniscient.