for The Third Blonde Of Ryozanpaku8/30/2017 c1 Jose19
I don't know how are you removing his chakra from Naruto because it has been said that people from the Elemental Nations when their chakra is removed would simply die because having no chakra from his world you might be dead to anybody.
I don't know how are you removing his chakra from Naruto because it has been said that people from the Elemental Nations when their chakra is removed would simply die because having no chakra from his world you might be dead to anybody.
8/19/2017 c1 Kid Coheed
Really good start, but it will need help in the future with more descriptions of things and people. Don't be afraid to have more solemn moments. Oddly enough I hope the Group sets him up with a sensei outside Ryozanpaku, why?
Well for one it would differentiate Naruto from Kenichi by giving them separate fighting styles, especially if your going with the Canon that Naruto's fighting style was basic and relied on Clones and unpredictability. Clones which are now out of play.
The second is to find a fighting style more inline with Naruto himself rather than Kenichi's rote memorization and his ability to essentially jury-rig moves together. Naruto would be at home with Jeet Kune Do, the fighting style made by Bruce Lee which is based around the idea of formless fighting (possibly taught by a Bruce Analog OC) or Maybe Naruto is forced to Trek into town everyday after school and find some Monk to each him 5 Animal Style. Or a Old Person from the Philippines who teaches him Eskirma/Arnis/Kali.
I'll suggest a pairing later once the story gets rolling, but really I got two ideas and neither are Miu or Shigure.
Really good start, but it will need help in the future with more descriptions of things and people. Don't be afraid to have more solemn moments. Oddly enough I hope the Group sets him up with a sensei outside Ryozanpaku, why?
Well for one it would differentiate Naruto from Kenichi by giving them separate fighting styles, especially if your going with the Canon that Naruto's fighting style was basic and relied on Clones and unpredictability. Clones which are now out of play.
The second is to find a fighting style more inline with Naruto himself rather than Kenichi's rote memorization and his ability to essentially jury-rig moves together. Naruto would be at home with Jeet Kune Do, the fighting style made by Bruce Lee which is based around the idea of formless fighting (possibly taught by a Bruce Analog OC) or Maybe Naruto is forced to Trek into town everyday after school and find some Monk to each him 5 Animal Style. Or a Old Person from the Philippines who teaches him Eskirma/Arnis/Kali.
I'll suggest a pairing later once the story gets rolling, but really I got two ideas and neither are Miu or Shigure.
2/17/2017 c1 TheYinYang
This story is great as I have searched and not many people have sent a powerful and experienced Naruto to the new world, maybe if you can continue with he story (please do continue) make Naruto have to go the school and do amazing feat?
This story is great as I have searched and not many people have sent a powerful and experienced Naruto to the new world, maybe if you can continue with he story (please do continue) make Naruto have to go the school and do amazing feat?
2/6/2017 c1 Kitsune-no-Megami22
Good first chapter! If you do pair Naruto up with someone please don't make it a harem as I have read too many of them. I would like to maybe read a Naruto x Kisara or a Naruto x Shigure fic! Hope you update soon x
Good first chapter! If you do pair Naruto up with someone please don't make it a harem as I have read too many of them. I would like to maybe read a Naruto x Kisara or a Naruto x Shigure fic! Hope you update soon x
1/26/2017 c1 Guest
Pls continue writing u hav done a good job till now
Pls continue writing u hav done a good job till now
151/4/2017 c1 d.gracey
you could pair naruto up with mui she's like a kick more powerful version of hinata
you could pair naruto up with mui she's like a kick more powerful version of hinata
12/31/2016 c1 Alucard Bellsing
It's been 200 000 millions years that Pangea doesn't exist. Or is it to go with the fact that Humans exist since only 1 million years ?
It's been 200 000 millions years that Pangea doesn't exist. Or is it to go with the fact that Humans exist since only 1 million years ?
12/30/2016 c1 Guest
Great chapter can't wait for th next update
Great chapter can't wait for th next update