for The Prince's Champion12/8/2017 c25 Beth
That would be amazing!
That would be amazing!
2/25/2017 c24 Labfan
Thank you for your story. A truly delightful read with a very satisfactory happy ending. I too would say that I enjoyed your own original writings best. The parts that were the same as the original were very jarring and stood out as a bit corny. Your storyline is better.
Thank you for your story. A truly delightful read with a very satisfactory happy ending. I too would say that I enjoyed your own original writings best. The parts that were the same as the original were very jarring and stood out as a bit corny. Your storyline is better.
2/10/2017 c24 Epilogue
Epilogue! Epilogue! Epilogue! Epilogue!
Epilogue! Epilogue! Epilogue! Epilogue!
1/30/2017 c1 
11FantasyDreamer06
I'm sorry the last chapter was confusing! I promise it's not over! there's still a few chapters left for things to get cleared up. thank you so much for reviewing!
11FantasyDreamer06I'm sorry the last chapter was confusing! I promise it's not over! there's still a few chapters left for things to get cleared up. thank you so much for reviewing!
1/29/2017 c19 Seriously
Very confusing chapter was that her mom? Why was she the last challenge? Why is Jareth Jr. Being punished? What happen to Jareth Jr. After he went to talk to his father? How did that talk go?
Very confusing chapter was that her mom? Why was she the last challenge? Why is Jareth Jr. Being punished? What happen to Jareth Jr. After he went to talk to his father? How did that talk go?
1/23/2017 c17 Valeo.Umbra
Once more a graceful chapter, I do enjoy the way you describe movement and textures!
The ending felt a little bit rushed, it would have been great to know what drove Tana to jump into the water. What was she thinking? Didn't she worry for Jareth leaving him behind or did she trust him to look after himself or maybe that he was part of the dream? In the previous chapter it seemed the pixie dream would give us more of an insight into what Tana desired.
Once more a graceful chapter, I do enjoy the way you describe movement and textures!
The ending felt a little bit rushed, it would have been great to know what drove Tana to jump into the water. What was she thinking? Didn't she worry for Jareth leaving him behind or did she trust him to look after himself or maybe that he was part of the dream? In the previous chapter it seemed the pixie dream would give us more of an insight into what Tana desired.
1/20/2017 c15 Brooke96
Ok your best writing comes when your telling your own story and not repeating the original
Tana is a great character
Ok your best writing comes when your telling your own story and not repeating the original
Tana is a great character
1/19/2017 c15 Valeo.Umbra
Really enjoyed this chapter. What do you mean by an "odd smile" would it be better to say how it made her feel instead?
Really enjoyed this chapter. What do you mean by an "odd smile" would it be better to say how it made her feel instead?
1/19/2017 c1 Valeo.Umbra
I really enjoyed this chapter, I followed you after reading another of your stories. Please continue writing. You have a very graceful writing style. If you need a beta I will happily support you!
I really enjoyed this chapter, I followed you after reading another of your stories. Please continue writing. You have a very graceful writing style. If you need a beta I will happily support you!
1/15/2017 c13 Brooke96
Honestly I just wish I had more to read it's a great story you seem on the right track to a great story
Honestly I just wish I had more to read it's a great story you seem on the right track to a great story
1/13/2017 c11 Guest
I hope Tana will defeat the labyrinth and show them all that she is as strong as Sarah was. And young Jareth would have to
sweat a lot to get her by his side. I admire Tana that she choose harder way to solve situation. I am looking forward for next chapters. Thank you much.
I hope Tana will defeat the labyrinth and show them all that she is as strong as Sarah was. And young Jareth would have to
sweat a lot to get her by his side. I admire Tana that she choose harder way to solve situation. I am looking forward for next chapters. Thank you much.
1/11/2017 c8 Not a Sandwitch
Hi! I just read all of theses chapters in a span of about an hour. I love this so far and I am extremely excited for the next chapter. Your writing is amazing! The one thing I might request is longer chapters, although that is mainly out of my own selfish need to read more. (I don't honestly mind the length of the chapters, they give just enough information and story line each time) I think the fact that a kiss was added in this chapter is fine, that seems to be young Jareth's personality, he seems to be a young womanizer with much, much less self control than his father. I'd like to see a chapter where prince Jareth again taps on her window in his owl form, would she dare let him in again? Or perhaps she'd scold him from the other side of the glass. I also really love the scenes with Sarah and Jareth (senior). They're relationship still seems to be, steamy for lack of a better word. Anyways, I know that chapter 8 was just recently updated, and seeing as this is the first time I'm reading through this story, I'm not sure what your updating schedule is, but I'd love to see more chapters very soon!
Hi! I just read all of theses chapters in a span of about an hour. I love this so far and I am extremely excited for the next chapter. Your writing is amazing! The one thing I might request is longer chapters, although that is mainly out of my own selfish need to read more. (I don't honestly mind the length of the chapters, they give just enough information and story line each time) I think the fact that a kiss was added in this chapter is fine, that seems to be young Jareth's personality, he seems to be a young womanizer with much, much less self control than his father. I'd like to see a chapter where prince Jareth again taps on her window in his owl form, would she dare let him in again? Or perhaps she'd scold him from the other side of the glass. I also really love the scenes with Sarah and Jareth (senior). They're relationship still seems to be, steamy for lack of a better word. Anyways, I know that chapter 8 was just recently updated, and seeing as this is the first time I'm reading through this story, I'm not sure what your updating schedule is, but I'd love to see more chapters very soon!