for Her Fire12/4/2017 c1 Guest
… Aaaand, now I'm hard. That was really hot and heavy.
… Aaaand, now I'm hard. That was really hot and heavy.
12/4/2017 c1 NPC Energy
"Just take off your shirt so I can hold you."
Damn, if Natsu said that to me, I'd take the shirt off, but everything else goes with it.
"Just take off your shirt so I can hold you."
Damn, if Natsu said that to me, I'd take the shirt off, but everything else goes with it.
7/6/2017 c1 Guest
That was awesome.
That was awesome.
1/9/2017 c1 
2makabees
Ayeee, I think you may wanna change the name and description thoxD it sounded like a newbies which can repel readers.
But this was well written, good job
2makabeesAyeee, I think you may wanna change the name and description thoxD it sounded like a newbies which can repel readers.
But this was well written, good job
1/9/2017 c1 Aema
Great story! As for help in the future, I honestly don't know why so many authors do this, but they focus on only one persons feelings and pleasure. You captured lucy's feelings and pleasure throughout but didn't focus on Natsu. You started to, but he pushed him off for no reason really. Basically, more details to put it simply. Great story overall regardless!
Great story! As for help in the future, I honestly don't know why so many authors do this, but they focus on only one persons feelings and pleasure. You captured lucy's feelings and pleasure throughout but didn't focus on Natsu. You started to, but he pushed him off for no reason really. Basically, more details to put it simply. Great story overall regardless!