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2TrenchcoatMan
I wouldn't be surprised if they go half the year before anyone notices Sasuke's lack of an arm. That cloak does a fair good job of hiding the the fact that it's not there, and one handed hand signs wouldn't be odd to wizards who don't know how rare that is.
It certainly took some time to get to the good part, 6 chapters, it felt like forever. It was good reading though, if not a little drawn out, but Im eager to see how these three alter the course of the book.
So, I wanna see Gaara show up with one of the other two school, but I realize how unlikely that will be. I have to wonder if Bee gets hired though. If you can write him well enough, I imagine Bee being at the school could prove to be amusing.
Since no warnings were in the AN about romance, I assume your focus won't involve it, but I was wondering if you did have any plans on working towards the Sasuke and Sakura's relationship, assuming youre keeping them canon.
So, How long til Sasuke realizes that Moody is a fake. Given how perceptive he is, and how perceptive his doujutsu is, theres no way he won't realize the signs, specially after he's researched the staff a bit. I can't imagine that he won't either. I can see Naruto and Sakura neglecting this, but not Sasuke.
when do we get to see Kurama, and will the castle's magic have any affect on him, such as being able to appear as a spectre beside Naruto or as a familiar, speaking of, I can't imagine Naruto not keeping a toad or two out when he finds out they're common in the castle.
So, how do you plan for Magic and Chakra to interact? Can the shinobi deflect magic with jutsu, how do the three powerhouses compare to the likes of Dumbledore and Voldemort? I love seeing these crossovers with the post 699 Naruto, but they can be rather OP comparatively, so Im curious on if they will be a serious threat to the death eaters or if you plan on ramping up the effectiveness of magic versus these three Shinobi.
Longer, is almost always better when it comes to story length. Theres definitely plenty more you could be adding to each chapter, but one must stick with what one is comfortable with. I do hope, as you write this, that you manage to increase chapter length. I would say, aim for 2 scenes per chapter if you could, see how that works and go from there. After all, you waited some 3 chapters to introduce the shinobi and a good bit of the extra was reusing scenes from different perspectives. Something that isnt necessarily needed to further the story. I think you could have combined all that material into one chapter just as effectively.
I love Painting Kakashi, I have to wonder when it was made and are there any other shinobi paintings, maybe the 1st is around somewhere, after all Hogwarts is much much older than Konoha, if the wizarding world was hiring shinobi all that time, then it's possible older Kages had portraits made. In fact, I could see the Kage's using portraits to communicate with the wizarding world the same way that the wizarding world did with the muggle world's prime minister.
When will Harry find out Sasuke's relation to snakes. I imagine this revelation will create quite a bit of a trust issue at first, but perhaps someone else able to speak with snakes might be a bonding point for the two. Plus i love when authors give Sasuke a snake familiar or two. Also, I could totally see there being Basilisks amongst the snake summons.
well, i'll leave ya for now, can't wait for the next chapter
-TCM
2TrenchcoatManI wouldn't be surprised if they go half the year before anyone notices Sasuke's lack of an arm. That cloak does a fair good job of hiding the the fact that it's not there, and one handed hand signs wouldn't be odd to wizards who don't know how rare that is.
It certainly took some time to get to the good part, 6 chapters, it felt like forever. It was good reading though, if not a little drawn out, but Im eager to see how these three alter the course of the book.
So, I wanna see Gaara show up with one of the other two school, but I realize how unlikely that will be. I have to wonder if Bee gets hired though. If you can write him well enough, I imagine Bee being at the school could prove to be amusing.
Since no warnings were in the AN about romance, I assume your focus won't involve it, but I was wondering if you did have any plans on working towards the Sasuke and Sakura's relationship, assuming youre keeping them canon.
So, How long til Sasuke realizes that Moody is a fake. Given how perceptive he is, and how perceptive his doujutsu is, theres no way he won't realize the signs, specially after he's researched the staff a bit. I can't imagine that he won't either. I can see Naruto and Sakura neglecting this, but not Sasuke.
when do we get to see Kurama, and will the castle's magic have any affect on him, such as being able to appear as a spectre beside Naruto or as a familiar, speaking of, I can't imagine Naruto not keeping a toad or two out when he finds out they're common in the castle.
So, how do you plan for Magic and Chakra to interact? Can the shinobi deflect magic with jutsu, how do the three powerhouses compare to the likes of Dumbledore and Voldemort? I love seeing these crossovers with the post 699 Naruto, but they can be rather OP comparatively, so Im curious on if they will be a serious threat to the death eaters or if you plan on ramping up the effectiveness of magic versus these three Shinobi.
Longer, is almost always better when it comes to story length. Theres definitely plenty more you could be adding to each chapter, but one must stick with what one is comfortable with. I do hope, as you write this, that you manage to increase chapter length. I would say, aim for 2 scenes per chapter if you could, see how that works and go from there. After all, you waited some 3 chapters to introduce the shinobi and a good bit of the extra was reusing scenes from different perspectives. Something that isnt necessarily needed to further the story. I think you could have combined all that material into one chapter just as effectively.
I love Painting Kakashi, I have to wonder when it was made and are there any other shinobi paintings, maybe the 1st is around somewhere, after all Hogwarts is much much older than Konoha, if the wizarding world was hiring shinobi all that time, then it's possible older Kages had portraits made. In fact, I could see the Kage's using portraits to communicate with the wizarding world the same way that the wizarding world did with the muggle world's prime minister.
When will Harry find out Sasuke's relation to snakes. I imagine this revelation will create quite a bit of a trust issue at first, but perhaps someone else able to speak with snakes might be a bonding point for the two. Plus i love when authors give Sasuke a snake familiar or two. Also, I could totally see there being Basilisks amongst the snake summons.
well, i'll leave ya for now, can't wait for the next chapter
-TCM
2/6/2017 c5 Guest
Naruto seems way to goofy/stupid.
Hes been in the fourth war...
Naruto seems way to goofy/stupid.
Hes been in the fourth war...
2/6/2017 c5 6shirayuki no scarlet
Wow! This is a great story! A little bit short for each chapters, but since the idea is simply amazing that's ok... Love the part 'keep those techniques under our sleeves'. But, Sasuke only has one sleeve, right?
Well, see ya in the next chapter!
6shirayuki no scarletWow! This is a great story! A little bit short for each chapters, but since the idea is simply amazing that's ok... Love the part 'keep those techniques under our sleeves'. But, Sasuke only has one sleeve, right?
Well, see ya in the next chapter!
2/6/2017 c5 5threader
I wouldn't mind the short chapters as long as you update fast. Anyway, I think you started off great and I hope to see more of your work. In my opinion, I think you should give the shinobi more subtlety and not show off their skills and crazy power-ups so the Hogwarts residents will pull their hair trying to figure out what these "magic-less" people could do. Good luck!
5threaderI wouldn't mind the short chapters as long as you update fast. Anyway, I think you started off great and I hope to see more of your work. In my opinion, I think you should give the shinobi more subtlety and not show off their skills and crazy power-ups so the Hogwarts residents will pull their hair trying to figure out what these "magic-less" people could do. Good luck!
2/4/2017 c1 JazzyTectonik
Like your idea and looking forward to seeing where you'll be taking this! I've been obsessing over Harry Potter x Naruto crossovers lately and I'm sad there aren't many good stories out there.
Like your idea and looking forward to seeing where you'll be taking this! I've been obsessing over Harry Potter x Naruto crossovers lately and I'm sad there aren't many good stories out there.
2/4/2017 c4 6Lightningblade49
Think you got team 7's social dynamic down pact, a good building chapter to explain the situation and what they need to do.
I can already see one of them jumping in during the Dragon trial, same with the underwater rescue, you could potentially make more events of your own design just for kicks.
6Lightningblade49Think you got team 7's social dynamic down pact, a good building chapter to explain the situation and what they need to do.
I can already see one of them jumping in during the Dragon trial, same with the underwater rescue, you could potentially make more events of your own design just for kicks.
2/4/2017 c3 Lightningblade49
They going to be underestimated straight up but one display of power and the little kiddies will fall into line quick smart.
They going to be underestimated straight up but one display of power and the little kiddies will fall into line quick smart.
2/4/2017 c2 Lightningblade49
They got of the strongest guys on the planet as guards and they don't even know it lol. How many of students by the end of this will want to drop Magic and be ninja's.
They got of the strongest guys on the planet as guards and they don't even know it lol. How many of students by the end of this will want to drop Magic and be ninja's.