for The Hogwarts Mission2/3/2019 c13 Phoenixx Rising
I LOVE this story! I can’t wait till you update it! I’m super excited to read how the Shinobi being here will affect the story! Keep writing! This story is amazing!
I LOVE this story! I can’t wait till you update it! I’m super excited to read how the Shinobi being here will affect the story! Keep writing! This story is amazing!
1/21/2019 c13 Guest
Hi! I wanted to say that I really like your story and I love the direction you're going with it. If I had to offer some constructive criticism, I would say that I think Naruto should be more mature by this point. His personality is a little silly but I don't think he's as bad as he used to be. Other than that, your story is going well. I can't wait for the yule ball when you get to that point! I hope the shinobi get to dance :)
Hi! I wanted to say that I really like your story and I love the direction you're going with it. If I had to offer some constructive criticism, I would say that I think Naruto should be more mature by this point. His personality is a little silly but I don't think he's as bad as he used to be. Other than that, your story is going well. I can't wait for the yule ball when you get to that point! I hope the shinobi get to dance :)
12/28/2018 c13 Corazon77
Hey,
Normally, i don't read storys that combine 2 differenent storys. Though i don't know why, they usually just don't interest me. In fact this is the first one i EVER read. And i have to say Im quite suprised i enjoy reading so much. Its a shame that you are currently stuck and I hope you find some new inspiration.
kind regards
Me
Hey,
Normally, i don't read storys that combine 2 differenent storys. Though i don't know why, they usually just don't interest me. In fact this is the first one i EVER read. And i have to say Im quite suprised i enjoy reading so much. Its a shame that you are currently stuck and I hope you find some new inspiration.
kind regards
Me
12/23/2018 c13 Guest
I understand where you're coming from when you say you have senioritis (I'm going through the same thing lol) but I suggest you include some more action from the shinobi. Maybe at one point even introduce some rogue shinobi that are working with Voldemort? It'll add to the plot and make things more interesting for both the shinobi and the wizards, and of course, the readers as well.
I understand where you're coming from when you say you have senioritis (I'm going through the same thing lol) but I suggest you include some more action from the shinobi. Maybe at one point even introduce some rogue shinobi that are working with Voldemort? It'll add to the plot and make things more interesting for both the shinobi and the wizards, and of course, the readers as well.
12/18/2018 c13 itucey
I love this story, its exactly what I've been looking for with this cross over! 3 the only thing I have to say is sometimes the pacing is a little wonky and if you are looking to add more length, slowing it down would really help! its still really good tho!
I love this story, its exactly what I've been looking for with this cross over! 3 the only thing I have to say is sometimes the pacing is a little wonky and if you are looking to add more length, slowing it down would really help! its still really good tho!
12/16/2018 c13 Guest
I’m sorry I don’t have constructive feedback, but I’m not really a writer, so... anyway, just wanted to say I really LOVE this story, and I will never forgive you if you don’t finish it. Also, if you’re getting writer’s block, you could read through the Harry Potter books and then add shinobi to random parts or something. Anyway, whatever you decide to do, make it funny! I love funny stories. Also, I think a lot of people would enjoy it if you threw some action in there as well as I’m surprised that you haven’t mentioned anything about kunais or anything (I don’t think?) since it is a Naruto fanfic. Also, I read from a few other stories that magic is just the spiritual part of chakra, so technically ninja can do magic as well, but that’s just an idea. You can do whatever you want in it. And oh wow, this is turning into the longest review I’ve ever written, but once again, I LOVE this story! Please keep writing!
I’m sorry I don’t have constructive feedback, but I’m not really a writer, so... anyway, just wanted to say I really LOVE this story, and I will never forgive you if you don’t finish it. Also, if you’re getting writer’s block, you could read through the Harry Potter books and then add shinobi to random parts or something. Anyway, whatever you decide to do, make it funny! I love funny stories. Also, I think a lot of people would enjoy it if you threw some action in there as well as I’m surprised that you haven’t mentioned anything about kunais or anything (I don’t think?) since it is a Naruto fanfic. Also, I read from a few other stories that magic is just the spiritual part of chakra, so technically ninja can do magic as well, but that’s just an idea. You can do whatever you want in it. And oh wow, this is turning into the longest review I’ve ever written, but once again, I LOVE this story! Please keep writing!
12/15/2018 c8 Guest
Naruto seems too immature
Naruto seems too immature
12/14/2018 c13 Guest
"extensive chakra usage" idk how in that scene of events anyone used their chakra extesively
"extensive chakra usage" idk how in that scene of events anyone used their chakra extesively
12/14/2018 c13 Guest
If your gonna take a while to update would you mind putting a recap somewhere cause it has been a while
If your gonna take a while to update would you mind putting a recap somewhere cause it has been a while
12/16/2018 c13 MegaKittyX
Sorry I don’t have any constructive criticism or anything, but I’m here to read, not write, so... anyway, I absolutely love this story and PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update! Oh and also, (maybe this is constructive, but I don’t know) I would love it if you included some more fight scenes in there or some action. And I don’t know if you’re going to go with the gillyweed thing or not, but I loved that part in the movie where Neville was just like “oh god! I killed Harry Potter!” After Moody shoves him in, lol. Humor is good. Humor is life. Humor is what makes stories interesting. That’s what I think anyway. And after that part where Naruto thinks that he would be more like a kid as much as possible (I think) I’m just waiting for him to pull a prank. I really really want something to happen to Snape. I don’t know why, but I really want Snape to be annoyed to hell. And I don’t know if you’re going to write about the Yule ball, but I’m just waiting for Naruto’s priceless reaction “Yule ball? What the hell is a Yule ball? What do you expect us to do? Throw around a bouncy ball all evening? I can totally do that!” And then Sakura’s expected “light” punch that sends Naruto flying, lol! (Ok, that was exaggerated, but you know what I mean.) And oh dear, this review is getting very long, but anyway, please continue to write this story and most importantly, ENJOY YOUR SPRINGTIME OF YOUTH! I can feel the inner Gai powering me! Lol.
Sorry I don’t have any constructive criticism or anything, but I’m here to read, not write, so... anyway, I absolutely love this story and PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update! Oh and also, (maybe this is constructive, but I don’t know) I would love it if you included some more fight scenes in there or some action. And I don’t know if you’re going to go with the gillyweed thing or not, but I loved that part in the movie where Neville was just like “oh god! I killed Harry Potter!” After Moody shoves him in, lol. Humor is good. Humor is life. Humor is what makes stories interesting. That’s what I think anyway. And after that part where Naruto thinks that he would be more like a kid as much as possible (I think) I’m just waiting for him to pull a prank. I really really want something to happen to Snape. I don’t know why, but I really want Snape to be annoyed to hell. And I don’t know if you’re going to write about the Yule ball, but I’m just waiting for Naruto’s priceless reaction “Yule ball? What the hell is a Yule ball? What do you expect us to do? Throw around a bouncy ball all evening? I can totally do that!” And then Sakura’s expected “light” punch that sends Naruto flying, lol! (Ok, that was exaggerated, but you know what I mean.) And oh dear, this review is getting very long, but anyway, please continue to write this story and most importantly, ENJOY YOUR SPRINGTIME OF YOUTH! I can feel the inner Gai powering me! Lol.
12/16/2018 c11 
1nautilus4357
it is your story how it changes is up to you. and you are right a new point of view can change things. people point of view it is interactions an reactions with life events.
1nautilus4357it is your story how it changes is up to you. and you are right a new point of view can change things. people point of view it is interactions an reactions with life events.