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2/14/2017 c1 Guest
Awesome story. But it doesn't make too much sense timeline wise. Marco spent 16 years in Hekapoo's dimension, which is the equilvalent of 8 mins here on Earth. So the 14 years of their daughter and Hekapoo getting pregnant would still probably be 8 mins or less. The story is still really cool and I look forward to more chapters
2/14/2017 c1 Johnny boy
Is Tom an old flame of Hekapoo or did he just steal a pair of scissors like pone head?
2/14/2017 c1 Johnny boy
Love it so much, I can understand Hekapoo wouldn't have considered to use any birth control if it was considered impossible to for her to get pregnant, like not 1 in a 100 not 1 in a 1000000 but literally impossible to get pregnant.
Anyway can't wait for the next chapter.
2/13/2017 c1 1IdeaGenerator
Well, this is going to end well. Not!

So far, I'm excited to see where you'll go with this. You had a few issues with telling and showing things a bit much as well as a few punctuation issues (and could use a bit more sentence variety near the beginning when most of the sentences start with "He..."), but those are what betas are for. And speaking about betas, I would love to lend a hand! Just send me a PM and we'll talk tomorrow. I've got to go to sleep at the moment (your chapter kept me up longer than I should have, but I don't regret a single bit about it), so hopefully we can talk together soon.
2/13/2017 c1 5Blanket of Rain
Ohohohoho... love it! I can tell this is going to be fun and chaotic :D please keep writing!
2/13/2017 c1 king cool 12
star jr?
2/13/2017 c1 Guest
2/13/2017 c1 8The Keeper of Worlds
Well dang, that's one SERIOUS whiplash to get from info-LOL. This'll be fun:-)
2/13/2017 c1 XxinfamousxX321
How can you pass up a name like Blaze?
2/13/2017 c1 XxinfamousxX321
I would've named her Blaze
2/13/2017 c1 3Guest Sorta
How about Charlotte?
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