
2/26/2017 c1 Guest 0
It wasn't too shit tbh, maybe change the ending and give it more of a twist instead of Yang getting her way. For example you could have had Yang being impressed by Jaune and flipping the story on its head Jaune could trade sexual favors for Yang's homework. But that's just my suggestion.
It wasn't too shit tbh, maybe change the ending and give it more of a twist instead of Yang getting her way. For example you could have had Yang being impressed by Jaune and flipping the story on its head Jaune could trade sexual favors for Yang's homework. But that's just my suggestion.
2/26/2017 c1 Limey
Not the type of story I'd usually enjoy, but it was well written and the scene was encompassing. Great work!
Not the type of story I'd usually enjoy, but it was well written and the scene was encompassing. Great work!