for Guardians, Wizards and Kung-Fu fighters9/25 c35 
35CMR Rosa
1. Hello Wondertown9, It's been a while. If you don't remember me, I was one of the reviewers of your story, and I'm still a big fan of it. I was going to send this message to you through Messages, but it's not working for some reason, so I decided to communicate through reviews. Anyway, I want a commission fan for your story. I want to start with the girls and their outfits in chapter 11. Can you give more details on the outfits they were wearing? I will list what they were in the chapter and the girls' names, and I would like you to write more details on their outfits.
Episode Eleven Infiltration on Torus Filney: Their outfits were composed of very simple clothing, at least by meridianite standards. A long skirt of a brownish color (some brighter, some darker) that reached all the way down to their ankles and that they had to now adjust to their waists in order to prevent it from falling. The upper part was as mundane as the lower, composed of a long-sleeved shirt made of something akin to sheep wool, only covered by a small vest that left arms uncovered and that was of the same tone as the skirt—clothing of commoners for girls trying to pass as commoners.
1) Will Vandom
2) Irma Lair
3.) Taranee Cook
4) Cornelia Hale
5) Hay Lin
6) Jade Chan
2. I was wondering if you have any ideas on the girls wearing Noble medieval outfits in the story because I would love to commission pictures of the girls in those outfits.
3. Now, on to the review of this chapter. I love what you did with Nerissa's background and showing her slow descent into a villain. Nerissa was once a popular, prideful, caring girl who loved her friends, and she and her friends became guardians. We get to see how Nerissa becomes obsessed with the guardian lifestyle to the point where she throws away her former ambitions of being a musician and living on minimum wage. Granted, she's allowed to make her own choices in life, and if she really loves to be a guardian to the point where she gives up on previous ambitions and dreams, that's her choice. Nerissa's not the only guardian who chose this magical life over life as a normal person. Halinor and Kadma chose to be sages and queens over having normal lives, while in the comics, the two of them started a children's aid organization called the Rising Star Foundation. Only Yan Lin chose to keep her roots on earth and have a normal life outside of the guardians. But Nerissa sees the flaws in the system and becomes tired of solving all these problems. And while Nerissa has a point, she takes it too far because of her resentment and because Kandrakar, while having a point, also doesn't offer some kind of compromise, instead opting only to keep the status quo. Then, we finally see her downfall, her accidental murder of Cassidy, her imprisonment, and her taking the identity of the mage.
What I love about this chapter is your use of contact from the comics and animated shows. Making the villains of season three of the comic series of W.I.T.C.H. connected to Nerissa, and that scene where Narissa is in prison and she has this realization about how selfish she was just like the Oracle wanted to happen, only for her to forget this realization because of her isolation which the Oracle did not foresee, and you mentioned Nerissa's final fate in the cartoon which might be different in the story that she is a dreamer and is ultimately alone. As someone who read the Star Wars Revenge of the Sith novelization, I also commend you for basing the story on that, and I believe you did a good job honoring that story and your story. I have a few questions I want to ask below.
1) I remember Nerissa describing Yan Lin as her best friend; I didn't see them to be particularly close in this chapter. Did you forget about Nerissa being best friends with Yan Lin, or were you saving revealing more about their friendship for another time?
2) Even though it was not shown, is it still canon that the Oracle in your version imprisoned Nerissa in hopes that she would redeem herself? As I said before, the Oracle in the cartoon in prison, Nerissa, hopes that she will realize her actions and redeem herself. The Oracle's plan succeeded and failed, and Nerissa eventually had that realization, but because of her isolation, she eventually lost the realization and doubled down on her plans and ambitions. I can imagine the Oracle's reaction when he realized his plan worked but failed simultaneously.
35CMR Rosa1. Hello Wondertown9, It's been a while. If you don't remember me, I was one of the reviewers of your story, and I'm still a big fan of it. I was going to send this message to you through Messages, but it's not working for some reason, so I decided to communicate through reviews. Anyway, I want a commission fan for your story. I want to start with the girls and their outfits in chapter 11. Can you give more details on the outfits they were wearing? I will list what they were in the chapter and the girls' names, and I would like you to write more details on their outfits.
Episode Eleven Infiltration on Torus Filney: Their outfits were composed of very simple clothing, at least by meridianite standards. A long skirt of a brownish color (some brighter, some darker) that reached all the way down to their ankles and that they had to now adjust to their waists in order to prevent it from falling. The upper part was as mundane as the lower, composed of a long-sleeved shirt made of something akin to sheep wool, only covered by a small vest that left arms uncovered and that was of the same tone as the skirt—clothing of commoners for girls trying to pass as commoners.
1) Will Vandom
2) Irma Lair
3.) Taranee Cook
4) Cornelia Hale
5) Hay Lin
6) Jade Chan
2. I was wondering if you have any ideas on the girls wearing Noble medieval outfits in the story because I would love to commission pictures of the girls in those outfits.
3. Now, on to the review of this chapter. I love what you did with Nerissa's background and showing her slow descent into a villain. Nerissa was once a popular, prideful, caring girl who loved her friends, and she and her friends became guardians. We get to see how Nerissa becomes obsessed with the guardian lifestyle to the point where she throws away her former ambitions of being a musician and living on minimum wage. Granted, she's allowed to make her own choices in life, and if she really loves to be a guardian to the point where she gives up on previous ambitions and dreams, that's her choice. Nerissa's not the only guardian who chose this magical life over life as a normal person. Halinor and Kadma chose to be sages and queens over having normal lives, while in the comics, the two of them started a children's aid organization called the Rising Star Foundation. Only Yan Lin chose to keep her roots on earth and have a normal life outside of the guardians. But Nerissa sees the flaws in the system and becomes tired of solving all these problems. And while Nerissa has a point, she takes it too far because of her resentment and because Kandrakar, while having a point, also doesn't offer some kind of compromise, instead opting only to keep the status quo. Then, we finally see her downfall, her accidental murder of Cassidy, her imprisonment, and her taking the identity of the mage.
What I love about this chapter is your use of contact from the comics and animated shows. Making the villains of season three of the comic series of W.I.T.C.H. connected to Nerissa, and that scene where Narissa is in prison and she has this realization about how selfish she was just like the Oracle wanted to happen, only for her to forget this realization because of her isolation which the Oracle did not foresee, and you mentioned Nerissa's final fate in the cartoon which might be different in the story that she is a dreamer and is ultimately alone. As someone who read the Star Wars Revenge of the Sith novelization, I also commend you for basing the story on that, and I believe you did a good job honoring that story and your story. I have a few questions I want to ask below.
1) I remember Nerissa describing Yan Lin as her best friend; I didn't see them to be particularly close in this chapter. Did you forget about Nerissa being best friends with Yan Lin, or were you saving revealing more about their friendship for another time?
2) Even though it was not shown, is it still canon that the Oracle in your version imprisoned Nerissa in hopes that she would redeem herself? As I said before, the Oracle in the cartoon in prison, Nerissa, hopes that she will realize her actions and redeem herself. The Oracle's plan succeeded and failed, and Nerissa eventually had that realization, but because of her isolation, she eventually lost the realization and doubled down on her plans and ambitions. I can imagine the Oracle's reaction when he realized his plan worked but failed simultaneously.
8/10 c36 nightmaster000
Im ashamed to admit only got around to reading this chapter like a YEAR after it's last update that's totally on me no excuses.
But all the same still really really enjoyed the chapter it was brilliant! Really just lived the focus on Jade and also under tone of mortality and how life isn't fair like with Hermeneuta or at least that was kinda vibe I got.
Plus Tracker coming into play again going after Jade while making his grudge clear was a delight to see and looking forward to seeing how his deeper grudge against the guardians compared to canon will play out come season 2.
But the meat of the chapter and my favorite part was Jade meeting the god of the shadiw realm whi even Tarakudi gives respect for Samsara. And wow ass that awesome!
As we highlight the greater consequences made by jades actions and the creature's goal and wow is that a grand nightmare waiting to happen. But god am I pumped more than ever to see Jades path play out as Samsara herald and the vow Xin Jing made to save her it really hit me right whee it hurts and love It!
But the biggest twist for me was Ben Shui the original one turning out to be the Jade emperor! Which wow did not see coming but love mixing of witch and jca lore and excited to see how it comes into play.
Especially with that ominous ending scene which gave me chill's! All together fantastic chapter and again sorry it took me so dang long to check out, rest assured this story still one of my top favorites.
Im ashamed to admit only got around to reading this chapter like a YEAR after it's last update that's totally on me no excuses.
But all the same still really really enjoyed the chapter it was brilliant! Really just lived the focus on Jade and also under tone of mortality and how life isn't fair like with Hermeneuta or at least that was kinda vibe I got.
Plus Tracker coming into play again going after Jade while making his grudge clear was a delight to see and looking forward to seeing how his deeper grudge against the guardians compared to canon will play out come season 2.
But the meat of the chapter and my favorite part was Jade meeting the god of the shadiw realm whi even Tarakudi gives respect for Samsara. And wow ass that awesome!
As we highlight the greater consequences made by jades actions and the creature's goal and wow is that a grand nightmare waiting to happen. But god am I pumped more than ever to see Jades path play out as Samsara herald and the vow Xin Jing made to save her it really hit me right whee it hurts and love It!
But the biggest twist for me was Ben Shui the original one turning out to be the Jade emperor! Which wow did not see coming but love mixing of witch and jca lore and excited to see how it comes into play.
Especially with that ominous ending scene which gave me chill's! All together fantastic chapter and again sorry it took me so dang long to check out, rest assured this story still one of my top favorites.
12/28/2023 c36 Cjknight
Looking forward to second season!
Looking forward to second season!
8/22/2023 c36 1W8W
Welcome back. My condolences, it is completely understandable that you didn't feel like writing. It is your story, if you feel that Camelot event will be better presented in another moment or form that I will not complain.
Now to the story proper.
Captain Blake words sounds reasonable.
It is nice that we see Jade escape from her POV. So she is grieving and try to cope leaving like animal so she don’t have to think about Uncle death. So she blamed herself for his death.
Tracker trap was simple but impressive. Jade had enormous advantage in power and he has he completely on his mercy. I especially like how he was talking to buy time for poison to kick in.
Her reliving deaths of her previous incarnations was interesting. Ben Shui was outright shocking revelation. So he has dark past and was more or less forced on holy man route. What's more he have way stronger connection to guardians in origine. So Murasaki was closest to pure good from all past lives.
So we finally meet Tarakudo benefactor and learn a lot of things about him. My theory was wrong. He is so powerful that he doesn't want any more power, what he wants is entry point and its goal is in itself simple. Entertainment, problem lie in fact that it is incredibly old and powerful so it's entertainment can't be good for natives. Design is really eldritch, excellent job it have Lovecraftian vibe. I was also wrong it it tempting Jade in her lowest point/desperate situation, it simply entangled her by force. In hindsight she is very clever and genre savvy so it would not be easy.
One thing that interest me is fact that it saved Jane from mark of Tarakudo worst effects before reality merge. Does it see future or it already had gap to invade universe that only grow bigger now?
She was found and taken care by good people. It nicely show struggle of little people in all this mess and show that things are far from over(even if there was no new threats was on horizon). Unknowably they also help her find a way.
Jade made herself into bait on bandits. I like that she interrogated them before showing what she can do, it give her honest confession. If slaughter is understatement than what word fit? Honestly I can't think of any philosophy or way of thinking that bandits may be using that can’t be turned against them by Jade so I find it karmic.
It is sad that she think about herself a monster as she didn't become upset about being called like that. Especially because she is not, monster find pleasure in such acts and lack compassion. She is brutal solution in brutal world.
Jackie wanting to tell everything to Captain Black may be small thing but nicely show how much he care.
I did not expect her to return home so fast.
Anyway chapter was great and well worth a wait.
It looks like each genesis of evil show different way for good person to become evil. I oversimplify but vengeance for Ludmoore, arrogance for Nerissa and straight up infection for Jade (how much her mind was affected already?). I wonder what you had in mind for Arthur/Harold , well I will have to wait and see(and hope to remember to analyze it).
Samsara is important but I don't think that we as a reader fully understand the significance yet. Although I am under impression that it is beyond good and evil.
I am surprised that by Christmas there will be already something from book 2 published as I remember you announcing hiatus. So it is very pleasant news.
1W8WWelcome back. My condolences, it is completely understandable that you didn't feel like writing. It is your story, if you feel that Camelot event will be better presented in another moment or form that I will not complain.
Now to the story proper.
Captain Blake words sounds reasonable.
It is nice that we see Jade escape from her POV. So she is grieving and try to cope leaving like animal so she don’t have to think about Uncle death. So she blamed herself for his death.
Tracker trap was simple but impressive. Jade had enormous advantage in power and he has he completely on his mercy. I especially like how he was talking to buy time for poison to kick in.
Her reliving deaths of her previous incarnations was interesting. Ben Shui was outright shocking revelation. So he has dark past and was more or less forced on holy man route. What's more he have way stronger connection to guardians in origine. So Murasaki was closest to pure good from all past lives.
So we finally meet Tarakudo benefactor and learn a lot of things about him. My theory was wrong. He is so powerful that he doesn't want any more power, what he wants is entry point and its goal is in itself simple. Entertainment, problem lie in fact that it is incredibly old and powerful so it's entertainment can't be good for natives. Design is really eldritch, excellent job it have Lovecraftian vibe. I was also wrong it it tempting Jade in her lowest point/desperate situation, it simply entangled her by force. In hindsight she is very clever and genre savvy so it would not be easy.
One thing that interest me is fact that it saved Jane from mark of Tarakudo worst effects before reality merge. Does it see future or it already had gap to invade universe that only grow bigger now?
She was found and taken care by good people. It nicely show struggle of little people in all this mess and show that things are far from over(even if there was no new threats was on horizon). Unknowably they also help her find a way.
Jade made herself into bait on bandits. I like that she interrogated them before showing what she can do, it give her honest confession. If slaughter is understatement than what word fit? Honestly I can't think of any philosophy or way of thinking that bandits may be using that can’t be turned against them by Jade so I find it karmic.
It is sad that she think about herself a monster as she didn't become upset about being called like that. Especially because she is not, monster find pleasure in such acts and lack compassion. She is brutal solution in brutal world.
Jackie wanting to tell everything to Captain Black may be small thing but nicely show how much he care.
I did not expect her to return home so fast.
Anyway chapter was great and well worth a wait.
It looks like each genesis of evil show different way for good person to become evil. I oversimplify but vengeance for Ludmoore, arrogance for Nerissa and straight up infection for Jade (how much her mind was affected already?). I wonder what you had in mind for Arthur/Harold , well I will have to wait and see(and hope to remember to analyze it).
Samsara is important but I don't think that we as a reader fully understand the significance yet. Although I am under impression that it is beyond good and evil.
I am surprised that by Christmas there will be already something from book 2 published as I remember you announcing hiatus. So it is very pleasant news.
8/17/2023 c36 64Zim'sMostLoyalServant
I perfectly understand how real life would need to come first (my condolences for your loss), but I'm still very happy to finally see this last epilogue. And while I'm disappointed that we didn't get the Camelot stuff, I'm just glad we'll finally be getting into Season 2 soon and start getting all those secondary plot threads advancing.
Anyway, both thrilled and horrified to finally get an explanation about the Master of the Cavalcade, and I don't think you should feel bad about reveal it all now - I think it works to establish it as a looming threat over everything that's going to happen next season. Especially in light of what happened in that last scene.
Also, great job handling Jade's grief and PTSD. She's still clearly not in a good place, but it's better than it was beforehand.
Keep up the good work.
Zim'sMostLoyalServant signing off.
64Zim'sMostLoyalServantI perfectly understand how real life would need to come first (my condolences for your loss), but I'm still very happy to finally see this last epilogue. And while I'm disappointed that we didn't get the Camelot stuff, I'm just glad we'll finally be getting into Season 2 soon and start getting all those secondary plot threads advancing.
Anyway, both thrilled and horrified to finally get an explanation about the Master of the Cavalcade, and I don't think you should feel bad about reveal it all now - I think it works to establish it as a looming threat over everything that's going to happen next season. Especially in light of what happened in that last scene.
Also, great job handling Jade's grief and PTSD. She's still clearly not in a good place, but it's better than it was beforehand.
Keep up the good work.
Zim'sMostLoyalServant signing off.
11/10/2022 c35 1W8W
Welcome back, nice to see new chapter of this great story.
Using "Revenge of the Sith" as inspiration is very fitting. In both cases we knew end result of hero fall and it starts because of sympathetic reasons.
I understand what you mean with opening citation but with how there are multiple possible outcomes and them being more of price Kandrakar is willing to pay does it really fall under "expecting different results"?
C.H.Y.K.N on the beginning were very similar to W.I.T.C.H. which obviously is your intent. Ok their "tutorial" is terrible, leaving girls alone. No wonder Chans were brought to tutor next generation.
Guardians are Kandrakar personal hit squad. We knew that they have skeletons in the closet. While most of early task sound unquestionably good the one with combining magic and tech is not so obvious. I can easily imagine it being bad but from what little we knew there was no malicious action.
Banshee incident was crucial in Nerissa fall but surprisingly at this stage she was still sympathetic. Her logic is sound and "that's the law" is very bad counter argument especially without explaining why law have to be like that.
You do excellent job showing that from the beginning Nerissa had "I" mentality instead of "we". Like you have said this is biggest difference between her and Will who never worked alone. Even on the beginning when she was hiding plot to steal artifacts from rest of W.I.T.C.H. she was cooperating with Jade. Now she consult whole team and that counteract excess confidence and developing delusion of one’s infallibility.
I remember how Nerissa was catching old companions using flaws of the characters, for her it would be hubris.
I was surprised with how far Cassidy and Nerissa relationship have developed. I wonder if she have in herself enough compassion to have some thoughts about analogy with Jade and Irma or it would be only another possibility of manipulation for her.
So that's how she knew about guardians ability to change into elements.
Jade emperor's fate is dark one. I wonder if it is really closest to truth or maybe it is version Nerissa would like to be truth and another glimpse of her mentality at the time.
Her actions in Creznac were grossly incompetent. Kill most of rulers and think that rest will sort this out from fear of repeat.( W.I.T.C.H. could end up do the same in Meridian if they didn't get a grip on themself fast enough.) Kandrakar complaints are very much justified her. As he complains of them not interfering into single worlds affairs I start to have impression that they had try it in the past and it have ended with great tragedy. That’s why laws are created and there are overly cautious at this regard.
I knew that Cassidy wanted well but she made big mistake. Nerissa situation make me think about drug addict and she just dangled next fix before her nose. That couldn't end well.
I was under impression that Uncle was more involved with this generation of Guardians activity but it was mostly what Yan Lin told him.
On the other hand he has good perspective on Nerissa and this short confrontation was more than I expected before tragedy. It put his death in new light.
Tragedy is excellent word because for how angry and violent Nerissa have become she never wanted to hurt Cassidy. I really like how after the dead there was time when Nerissa could find redemption but nobody tried to help (with image she created it can be understood, they thought that she is worse than she really was at the time) her until she galvanized in hers self righteousness. Another of Kandrakar fack ups. What was even their goal in imprisoning her for rest of her life?
Nerissa said that she hate meaningless death so Cassidy is big motivation for her. She can't surrender because it would make this death meaningless and guilt would crash her. Of course when it was still possibility of redemption she could paint this tragedy as even that open her eyes to he own vices.
From the beginning I was expecting that “Power doesn’t corrupt, it reveals.” is motive of this chapter and while it was in other words even Nerissa admitted it. (I much prefer it over "power corrupts; absolute power corrupts absolutely".)
Your writing is excellent so I am sure that those changes will work. Upcoming chapters sound really interesting but title of last one really worry me. All other epilogue are about characters who start good and fall was initiated by good intentions (still not sure how dark Harold is and initially was but he give such impression) which don't bodes well for Jade.
1W8WWelcome back, nice to see new chapter of this great story.
Using "Revenge of the Sith" as inspiration is very fitting. In both cases we knew end result of hero fall and it starts because of sympathetic reasons.
I understand what you mean with opening citation but with how there are multiple possible outcomes and them being more of price Kandrakar is willing to pay does it really fall under "expecting different results"?
C.H.Y.K.N on the beginning were very similar to W.I.T.C.H. which obviously is your intent. Ok their "tutorial" is terrible, leaving girls alone. No wonder Chans were brought to tutor next generation.
Guardians are Kandrakar personal hit squad. We knew that they have skeletons in the closet. While most of early task sound unquestionably good the one with combining magic and tech is not so obvious. I can easily imagine it being bad but from what little we knew there was no malicious action.
Banshee incident was crucial in Nerissa fall but surprisingly at this stage she was still sympathetic. Her logic is sound and "that's the law" is very bad counter argument especially without explaining why law have to be like that.
You do excellent job showing that from the beginning Nerissa had "I" mentality instead of "we". Like you have said this is biggest difference between her and Will who never worked alone. Even on the beginning when she was hiding plot to steal artifacts from rest of W.I.T.C.H. she was cooperating with Jade. Now she consult whole team and that counteract excess confidence and developing delusion of one’s infallibility.
I remember how Nerissa was catching old companions using flaws of the characters, for her it would be hubris.
I was surprised with how far Cassidy and Nerissa relationship have developed. I wonder if she have in herself enough compassion to have some thoughts about analogy with Jade and Irma or it would be only another possibility of manipulation for her.
So that's how she knew about guardians ability to change into elements.
Jade emperor's fate is dark one. I wonder if it is really closest to truth or maybe it is version Nerissa would like to be truth and another glimpse of her mentality at the time.
Her actions in Creznac were grossly incompetent. Kill most of rulers and think that rest will sort this out from fear of repeat.( W.I.T.C.H. could end up do the same in Meridian if they didn't get a grip on themself fast enough.) Kandrakar complaints are very much justified her. As he complains of them not interfering into single worlds affairs I start to have impression that they had try it in the past and it have ended with great tragedy. That’s why laws are created and there are overly cautious at this regard.
I knew that Cassidy wanted well but she made big mistake. Nerissa situation make me think about drug addict and she just dangled next fix before her nose. That couldn't end well.
I was under impression that Uncle was more involved with this generation of Guardians activity but it was mostly what Yan Lin told him.
On the other hand he has good perspective on Nerissa and this short confrontation was more than I expected before tragedy. It put his death in new light.
Tragedy is excellent word because for how angry and violent Nerissa have become she never wanted to hurt Cassidy. I really like how after the dead there was time when Nerissa could find redemption but nobody tried to help (with image she created it can be understood, they thought that she is worse than she really was at the time) her until she galvanized in hers self righteousness. Another of Kandrakar fack ups. What was even their goal in imprisoning her for rest of her life?
Nerissa said that she hate meaningless death so Cassidy is big motivation for her. She can't surrender because it would make this death meaningless and guilt would crash her. Of course when it was still possibility of redemption she could paint this tragedy as even that open her eyes to he own vices.
From the beginning I was expecting that “Power doesn’t corrupt, it reveals.” is motive of this chapter and while it was in other words even Nerissa admitted it. (I much prefer it over "power corrupts; absolute power corrupts absolutely".)
Your writing is excellent so I am sure that those changes will work. Upcoming chapters sound really interesting but title of last one really worry me. All other epilogue are about characters who start good and fall was initiated by good intentions (still not sure how dark Harold is and initially was but he give such impression) which don't bodes well for Jade.
11/9/2022 c35 64Zim'sMostLoyalServant
I like the new format you used for this chapter. It definitely fits the whole backstory recap nature of the chapter.
Truly, Nerissa is a tragic villain, whose obsession with her power and what she could do with it destroying what she loved most and leaving her too unwilling to admit her faults and take redemption when it was offered to her. And I love how you expanded on her origins to show the details of her fall to evil.
It was also great to see Uncle's past as a friend to the old Guardians.
Keep up the good work.
Zim'sMostLoyalServant signing off.
64Zim'sMostLoyalServantI like the new format you used for this chapter. It definitely fits the whole backstory recap nature of the chapter.
Truly, Nerissa is a tragic villain, whose obsession with her power and what she could do with it destroying what she loved most and leaving her too unwilling to admit her faults and take redemption when it was offered to her. And I love how you expanded on her origins to show the details of her fall to evil.
It was also great to see Uncle's past as a friend to the old Guardians.
Keep up the good work.
Zim'sMostLoyalServant signing off.
11/9/2022 c35 1Secundum
Honestly, I think Nerissa was the hero unjustly wronged. Down with Kandrakar!
1SecundumHonestly, I think Nerissa was the hero unjustly wronged. Down with Kandrakar!
11/8/2022 c35 10w.i.t.c.h.aholic
I left the review under Guest before because I wasn't logged in. You did a great job with her backstory and I'd love to know your opinion on a WITCH reboot.
10w.i.t.c.h.aholicI left the review under Guest before because I wasn't logged in. You did a great job with her backstory and I'd love to know your opinion on a WITCH reboot.
11/8/2022 c35 nightmaster000
I LOVED IT! :)
Really just loved the hightlight and depth in Nerissa mindset and origins you really played it so perfectly. Plus the new narrative style for this chapter (Which was awesome btw~) meshed fantastic with this chapters theme/plot.
I really do enjoy the lore of fallen heroine and her steady "fall" into "corruption", what's really spectacular is you can from what's said in the background her own viewpoint that it truly wasn't a overnight thing but that it was building up and coming for a long time.
Another part I loved was seeing some also spotlight on the previous Guardian generation history not to mention Uncle (May the wise mentor rest peacefully.).
It certainly makes sense that brutal confrontation with Nerissa and how he failed to save Cassidy left it's mark on him, and was one of his greatest regrets. As well as the parts this all played in not only Uncles path going forward following this but the rest of the surviving Guardians.
Her romance and relationship with Cassidy and learning how they went from friends to so much more was really very enjoyable, with the tragic ending of their romance making it all the better.
Also loved the inspiration you took from Star Wars a very nice touch, and works so well with Nerrisa origins.
All together this was truly another spectacular, as always you never fail to amaze with fantastic chapers filled with such depth that sucks me right into the chapter/fic. :)
As always I certainly look forward to your next update. :)
I also wish you the best on your side of things in real life, really hope your relative gets better, and wish you the best on your book i'm sure it'll be epic! :)
I LOVED IT! :)
Really just loved the hightlight and depth in Nerissa mindset and origins you really played it so perfectly. Plus the new narrative style for this chapter (Which was awesome btw~) meshed fantastic with this chapters theme/plot.
I really do enjoy the lore of fallen heroine and her steady "fall" into "corruption", what's really spectacular is you can from what's said in the background her own viewpoint that it truly wasn't a overnight thing but that it was building up and coming for a long time.
Another part I loved was seeing some also spotlight on the previous Guardian generation history not to mention Uncle (May the wise mentor rest peacefully.).
It certainly makes sense that brutal confrontation with Nerissa and how he failed to save Cassidy left it's mark on him, and was one of his greatest regrets. As well as the parts this all played in not only Uncles path going forward following this but the rest of the surviving Guardians.
Her romance and relationship with Cassidy and learning how they went from friends to so much more was really very enjoyable, with the tragic ending of their romance making it all the better.
Also loved the inspiration you took from Star Wars a very nice touch, and works so well with Nerrisa origins.
All together this was truly another spectacular, as always you never fail to amaze with fantastic chapers filled with such depth that sucks me right into the chapter/fic. :)
As always I certainly look forward to your next update. :)
I also wish you the best on your side of things in real life, really hope your relative gets better, and wish you the best on your book i'm sure it'll be epic! :)
11/8/2022 c35 Guest
It's always great to see other people's backstories for characters like Nerissa. What do you think of a WITCH reboot? I think this is one franchise that should get one because of all the plot holes and things and it would be great if us fans could get together to make it happen, but it wouldn't be great if Disney did things like race swapping.
It's always great to see other people's backstories for characters like Nerissa. What do you think of a WITCH reboot? I think this is one franchise that should get one because of all the plot holes and things and it would be great if us fans could get together to make it happen, but it wouldn't be great if Disney did things like race swapping.
3/26/2022 c33 15Vanessa Masters
Uncle gone, wow.
I can't say I'm surprised.
How this fic goes, pulls you in all directions.
Also, minute.
Hmmmm. What will she do with free reign, also, I wonder if there'll be a confrontation between her and Harold soon.
15Vanessa MastersUncle gone, wow.
I can't say I'm surprised.
How this fic goes, pulls you in all directions.
Also, minute.
Hmmmm. What will she do with free reign, also, I wonder if there'll be a confrontation between her and Harold soon.