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1/2/2019 c1 23xIcyChanx
Omg I looved this! Laughed so much! Long time no speak, you! Glad you're back to writing, and it's awesome as always xxx
6/10/2018 c2 Digimon4all
Worth the wait, I needed a good laugh today! Assisting a stray dog, that is how I'd get caught in real life too. There were some minor spelling errors I noticed towards the beginning, but not too much to distract from the story's main focus. Thanks for another great chapter!
6/1/2018 c2 38LiveAndLetRain
Black Hayate is the best boy.
5/30/2018 c2 25MondayVibes
Hey! You're writing again! That's awesome! :)

This is just delightful. The interactions that we hear in the background of the kidnapper's phone call with Roy is absolutely hilarious; not only does it give the reader some insight as to why Roy and the team are so lax about Edward's kidnapping, but it does so in such a casual way that's really consistent with the tone of the rest of the story. And of course, Edward's short rant is wonderfully on point, too.

The only thing I'd suggest is to keep a close is on how much information you're presenting in each sentence. Once the story gets going, it's fine, but the opening sentences were quite expositional, and the information they offered were quite dense; it made those first few sentences a bit hard to follow.

Cheers! :)
xCxBxBx

PS. Please tell me you've heard about the remains they covered in Pompeii, where the man escaped from the Vesuvius' fumes and stuff, only to have his head crushed by a massive stone.
5/30/2018 c2 8NikkiS71
Oh, that was genius! Using Black Hayate like a search beacon to find Ed! Criminals are so stupid! LOL! That's why they get caught in the end!

Great job! Nice to see you got your mojo going! LOL!
B reading U!
5/29/2018 c2 1miaindygypsy
Wow... I have a feeling if dogs could make troll faces Hayate would be making at Lucas. Everything was wonderful! I’m wondering what idiot is gonna do this next... and who would stop this person. The whole Bradley stuff was hilarious... makes me wonder how crazy he would seem to the criminals while rescuing Ed. Keep this up! I wanna see more of these idiots and how the crazy people who know Ed save him
5/29/2018 c2 82Novirp13
At least this one kidnapper is not that stupid than the other one :'D
Hayate is just smart~
5/29/2018 c2 89Star-The-Writer
Hayata would be the best soldier XD
5/29/2018 c2 ScarletRoofs
No need to look for thugs when they call ahead, lol. I loved those calls! Great chapter!
3/6/2018 c1 Digimon4all
I feel like this is a story premise that I've been missing out on for this series. The Elrics had enough shenanigans going on outside of the main plotline that your story perfectly fits the realm of possibilities. Banter between Ed and Roy was classic and packaging the experience from the perspective of a non-main character drew me in deeper. Thank you for a humorous first chapter, I look forward to future chapters whenever you release them!
8/30/2017 c1 LeChick
I can totally see Fullmetal and Mustang jackass-ing someone into submission. This is beautiful. I would love to see the other prisoners stories
8/2/2017 c1 1miaindygypsy
I can't tell who I liked better: John, Roy, or Ed. They were perfect! Please write more! I would like to see Al get involved somehow in the next chapter. I already have an idea of how he could be in it, but it's your story, so write whatever the heck you want
7/11/2017 c1 Jeikond
Yes!
7/1/2017 c1 Cora8500
Perfect! I could see this actually happening in the anime! Please make more like this. I would like to see Al and/or more of Hawkeye in the next one if you don't mind. Thank you for reading this!
3/11/2017 c1 8NikkiS71
I so knew it! As I was reading this, when the call went thought to Mustang I was thinking... Now, how stupid was this seasoned kidnapper supposed to be? Didn't he know the longer your on the phone, the quicker they can run a trace and catch your dumb ass? I mean, I'm lmfao thinking of how stupid Harvest is not to be able to see through Roy and Ed's banter! A deaf person could tell Roy was up to something!

Next idiot in the Mustang/Elric anonymous group, please! LOL!

B reading U!

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