for The Dark Knight Of Chiba9/20/2021 c11 MountainBookSage25
Okay
Got a lot of flaws with the grammar and dialogue here
Still gonna read anyway
This is the only fic with a BatGaya here
Okay
Got a lot of flaws with the grammar and dialogue here
Still gonna read anyway
This is the only fic with a BatGaya here
7/7/2021 c52 Mistersnx
Batman has Yandere? Hachiman… you have female joker on ya, your yandere more cra cra
Batman has Yandere? Hachiman… you have female joker on ya, your yandere more cra cra
7/7/2021 c28 Mistersnx
I just found gold, thank you Author I like how you use Batmans crime gallery in this and make it Hachiman crime gallery
I just found gold, thank you Author I like how you use Batmans crime gallery in this and make it Hachiman crime gallery
7/7/2021 c58 Aerocar03
thanks for informing about the sequel coz I had a bit of confusion as the story ends in chp 52 but in Adventure continues which you had previously announced as the sequel, the time wrap was confusing and the link between them was quite weak. However I would like to see more of the Adventure Continues too as a side story too if you will write more. Thanks for this story by the way...loved it.
thanks for informing about the sequel coz I had a bit of confusion as the story ends in chp 52 but in Adventure continues which you had previously announced as the sequel, the time wrap was confusing and the link between them was quite weak. However I would like to see more of the Adventure Continues too as a side story too if you will write more. Thanks for this story by the way...loved it.
7/6/2021 c58 misterfishy
It feels better, smoother.
Except the parts when native Japanese thinks about "God". It really sticks out to me. AFAIK, Hachiman isn't a Christian and Japan Christianity in general wasn't widespread enough that such words would be common expressions.
But overall, definitely an improvement.
It feels better, smoother.
Except the parts when native Japanese thinks about "God". It really sticks out to me. AFAIK, Hachiman isn't a Christian and Japan Christianity in general wasn't widespread enough that such words would be common expressions.
But overall, definitely an improvement.
7/6/2021 c58 Guest
Having a story read in third person is better than having it read in first. It gives the viewers a better understanding of the situation rather than the biased version of the person who's view we're reading. Take Oregairu itself for example. Each and every scenario are over dramatized/fantasized/romanticized than it actually is. In a third person setting it would feel far different than that. Admittedly though the first person view makes every situation a lot more impactful(because of the previously mentioned exaggeration). But reading it in third person gives us a better perspective of the situation and let's us feel and react to it accordingly. Fanfics like this(ones that focus on the story/character development more and treat romance as a subplot) in the Oregairu fanfic community are a dime a dozen. And it really helps that some of them(there's so third person oregairu fanfics that I feel like I could count them all with my fingers) are pretty well written for a fanfic.
Having a story read in third person is better than having it read in first. It gives the viewers a better understanding of the situation rather than the biased version of the person who's view we're reading. Take Oregairu itself for example. Each and every scenario are over dramatized/fantasized/romanticized than it actually is. In a third person setting it would feel far different than that. Admittedly though the first person view makes every situation a lot more impactful(because of the previously mentioned exaggeration). But reading it in third person gives us a better perspective of the situation and let's us feel and react to it accordingly. Fanfics like this(ones that focus on the story/character development more and treat romance as a subplot) in the Oregairu fanfic community are a dime a dozen. And it really helps that some of them(there's so third person oregairu fanfics that I feel like I could count them all with my fingers) are pretty well written for a fanfic.
26/1/2021 c33 Guest
Wow he become real trash now amazing disgusting how did you do that?
Wow he become real trash now amazing disgusting how did you do that?
2/6/2021 c52 Fullmetal11791
First and foremost, considering English is not your first language i think this was very impressive. There was certain a lot of issues, from grammar, sentence structure, incorrect words, dropped words etc., but by and large it was readable and you were able to get the point across, so great job.
Overall, in general, I liked the plot. I especially liked how you were giving Hachiman kind of non dangerous versions of Batman villians. Thought that was cute and amusing. Also liked what you did with Yumiko.
I will say that the story did seem to sway from cheesy to very edgy, back and forth, over and over. Which i think was kind of detrimental. I also didnt love how you were considering the Huntsman to be an equal to Batman. Hachiman has solved maybe five or six crimes, and gotten into like half a dozen fights. He's nowhere near Batman's league, and i thought it kind of odd that you tried to force that in the end.
Also thought the ending was rather idealistic. A more realistic outcome, considering the absolute lack of evidence Hachiman had and the enormous amount of Influence and Money the Yukinoshita's have, would be absolutely nothing happening to them.
Still, good effort on your part. Thanks for writing.
First and foremost, considering English is not your first language i think this was very impressive. There was certain a lot of issues, from grammar, sentence structure, incorrect words, dropped words etc., but by and large it was readable and you were able to get the point across, so great job.
Overall, in general, I liked the plot. I especially liked how you were giving Hachiman kind of non dangerous versions of Batman villians. Thought that was cute and amusing. Also liked what you did with Yumiko.
I will say that the story did seem to sway from cheesy to very edgy, back and forth, over and over. Which i think was kind of detrimental. I also didnt love how you were considering the Huntsman to be an equal to Batman. Hachiman has solved maybe five or six crimes, and gotten into like half a dozen fights. He's nowhere near Batman's league, and i thought it kind of odd that you tried to force that in the end.
Also thought the ending was rather idealistic. A more realistic outcome, considering the absolute lack of evidence Hachiman had and the enormous amount of Influence and Money the Yukinoshita's have, would be absolutely nothing happening to them.
Still, good effort on your part. Thanks for writing.
2/6/2021 c51 Fullmetal11791
...oh man he really assaulted the party only having a tape recorder as "evidence", didnt he. There is 100% no chance those recordings hold up in court. Too easy to fake a recording. He's literally got no concrete proof the Yukinoshita's are criminals.
...oh man he really assaulted the party only having a tape recorder as "evidence", didnt he. There is 100% no chance those recordings hold up in court. Too easy to fake a recording. He's literally got no concrete proof the Yukinoshita's are criminals.