for An Emerald Moon10/24/2019 c1 Guest
I love it please update please please pleaseeee
I love it please update please please pleaseeee
12/6/2018 c2 huskerfan
Interesting start, hope to see an update where we find out more about whats drawn Harry to Forks.
Interesting start, hope to see an update where we find out more about whats drawn Harry to Forks.
10/14/2018 c2 
7jh831
don't rush the chapters please. i have seen to many authors go a long time without posting, then post multiple chapters at once that you could tell were made up on the spot and not thought out.
7jh831don't rush the chapters please. i have seen to many authors go a long time without posting, then post multiple chapters at once that you could tell were made up on the spot and not thought out.
10/14/2018 c2 Xanderman18
I think the beginning of your story is interesting and I want to see what follows, I hope the next chapters. regards
I think the beginning of your story is interesting and I want to see what follows, I hope the next chapters. regards
3/21/2017 c1 5plums
The pairing is what drew me, but you have a lot of work to do here.
First... chapter lengths this short implies you don't have an outline yet. You should try and outline a plot, chapter by chapter, containing at least 2-3 scenes at least per chapter.
Second, your writing style has multiple people speaking per scene. Only one person should ever speak per paragraph.
Third, sentences begin with capital letters. This is just low-hanging fruit of editting, and you should never be uploading something where you have lowercase words starting sentences.
Fourth... really... "U" instead of the word "You" ?
5plumsThe pairing is what drew me, but you have a lot of work to do here.
First... chapter lengths this short implies you don't have an outline yet. You should try and outline a plot, chapter by chapter, containing at least 2-3 scenes at least per chapter.
Second, your writing style has multiple people speaking per scene. Only one person should ever speak per paragraph.
Third, sentences begin with capital letters. This is just low-hanging fruit of editting, and you should never be uploading something where you have lowercase words starting sentences.
Fourth... really... "U" instead of the word "You" ?
3/20/2017 c1 6258489
I can't say much other than I like the concept from what I can tell but I'll hold off on any judgement good or bad until I've seen more, which I am anticipating.
I can't say much other than I like the concept from what I can tell but I'll hold off on any judgement good or bad until I've seen more, which I am anticipating.