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14Cherylann Rivers
Hayden is missing?! Oh boy!
Nice job in this chapter. You’re exploring Carolyn and Cindy and making us consider things from their point of view, giving them dimension. Things have not been easy for anyone! Poor Joe as well! While I’m glad he’s getting back to normal, those nightmares are tough. I hope he will be okay when Frank goes back to school! Loved Joe’s musing about how smart Frank is; how talented with computers. I do not like Frank’s bad feeling that something is going to happen today! It must be hard for him having to move on from Joe.
So much needs to be discussed in the final chapter, unless you’re planning on saving it all for the sequel(s). Who is the real Henry? What will happen to him and to Chet if he’s bad? Will the Mortons be safe? Will Joe get over his nightmares? What’s going on with Hayden? Will Frank ever tell / show Callie what he feels? Great job here and curious/ looking forward to the next chapter!
14Cherylann RiversHayden is missing?! Oh boy!
Nice job in this chapter. You’re exploring Carolyn and Cindy and making us consider things from their point of view, giving them dimension. Things have not been easy for anyone! Poor Joe as well! While I’m glad he’s getting back to normal, those nightmares are tough. I hope he will be okay when Frank goes back to school! Loved Joe’s musing about how smart Frank is; how talented with computers. I do not like Frank’s bad feeling that something is going to happen today! It must be hard for him having to move on from Joe.
So much needs to be discussed in the final chapter, unless you’re planning on saving it all for the sequel(s). Who is the real Henry? What will happen to him and to Chet if he’s bad? Will the Mortons be safe? Will Joe get over his nightmares? What’s going on with Hayden? Will Frank ever tell / show Callie what he feels? Great job here and curious/ looking forward to the next chapter!
2/5/2018 c29 Guest
Great chapter I am loving this story. Can't wait to see what happens next! please keep going ! :)
Great chapter I am loving this story. Can't wait to see what happens next! please keep going ! :)
2/2/2018 c29 Cherylann Rivers
Great update! I especially like how Frank can be honest with Biff and Chet about his reservations about Henry. He needs their support, and he can’t really get into it with Henry (I’m not sure of what to make of Henry, either). The superhero element is fun, because somehow it can be either inspiring or creepy in the context in which you use it. So... now you need to answer all of the questions! Will there be a trial? Will Frank finally tell Callie how he feels?! (I hope so!). How will this whole scenario play out- and is Henry a victim or a sociopath... or both?! Love it!
Great update! I especially like how Frank can be honest with Biff and Chet about his reservations about Henry. He needs their support, and he can’t really get into it with Henry (I’m not sure of what to make of Henry, either). The superhero element is fun, because somehow it can be either inspiring or creepy in the context in which you use it. So... now you need to answer all of the questions! Will there be a trial? Will Frank finally tell Callie how he feels?! (I hope so!). How will this whole scenario play out- and is Henry a victim or a sociopath... or both?! Love it!
1/27/2018 c25 Paulina Ann
Definitely a lot of intense things going on here. Poor boys. All that anger. I think they need more than decompression. They need an outlet. A physical one.
Definitely a lot of intense things going on here. Poor boys. All that anger. I think they need more than decompression. They need an outlet. A physical one.
1/27/2018 c20 Paulina Ann
I really liked the talk between Joe and Frank. The whole 's no am I' questioning was very appropriate.
I really liked the talk between Joe and Frank. The whole 's no am I' questioning was very appropriate.
1/27/2018 c19 Paulina Ann
I really liked the talk between Frank and Joe about their individual identities. Nice touch.
I really liked the talk between Frank and Joe about their individual identities. Nice touch.