for Harry Potter and The Rebellion Of Hogwarts5/12 c26 
9GraysonSteele
Before I launch into my queries, let me say that overall I am enjoying this story. I know this chapter was written some time ago and maybe it was addressed then, but why would the ring recipients need to put blood in any ring but Harry's and possibly their own? Wasn't the idea that if that the person being threatened gets apparated to Harry? In your lemony prior chapter, I think Hermione's oral skills are a bit much unless she's been quite a bit more the penpals with Victor. Why did you feel that was necessary? Her deciding to shag Harry on her birthday I get. All the reading in the world isn't likely to make you one step away from a porn star. On the positive side, I like that you didn't have Daphne decide to have sex with Harry. It is more believable that she would not be ready since she really didn't know him before she suddenly found herself betrothed a few months earlier. I like that you gave Harry a chance to still have Sirius and his parents to talk to. I think James and Lily probably would have had a portrait made just in case.
Good on you for keeping your story going. I do hope someday you might go back through and fix the misspelled names. Although Shanklebolt made me crack up. And good ol' Doles deserves her fate.
9GraysonSteeleBefore I launch into my queries, let me say that overall I am enjoying this story. I know this chapter was written some time ago and maybe it was addressed then, but why would the ring recipients need to put blood in any ring but Harry's and possibly their own? Wasn't the idea that if that the person being threatened gets apparated to Harry? In your lemony prior chapter, I think Hermione's oral skills are a bit much unless she's been quite a bit more the penpals with Victor. Why did you feel that was necessary? Her deciding to shag Harry on her birthday I get. All the reading in the world isn't likely to make you one step away from a porn star. On the positive side, I like that you didn't have Daphne decide to have sex with Harry. It is more believable that she would not be ready since she really didn't know him before she suddenly found herself betrothed a few months earlier. I like that you gave Harry a chance to still have Sirius and his parents to talk to. I think James and Lily probably would have had a portrait made just in case.
Good on you for keeping your story going. I do hope someday you might go back through and fix the misspelled names. Although Shanklebolt made me crack up. And good ol' Doles deserves her fate.
4/7 c17 Rob2012
Good story. To bad Ron is a total jerk, but at least Molly really isn't kissing Dumbledore's butt.
Good story. To bad Ron is a total jerk, but at least Molly really isn't kissing Dumbledore's butt.
3/27 c36 AerynS
How wicked! But why were they still in Godric's Hallow? Are the other Potters buried Potter Manor in the family crypt? Seems more in keeping with an Ancient and Noble House.
How wicked! But why were they still in Godric's Hallow? Are the other Potters buried Potter Manor in the family crypt? Seems more in keeping with an Ancient and Noble House.
3/16 c36 Guest
Would really love it if you would for Pete's sake complete this story.
The being left up in the air tactic is really, really getting old.
Would really love it if you would for Pete's sake complete this story.
The being left up in the air tactic is really, really getting old.
2/24 c24 winniesm
The lemonade sounded so technical? It felt like everything happened within 5 minutes?
The lemonade sounded so technical? It felt like everything happened within 5 minutes?
2/13 c1 lochandevil
I like your story but I like to say few things. Hermione's attitude doesn't go well with an intelligent and practical Gray Harry, I think you know why I am saying that and I know this is fanfic but do you think an old family will give all there book that they collected over the years he gives it way just like that. He doesn't think Harry might need that knowledge or his future generations. Money or some items I understand but that is way over the head
I like your story but I like to say few things. Hermione's attitude doesn't go well with an intelligent and practical Gray Harry, I think you know why I am saying that and I know this is fanfic but do you think an old family will give all there book that they collected over the years he gives it way just like that. He doesn't think Harry might need that knowledge or his future generations. Money or some items I understand but that is way over the head
12/31/2024 c30 Prakith
As much as I like this story, did you really need Amelia to be dumb? I mean she was the head of the DLME and that seemed like a really dumb way to die.
As much as I like this story, did you really need Amelia to be dumb? I mean she was the head of the DLME and that seemed like a really dumb way to die.
12/7/2024 c36 Guest
And that's where you stopped?
And that's where you stopped?
11/27/2024 c12 FenreldStormblade
order 66...nice... got a laugh out of me for the star wars reference
order 66...nice... got a laugh out of me for the star wars reference
11/20/2024 c34 pincho
These two paragraphs completely contradict eachother:
Harry frowned. "I'll find a way old man, if that is all you need me for then I will take my leave. This is the last time you will see Headmaster, I don't intend to return." Harry turned on his heels and used the Elder wand to bring down Alastor wards surprising the old hit wizard, he then opened the doors and closed them behind himself.
Harry nodded in understanding and slipped the wand into his holster. He turned his back on the old man and went to leave however he suddenly stopped. "I forgive you old man, you did what you felt you needed to, I don't hold my parent's death against you." Harry then walked out of the ward after Alastor had dropped the ward.
These two paragraphs completely contradict eachother:
Harry frowned. "I'll find a way old man, if that is all you need me for then I will take my leave. This is the last time you will see Headmaster, I don't intend to return." Harry turned on his heels and used the Elder wand to bring down Alastor wards surprising the old hit wizard, he then opened the doors and closed them behind himself.
Harry nodded in understanding and slipped the wand into his holster. He turned his back on the old man and went to leave however he suddenly stopped. "I forgive you old man, you did what you felt you needed to, I don't hold my parent's death against you." Harry then walked out of the ward after Alastor had dropped the ward.
11/20/2024 c30 pincho
Bones doing what you had her do made absolutely no sense. The top cop just leaves with rando number 7, despite the higher security, her training, hiring of the most paranoid? The flipping 16 year old was smarter than her.
Bones doing what you had her do made absolutely no sense. The top cop just leaves with rando number 7, despite the higher security, her training, hiring of the most paranoid? The flipping 16 year old was smarter than her.
11/20/2024 c27 pincho
I'll be so disappointed if Draco doesn't die
I'll be so disappointed if Draco doesn't die
11/19/2024 c25 pincho
Damn basically called Hermione a slot and Harry didn't even notice
Damn basically called Hermione a slot and Harry didn't even notice