for Crime Pays4/5/2017 c1 
4Ash141
I think this story has real potential, I can't wait for the next chapter! Until then.
~Ash141
4Ash141I think this story has real potential, I can't wait for the next chapter! Until then.
~Ash141
4/5/2017 c1 Kyogan Saori
It's not bad a but sometines a bit confusing. I mean, Brick has three daughters with Blossom. How old is Blossom? Was she Blossom or Camelia when she had a one night stand? Was it with him being Brick or Damien? Sometimes you mix the names, like Camelia Louis. But all in all, it's fine. I think you should continoue. :)
It's not bad a but sometines a bit confusing. I mean, Brick has three daughters with Blossom. How old is Blossom? Was she Blossom or Camelia when she had a one night stand? Was it with him being Brick or Damien? Sometimes you mix the names, like Camelia Louis. But all in all, it's fine. I think you should continoue. :)