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3/14/2018 c3 Argonaut986
Harry has friends that are loyal to him.
3/14/2018 c2 Argonaut986
Bumbledork fudged up, and he knows it.
3/14/2018 c1 Argonaut986
Talk about an unexpected event.
1/30/2018 c6 Mia Tia
Carry on
1/30/2018 c4 Mia Tia
I guess it's Nymphadora Tonks
1/26/2018 c6 AstralGemini
love it so far
1/24/2018 c6 starboy454
look good so far
1/21/2018 c6 7DaSalvatore
While the ideas are solid, the execution is lacking and needs a lot of work.

Your intro is weak as you've made it so that Xavier only came to collect Harry because he was a mutant and ignored him before this.

One of my biggest complaints about this story is your dialogue is incredibly stilted across the board. Not only do the words not flow, but many times I wouldn't know who was talking because people all sound the same. It's incredibly painful to read.

The second biggest issue is that you have a lot of plot holes and inconsistencies. Xavier has said he thought Harry was dead but also that he knew where Harry was staying. I would suggest taking time working through any future chapters to clean the issues up.
1/15/2018 c6 goblin81
Light on action but your growlly lead is still fun more please.
1/7/2018 c6 4RT89
Interesting way to introduce x-23 and I didn't see Tonks coming, nice surprise.
1/7/2018 c4 RT89
Is it just me or has his temper shortened to almost match another twin claw we know?
1/7/2018 c2 RT89
Could x-23 be hiding as Greengrass?
12/27/2017 c6 UndeadHatter
Good story, just needs to be proof read or beta'ed but otherwise good.
12/26/2017 c6 58randomplotbunny
Great chapter! :-D
12/25/2017 c6 ViewerPetu
Feels a bit rushed and could use a couple of rounds with an editor, but the premise is interesting enough for me to ignore the few typos I ran into.
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