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6/24/2020 c1 12TheWordMasterofFiction
What a lovely fanfic! Sweet, short, and wholly satisfying.
7/30/2019 c1 5Skydriane
Short and sweet. I've never seen a Laby fic done from this angle before.
Also, apparently Scrat from Ice Age got turned into a goblin, and you let him finally catch a snack :)
9/5/2018 c1 8dinopoodle
Great story more please...pretty please.
9/4/2018 c1 2tiedyefrog
I saw your comment on a different fanfic so I decided to check your stories out. I was not disappointed. You are doing really well. It is a bit cheesy with the whole “I love you thing” but I loved it!
8/31/2017 c1 Rising Phoenix-82
Wish I could read another one..this one was great .
7/18/2017 c1 34FrancesOsgood
Aww! This is so sweet and good. I love what you've done with the characters. The worm is perfect and Scrat is adorable. I love to see alternate takes on the story and this one is sweetly unique. Great job!

Btw, I have a goblin named Chib. We should get him and Scrat together for a playdate. :)
6/17/2017 c1 2Kinzichi
I know it's been a while since this was posted but this is super cute! I have been reading Labyrinth fics for a long time and this one is going in my archive of favorites!
5/23/2017 c1 AfineWine
aww this was so lovely
5/2/2017 c1 Jason B
Pros: Your narrative and dialogue is well balanced. The dialogue is believable, very natural. It's been a long time since I watched Labyrinth, I can't remember if Hoggle used curse-words. Still, the language flowed appropriately.
It was cool to see the emotional/empathetic side of Jareth...he seemed so detached sometimes...almost callous as I recall. nice change up.

It's also quite appropriate that you should write this now with the recent passing of David Bowie.

Cons: Watch your pronouns...there are quite a few. Alternate actions with descriptions of the scene/surroundings so that every sentence is not focused on the one of the characters. I always have to remind myself of that too. Tolkien was a master of descriptive narrative.

Good job. I like it. It was fun to read.
5/2/2017 c1 giantgreengoat
This was a super fun read! The AU perspective took the story in a really interesting direction and the letter was perfect to tie it up neatly. Great job capturing the characters, loved that the guards were supposed to be firing blanks bit.
4/27/2017 c1 3inugirl504
Wow. That was great
4/20/2017 c1 29Tailsfan
lol Well done!
4/19/2017 c1 1StarWarsSkyrim51
I liked it.
4/19/2017 c1 27CharlieBoneFan
Good story!

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