for Of Ivory Towers and Dark Courts5/21/2018 c12 Scorin
Good finish with the main arc. I was not expecting Garon to be as “friendly” in the end, but I guess it was to be expected because of Gareth’s service to Nohr against his home country. Nice touch with Edmund’s Character development and willingness to kill off named characters you have invested (some) time.
I was only slightly surprised when you mentioned Robert Jordan’s work being an inspiration for this part of the arc. His writing style was exceptional and it was a pity he could not truly finish his work. If I remember correctly this almost directly parallels the events with the villagers in his work (It’s been so long I can’t remember the village name). From the villagers/soldiers defending themselves from a superior force to their adoption of the hero as the leader though they used to be independent. Not saying you copied it, especially since the events and style are clearly your own. But it is quite nice to read a work partially inspired by such a well-written book with similar world building themes
Good finish with the main arc. I was not expecting Garon to be as “friendly” in the end, but I guess it was to be expected because of Gareth’s service to Nohr against his home country. Nice touch with Edmund’s Character development and willingness to kill off named characters you have invested (some) time.
I was only slightly surprised when you mentioned Robert Jordan’s work being an inspiration for this part of the arc. His writing style was exceptional and it was a pity he could not truly finish his work. If I remember correctly this almost directly parallels the events with the villagers in his work (It’s been so long I can’t remember the village name). From the villagers/soldiers defending themselves from a superior force to their adoption of the hero as the leader though they used to be independent. Not saying you copied it, especially since the events and style are clearly your own. But it is quite nice to read a work partially inspired by such a well-written book with similar world building themes
5/21/2018 c11 Scorin
Gareth finally confronting the actions of his people which he accused the Nigerians of in the past was definitely a defining point. I do not feel I should comment much on chapter other than you did a good job on the climax and action
Gareth finally confronting the actions of his people which he accused the Nigerians of in the past was definitely a defining point. I do not feel I should comment much on chapter other than you did a good job on the climax and action
5/21/2018 c9 Scorin
Exceptional description of tactics in this arc. the training was also well done in how to establish discipline and skill. I clearly haven’t read far yet but I hope that those whom Gareth trainers have more of a role in the main story.
Exceptional description of tactics in this arc. the training was also well done in how to establish discipline and skill. I clearly haven’t read far yet but I hope that those whom Gareth trainers have more of a role in the main story.
5/20/2018 c7 Scorin
I do not know what inspired the speech you wrote for Gunter but it was quite profound
I do not know what inspired the speech you wrote for Gunter but it was quite profound
5/20/2018 c5 Scorin
I genuinely hope you are changing the corrin-sexuals to have more profound relationships with other characters (Flora’s wild magic with Leo is quite like the CorrinxFlora support). This may be one of the best though small additions to the story. Nice touch with Eleanor being responsible for creating the faceless (cinnamon roll destroys the roll). Lastly your sneak peek was well executed in the time honored tradition of decent cliffhangers.
I said I was going to try to review in sections but I can’t help it this is great work
I genuinely hope you are changing the corrin-sexuals to have more profound relationships with other characters (Flora’s wild magic with Leo is quite like the CorrinxFlora support). This may be one of the best though small additions to the story. Nice touch with Eleanor being responsible for creating the faceless (cinnamon roll destroys the roll). Lastly your sneak peek was well executed in the time honored tradition of decent cliffhangers.
I said I was going to try to review in sections but I can’t help it this is great work
5/20/2018 c4 Scorin
I hope you made a one shot for the tapestry. I would be very interested in reading something you put so much work into
I hope you made a one shot for the tapestry. I would be very interested in reading something you put so much work into
5/20/2018 c3 Scorin
Just these first chapters are well done. All the world building and background shows how creative you can be when given a structure to build on. Loving the no Black and White of war you are writing (Even if one side was truly good does not mean it’s generals or soldiers are the same). Another review will be coming when I feel I have reached a milestone in your book.
P.S.
Nice touch with Eleanor trauma and making Garon more human because of her influence. Hopefully he won’t turn out as evil as in the game.
Just these first chapters are well done. All the world building and background shows how creative you can be when given a structure to build on. Loving the no Black and White of war you are writing (Even if one side was truly good does not mean it’s generals or soldiers are the same). Another review will be coming when I feel I have reached a milestone in your book.
P.S.
Nice touch with Eleanor trauma and making Garon more human because of her influence. Hopefully he won’t turn out as evil as in the game.
5/18/2018 c17 Greyjedi449t
I really like how you write your story with Gareths actions having consequences. It is rare to see an author on this website, who make the actions of the main character being in the moral grey area, so that we know that he is not perfect, and he will make mistakes.
And if it is in a kingdom with court politics, intrigue, espionage and assassinations, then you mustn't make mistakes.
So... well done on this part of the story. I'll be looking forward to the next one.
P.S. I think it is Leo who will get the brynhildr.
I really like how you write your story with Gareths actions having consequences. It is rare to see an author on this website, who make the actions of the main character being in the moral grey area, so that we know that he is not perfect, and he will make mistakes.
And if it is in a kingdom with court politics, intrigue, espionage and assassinations, then you mustn't make mistakes.
So... well done on this part of the story. I'll be looking forward to the next one.
P.S. I think it is Leo who will get the brynhildr.
5/17/2018 c17 
4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
Great chapter! I enjoyed it a TON! No doubt about it though, Gareth’s decision WILL most likely come back to haunt him once in a while. But still...I think it was a good idea to get rid of Marie. Thank goodness Flora was there though, otherwise, Garon May have given Gareth execution regardless of his usefulness.
Anyhoo...I wonder who Gareth’s possible retainer will be? Hmm... Whoever it is, I look forward to seeing hem soon.
I also liked the way you ended this chapter. Perfect reference right there!
Surprisingly, I have nothing else to say except to keep up the good work, and update again soon!
4Antex-The Legendary ZoroarkGreat chapter! I enjoyed it a TON! No doubt about it though, Gareth’s decision WILL most likely come back to haunt him once in a while. But still...I think it was a good idea to get rid of Marie. Thank goodness Flora was there though, otherwise, Garon May have given Gareth execution regardless of his usefulness.
Anyhoo...I wonder who Gareth’s possible retainer will be? Hmm... Whoever it is, I look forward to seeing hem soon.
I also liked the way you ended this chapter. Perfect reference right there!
Surprisingly, I have nothing else to say except to keep up the good work, and update again soon!
4/22/2018 c16 9deathwing17
You know I really enjoy what you've done with this story and i'm actually shocked that more people haven't reviewed it yet. In fact I think that i'm liking this more than the original game as it portrayed most Nohrians aside from Garon's kids as evil while everyone in Hoshido was good. I like how you've made it so that both sides have good and evil people in them, just like with every nation. Hell you've managed to make Garon less of a evil overlord and more of a man who is willing to use whatever means necessary to ensure his kingdom's survival.
9deathwing17You know I really enjoy what you've done with this story and i'm actually shocked that more people haven't reviewed it yet. In fact I think that i'm liking this more than the original game as it portrayed most Nohrians aside from Garon's kids as evil while everyone in Hoshido was good. I like how you've made it so that both sides have good and evil people in them, just like with every nation. Hell you've managed to make Garon less of a evil overlord and more of a man who is willing to use whatever means necessary to ensure his kingdom's survival.
4/19/2018 c16 Greyjedi449t
Love the chapter. I think Gareth is being a little hasty in trying to get Marie killed, but maybe he is just desperate to protect his sister. Oh, and the next chapter is going to be named: 'and dagger' or just 'Dagger'.
Looking forward to the next update
Love the chapter. I think Gareth is being a little hasty in trying to get Marie killed, but maybe he is just desperate to protect his sister. Oh, and the next chapter is going to be named: 'and dagger' or just 'Dagger'.
Looking forward to the next update
4/19/2018 c16 4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
Interesting! Loved how Lilith was able to help out Dastan. He needed it before he could fall into an even deeper depression. But I digress. I’ve a feeling that Marie will be poisoned thanks to the bottle Charles slipped and replaced with the other. I’m also guessing the next chapter is Dagger? Lol.
Anyway, I’ve a bad feeling that even if Marie is killed, things will go wrong. After all, Gareth is in jail. Could Charles have ratted him out if the plan failed/or he was suspected? And what of Gareth himself? I’m sure that if he becomes a Black Heart, he’ll lose quite a few privileges and loyal subjects... Talk about troublesome.
And DAGNABBIT! Eleanor is REALLY pissing me off if that’s how she views Silas! Like something not to be concerned about. I mean, he helped her sneak out for pity’s sake! Just...wow. I hope Leo is the one who gets Brynhildr just so I can see the look on Eleanor’s face!
Sorry. It’s just her current attitude is quite...unagreable with me. *sigh*
Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter. Keep this up!
4Antex-The Legendary ZoroarkInteresting! Loved how Lilith was able to help out Dastan. He needed it before he could fall into an even deeper depression. But I digress. I’ve a feeling that Marie will be poisoned thanks to the bottle Charles slipped and replaced with the other. I’m also guessing the next chapter is Dagger? Lol.
Anyway, I’ve a bad feeling that even if Marie is killed, things will go wrong. After all, Gareth is in jail. Could Charles have ratted him out if the plan failed/or he was suspected? And what of Gareth himself? I’m sure that if he becomes a Black Heart, he’ll lose quite a few privileges and loyal subjects... Talk about troublesome.
And DAGNABBIT! Eleanor is REALLY pissing me off if that’s how she views Silas! Like something not to be concerned about. I mean, he helped her sneak out for pity’s sake! Just...wow. I hope Leo is the one who gets Brynhildr just so I can see the look on Eleanor’s face!
Sorry. It’s just her current attitude is quite...unagreable with me. *sigh*
Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter. Keep this up!
4/1/2018 c5 Tita
So uhhh we gonna get a music duet or something similar between the twins and maybe the other siblings
So uhhh we gonna get a music duet or something similar between the twins and maybe the other siblings
3/31/2018 c15 Guest
Love the political aspect of this story.
Love the political aspect of this story.
3/29/2018 c15 Greyjedi449t
This has turned intriguing at the end there. Oh I just love when one reads a serious and dangerous conversation between two people, who don't like each other at all (especially if one of them is a snake).
Enjoyed the chapter, and looking forward to the next one
This has turned intriguing at the end there. Oh I just love when one reads a serious and dangerous conversation between two people, who don't like each other at all (especially if one of them is a snake).
Enjoyed the chapter, and looking forward to the next one