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7/17 c39 3SignDowny
This was a nice and relaxing chapter. I like the way you made Kirito's stealth having two stages. I also noticed the clearing group being at floor 68 or above. Will you stick to 'canon' and make them complete the game on floor 74 or will you have them go for all 100? It would make sense, they are already a little suspicious of Heathcliff. Either way, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
7/16 c38 SignDowny
I just love this story so far. I'm also positively surprised that Kirito chose to be female. It fits her so much better.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter.
7/11 c3 Misaka Phenex
shino,shirou,sinon,kazuto im so fcking confuse who's whooo
7/11 c1 Misaka Phenex
im so Fcking confuse
7/2 c1 1Yuritau
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6/11 c34 1Z-ARC34
loving it.
4/29 c25 3SignDowny
This story is simply amazing. I loved everything about it. I have actually been looking for a story like this for a while. Only thing that was a little weird was the items Kirito got from the underground boss. I know the name Kazuto Kirigaya literally means overpowered but I think you stretched it a little too far.
4/18 c9 Crazy9087
You may wish to rethink the levels as in cannon kirito was only lvl. 70 by the 50 ish floor.
4/4 c22 Yllan
One of my favorite stories, very happy that it's been picked back up.
3/29 c21 max
update plz, its one of the better written stories in this site
12/23/2018 c21 7haelstromn
What a coincidence. Kirito’s play-style in this story is almost the same as Yun from Only Sense Online.
7/20/2017 c21 tomfo
Ok, so i've read both of your fics now and after reading this a couple of times i've decided i like this one more for a few reasons, while i like the kirisuna shoujo ai in your other fic the Oc Ana is too much of a mary sue for me to really get into the fic plus the newer chapters adding magical effects leads it too far from SAO. Now, for what i like most about this one is the fem(ish) Kirito and the effects that has with his character,such as his crafting cooking and connecting with people a little more easily, plus his confusion/anger/distress over his feminine traits. I kinda think this Kirito might be more likely to make the choice for gender change op. once he realises he probably would have been happier born a girl growing up tomboyishly. I really hope you are willing to write more of this and thanks for writing this much.
4/27/2017 c12 16SaintInfernalNeos
Hey there! I felt I should probably leave something here given that it seems this story has been so poorly received yet no one offers feedback as to why, so as to it can help you as a fellow SAO Fanfic Writer :O

First of all, make no mistake: Both you and this story have a lot of potential, but you made many things that most people wouldn't enjoy or that most readers find 'questionable' in some way, so I think explaining them to you will help you:

1-The story was a bit all over the place. You put 'Adventure/Fantasy' in the summary, yet a good chunk of the first part was centered mostly in drama and the story seemed to jump inconsistently from a mood to the other. Be it Kazuto's problems with his 'feminity', Suguha and Shino's feelings (Which one moment seemed something important and next were randomly nearly forgotten for several chapters for no reason), or the sudden super-drama that was the 2.0 version of trauma for Shino and a bigger one for Kirito. Like, seriously, it seems the only reason you left his biological parents alive was to kill them off in a way that made him suffer, and that probably threw off most of the readers that weren't expecting this in a fic with those tags on its summary.

3-'Unnnecessary' additions/changes. Now then, everyone knows that it's boring to copy/paste canon, and most authors/readers complain about this, but the truth is that SOME THINGS from canon aren't really things we expect/need to be changed if there is no real reason. For example, randomly giving Shino a little brother seemed to add no purpose to the story except to give more drama that no one was expecting, or having her father be randomly alive yet her mother still be that 'childish' woman that she only became in canon because his death :O Then, there is Kirito's extreme 'feminity', that it's not really 'bad' per se, even if some may complain it's weird or something like that, but the point again is that NO ONE WAS EXPECTING IT. There is no clue to this in the summary at all, and again is something that may throw some readers for a loop, especially when at points he truly seemed almost to be willing to BE a girl without complaint at all. By itself this would have made an 'interesting' story, I guess (I'm fair with it even if it's not something I myself like that much), but together with all of this it probably made most readers back off, which leads us to the next point.

4-The Story's organization. Now, it's clear that you're no expert with writing fanfics, and no one is, even the best authors around were newbies at times, but you SHOULDN'T Update all of the blue 12 or more chapters for a completely new story. Some people may back off because a story's chapter seems too long, but surprisingly very few do this compared to how may back of at seeing a NEW STORY that has like a dozen chapters. You should have selected a number of them, ordered them as one chapter only and then posted that, then waited to get feedback before posting more. By writing it all like this some readers may find very hard to keep going until the end and many may just give up on reading because of this. It also doesn't help that you started to abuse 'Walls of Text' when you started with the SAO Part of the story. Many not only seem strange and don't really flow well with a conversation where seveal characters are present, but others are completely unncessary. Again, changing things from canon is good and usually what most seek when reading a fic, but the total re-explanation of mechanics or even secondary characters and the Boss Battle (Which I don't know if you didn't remember properly at all or just wished to change it to suit your needs) just adds more walls of text that, frankly, no one will care much about and will only discourage them from continuing reading :O

All of that say, I wanna tell you that I see potential in you and your ability to make stories. No one is perfect nor starts being great on things, so don't give up, and feel free to answer to this review if you want to rebuke something I said of for anything else. If it counts, I did have a bit of fun while reading this story, even if I got frustrated at times XP

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