11/16/2003 c1 josua lover
That is so the wrong girl for Goten.
That is so the wrong girl for Goten.
4/19/2003 c1 2Mystic Pan
hiyas! uum I liked this so far, I thought it was pretty good! You know, you seem to know what you're talking about and there's some good stuff in there ^^ and if you write the next chapter I'll come and read it! Also, as a word of advice, I'd agree with Dinette, that you do need to paragraph abit more. hehehe sorry to pick fault and stuff, I know my work isn't exactly perfect, but whatever...
anyways, till next time!
-Mystic Pan
hiyas! uum I liked this so far, I thought it was pretty good! You know, you seem to know what you're talking about and there's some good stuff in there ^^ and if you write the next chapter I'll come and read it! Also, as a word of advice, I'd agree with Dinette, that you do need to paragraph abit more. hehehe sorry to pick fault and stuff, I know my work isn't exactly perfect, but whatever...
anyways, till next time!
-Mystic Pan