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11/16/2003 c1 josua lover
That is so the wrong girl for Goten.
4/19/2003 c1 2Mystic Pan
hiyas! uum I liked this so far, I thought it was pretty good! You know, you seem to know what you're talking about and there's some good stuff in there ^^ and if you write the next chapter I'll come and read it! Also, as a word of advice, I'd agree with Dinette, that you do need to paragraph abit more. hehehe sorry to pick fault and stuff, I know my work isn't exactly perfect, but whatever...

anyways, till next time!

-Mystic Pan
3/26/2003 c1 9Dinette
Hmm... I don't watch DBZ so I don't really get what's going on but it might help if your chapters are longer. More stuff to review and understand what's going on. Also try to paragraph more :D Yep, that's about it. Hope this helps...
3/26/2003 c1 2WiTcHgIrL1
no one reviews my stuff! grr!

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