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3/21 c40 1CrookedPizza
Well goddamn. That last line hits hard, kudos and thanks for the chappy
3/16 c13 daimahou
Guess flaying the soul and mind out of a woman is not considered killing... The husk is still alive, see?
3/2 c9 Inanityt
Apparently, the most frustrating thing about this story is that the author doesn't learn, doesn't correct mistakes, even though he's been writing this story for 7 years..
3/2 c8 Inanityt
In seven years, the author wrote only 440,000 words... Hmmm... We won't see the end of this.

Also, the author dumbs down both the Emperor and Taylor for the sake of epic fights.
2/23 c39 TralliE
Really like the story, the flow, the dialogue, the narrative, it's all impressively well thought out and executed, and the source materials are really well represented.
The only flaw, in my opinion, and I'm not sure that it is a flaw or intended for character development later, is how Taylor behaves. Despite all the knowledge and support she has in the form of the Emperor, she acts like the insane lovechild of an ork and Spiderman; heedlessly rushing into battle with glee whilst flinging quips, only kept alive by her status as an eternal and her ever growing access to the emperor's powers. She never fights efficiently, even when situations would immensely benefit from her doing so, she lets her opponents get back up, she releases them so that they can both clash again, she nearly never goes for crippling or even dissabling blows, and most frustratingly; she consistantly redirects her focus from enemies which she could take out of the fight in favour of someone else, giving them time to recover.
Spoilers ahead:
As a reader, we never get the sense that Taylor ever sits propperly down and uses what is arguably her greatest strength, either; the Emperor's knowledge. Sure she makes some basic armor, and even some rudimentary powerarmor and weapons, and yes she talks about setting up a company, but it always seems to be secondary, or tertiary even, to anything and everything else she has going on.
End of spoiler.
So, yeah. A really fleshed out and fabulous story, with the only annoyance as a reader being Taylor's battle lust, which is completely understandable and reasonable as a character flaw, even a great one for the purpouses of limiting her influence and power, but at some point it feels like Taylor needs to sit her ass down and build up a powerbase and powermultipliers, and to stop pissing around in fights, though hopefully still quipping and mocking her opponents.
2/13 c4 scyfly
yeah this is going nowhere
2/13 c4 scyfly
someone points a cannon at you, being the smart psychic you are you dont push the gun upwards, no you curse and put up a shield.

sigh is this just gonna be one endless streak of bad decissions?
2/13 c3 scyfly
she gets in four sucker punches to a non brute junkie but still lets him turn it around? it seems whatever happens has little to do with the outcome
2/13 c3 scyfly
i want to say the way taylor goes about things is very amateurishly but then she is a teenage girl with a martyr complex till she blows up. so in that aspect well done. doesnt make it any less annoying though
2/13 c2 scyfly
leaving school is a weakness...

imma gonna stay and suffer in silence instead of taking my exams and do something usefull.

that sounds like a great plan
2/13 c2 scyfly
she isnt really using her powers all that well is she. her psychics work at a small city scale but she barely uses it more than a house in range.
2/9 c8 Guest
I really like your story. Both the concept and the writing style. That being said, there are a few points of constructive criticism that I want to mention:

1. Taylor's tendency for theatrics. She tends to engage in typical superhero / supervillain banter, and the emperor doesn't even bother advising against it. Take the Lung fight, for example. One single concentrated shot of psychic power to the brain could either turn Lung into a bumbling idiot or take out his Corona pollentia, robbing him of his powers or even killing him. Instead, she gives him time to ramp up while using half-hearted attacks and lots of banter. Stupid.

2. The lack of tech. While the emperor is not a member of the Adeptus Mechanicus, I bet he has plenty of offer in terms of technology. This would basically make Taylor a tinker, and yet she doesn't immediately start gathering parts. Again, stupid.

3. The lack of power. Even if Taylor's power is reduced significantly compared to that of the Emperor, it shouldn't be to the extent that she struggles to defeat even street-level villains. Honestly, she did better with bug powers than with the powers of the fucking Emperor of Mankind, and that is a bit pathetic.
2/9 c37 61bankerrtx01
I’d like to think that Luna and Taylor would create the imperium then if Taylor takes a sabbatical Luna would step up and rule in her stead looking like Taylor’s form.
2/7 c39 Nullblaster
Seems like The Empress is just as willing to punish as she is to protect.
2/3 c39 The Normie
Can't wait for the reaction of Haven when Luna, Cynthia and Alastor get wings and show up in a endbringer fight.. That would be an interesting reaction topic for alot of the heroes..
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