for Mass Effect: Plan for the Galaxy5/8 c57 Unit 971
Damn Brock can't catch a break, huh? Great battle and climax to the battle on the Citadel and loved how the MAC just annihilated Sovereign hope you are doing well, take care!
Damn Brock can't catch a break, huh? Great battle and climax to the battle on the Citadel and loved how the MAC just annihilated Sovereign hope you are doing well, take care!
5/8 c57 Blaze1992
Okay got to the latest CH found this when waiting for work to start only to find out I reviewed this way back.
Love the story and some of the things he's been making granted I am surprised it wasn't expanded upon more especially his gun making company. Also, little sad that somehow, he adopted that one kid, but we never saw her reaction to that nor the events that made them father and daughter.
The changes to the plot have been interesting even if some of Jane's choices with him were because she got gas-lighted by tofu Canadian bacon there.
There is one major piece of tech in ME and earth history that would've helped him so much but was never looked into by him. The mech/drone tech in this series such the famed LOKI from ME2 not to mention the YMIR/FERRIS as well. Drones and the mechs were everywhere in ME2 but barely in ME1 or ME3. He had secret resource locations and crew helping him using some resources to make a mech factory that could produce customized models or the standard.
While the drones/mechs can be hacked in the field it doesn't last and that's only because they were designed cheaply for ease of replacement. If the galaxy had more mech's around cities such a YMIR custom model built for firefighting instead of destruction maybe with the heavy cryo weapon from the 2nd game and full functioning hand the other were save a lot of lives from fires and later could be weaponized against reapers troops is one idea.
I would've also loved to see what he could've done with the trition mech the earlier model of the Atlas used in ME3. I could easily see him making Amp suits from avatar and possibly civil version for Contruction/rescue work as well
Okay got to the latest CH found this when waiting for work to start only to find out I reviewed this way back.
Love the story and some of the things he's been making granted I am surprised it wasn't expanded upon more especially his gun making company. Also, little sad that somehow, he adopted that one kid, but we never saw her reaction to that nor the events that made them father and daughter.
The changes to the plot have been interesting even if some of Jane's choices with him were because she got gas-lighted by tofu Canadian bacon there.
There is one major piece of tech in ME and earth history that would've helped him so much but was never looked into by him. The mech/drone tech in this series such the famed LOKI from ME2 not to mention the YMIR/FERRIS as well. Drones and the mechs were everywhere in ME2 but barely in ME1 or ME3. He had secret resource locations and crew helping him using some resources to make a mech factory that could produce customized models or the standard.
While the drones/mechs can be hacked in the field it doesn't last and that's only because they were designed cheaply for ease of replacement. If the galaxy had more mech's around cities such a YMIR custom model built for firefighting instead of destruction maybe with the heavy cryo weapon from the 2nd game and full functioning hand the other were save a lot of lives from fires and later could be weaponized against reapers troops is one idea.
I would've also loved to see what he could've done with the trition mech the earlier model of the Atlas used in ME3. I could easily see him making Amp suits from avatar and possibly civil version for Contruction/rescue work as well
5/7 c54 SanjarN7
One more reason to be angry with Saren: his elevators move faster! He must be using Reaper tech...
Thank you for all your work on this! Enjoying Brock's story.
One more reason to be angry with Saren: his elevators move faster! He must be using Reaper tech...
Thank you for all your work on this! Enjoying Brock's story.
5/5 c57 Guest
Good chap
Good chap
5/6 c57 Umbra.Venator
Just found your story, and I love it! all in all a very enjoyable read. I am very much looking forward to seeing the council's reaction to the Enterprise!
Just found your story, and I love it! all in all a very enjoyable read. I am very much looking forward to seeing the council's reaction to the Enterprise!
5/4 c57 Guest
Honestly at this point I'm wondering if a certain flaming wheel with wings and eyes isn't protecting him. Dude gets near death injuries and close calls like this is an Uncharted/Tomb Raider/Dead Space game.
Speaking of, you ever consider creating more Eezo based gear? We know biotic effects can be done purely through machines from the prison in ME2, so why not a stasis module and kinesis module like in Dead Space? Make anyone a low level biotic with the right gear and maybe an implant. And of course Brock would have an upgraded version.
Also as for love interests I can't say I want Shepherd to be one. It could work but she's chosen not to trust him constantly. I genuinely think Miranda's paranoid ass wouldn't be this bad about it, though she wouldn't have "watching paint dry" Alenko whispering in her ear. So of human, I say go for Miranda because she needs loving too. If alien idk, I'm fond of Quarians, Tali is best girl but he's got a laundry list of Asari to choose from.
Also also, is there a reason we don't get reviews each chapter? I know it's not a huge deal but it also seems fairly easy so I'm wondering if it's a in universe reason or just a not feeling it thing. And maybe we could get reviews for some of the game releases he's doing? Maybe learn about the poekmon that Wrex made of we haven't already, not sure about that.
Anyway, love the story man. I check daily for updates and this is the only story I can say I've ever done that for. Keep up the amazing work!
Honestly at this point I'm wondering if a certain flaming wheel with wings and eyes isn't protecting him. Dude gets near death injuries and close calls like this is an Uncharted/Tomb Raider/Dead Space game.
Speaking of, you ever consider creating more Eezo based gear? We know biotic effects can be done purely through machines from the prison in ME2, so why not a stasis module and kinesis module like in Dead Space? Make anyone a low level biotic with the right gear and maybe an implant. And of course Brock would have an upgraded version.
Also as for love interests I can't say I want Shepherd to be one. It could work but she's chosen not to trust him constantly. I genuinely think Miranda's paranoid ass wouldn't be this bad about it, though she wouldn't have "watching paint dry" Alenko whispering in her ear. So of human, I say go for Miranda because she needs loving too. If alien idk, I'm fond of Quarians, Tali is best girl but he's got a laundry list of Asari to choose from.
Also also, is there a reason we don't get reviews each chapter? I know it's not a huge deal but it also seems fairly easy so I'm wondering if it's a in universe reason or just a not feeling it thing. And maybe we could get reviews for some of the game releases he's doing? Maybe learn about the poekmon that Wrex made of we haven't already, not sure about that.
Anyway, love the story man. I check daily for updates and this is the only story I can say I've ever done that for. Keep up the amazing work!
4/30 c57 guest
Awesome, can't wait to see the wrap up of the aftermath of this crapfest. Can't wait to see what's coming next now that ME1 is done. Will ME2 happens or will there divergence from the canon storyline.
Awesome, can't wait to see the wrap up of the aftermath of this crapfest. Can't wait to see what's coming next now that ME1 is done. Will ME2 happens or will there divergence from the canon storyline.
5/2 c57 georjaraine
Great job keep up the good work I hope you put up more reviews because I really want read them reaction because it was good good luck on the next
Great job keep up the good work I hope you put up more reviews because I really want read them reaction because it was good good luck on the next
5/1 c57 
9CaedmonCousland
Rather confused on the MAC. Obviously haven't kept up with the technical aspects that have been dropped occasionally. Anything needing speed-of-light calcs is a Super Mac though, and that is space station stuff till you get to UNSC Infinity level crap. Regular MAC's are hilariously slow compared to ME dreadnoughts, even if they have more impact due to being far heavier, and you need at least two to down a Reaper based on the 4 dreadnought limit of their shields ME3 codex gave us. So, this has to be a Super MAC, which confuses me a bit. One thing to say with current tech no one felt it necessary to create such a hilariously overpowered orbital gun when precise FTL jumps are a thing, and they were too late to make them from ME1 to invasion, but a mobile super MAC?
That is just minor things though, which tend to arise. I actually liked that you had the ambush work. It was anticlimactic, but you actually had Brock's efforts and plans for years WORK. That is well worth me tipping my hat to you, sir.
9CaedmonCouslandRather confused on the MAC. Obviously haven't kept up with the technical aspects that have been dropped occasionally. Anything needing speed-of-light calcs is a Super Mac though, and that is space station stuff till you get to UNSC Infinity level crap. Regular MAC's are hilariously slow compared to ME dreadnoughts, even if they have more impact due to being far heavier, and you need at least two to down a Reaper based on the 4 dreadnought limit of their shields ME3 codex gave us. So, this has to be a Super MAC, which confuses me a bit. One thing to say with current tech no one felt it necessary to create such a hilariously overpowered orbital gun when precise FTL jumps are a thing, and they were too late to make them from ME1 to invasion, but a mobile super MAC?
That is just minor things though, which tend to arise. I actually liked that you had the ambush work. It was anticlimactic, but you actually had Brock's efforts and plans for years WORK. That is well worth me tipping my hat to you, sir.
5/1 c57 Blackholelord
Personally can't wait for the next update. Also, if possible for possible aftermath chapter have the STG who been doing their normal spying thing have a talk about the Krogan critic requests for them to create and you can use a certain future doctor be amongst those going over these requests for the STG to create. It be a great laugh as I do love the movie reviews you included.
Personally can't wait for the next update. Also, if possible for possible aftermath chapter have the STG who been doing their normal spying thing have a talk about the Krogan critic requests for them to create and you can use a certain future doctor be amongst those going over these requests for the STG to create. It be a great laugh as I do love the movie reviews you included.
4/30 c57 Tony McNucklz
Only two changes I'd make. First is I'm still lost on how the mass effect converted-minigun Brock had invented played no role in any of this. You broke that out what, just the once to off one guy on Omega? That thing isn't just perfect for a krogan heavy weapon, but it would work as a machine gun emplacement that could have been used at the ingress relay. Just two of them properly positioned even if he didn't have them pre-deployed would have been both strategic and awesome to get them set up and start unloading on the waves of geth. could take two soldiers to move, one for the gun, the other the ammo and coolant. Machine gun paired soldiers for one gun were a thing in WW2, no reason it couldn't be used here for a sci-fi machine gun.
The other change is why couldn't it be his left arm so he could get a Winter Soldier arm? Pretty sure Mass Effect doesn't have any tech for a prosthetic that will get his leg up to being reliable in combat again. The only thing that ever came up was Project Lazarus piecing Shephard back together, but that was what a couple billion credits? Shieldstar can't drop that much on just one soldier even if it's the boss, it would be beyond a waste of resources with funds that could buy several dozen smaller or a few bigger ships. At least with an off-arm being what was lost he could still work pistol, and maybe have a functioning arm by the time the Reapers role in. At least the impression I got was that the leg is definitely done, already amputated and way to damaged on both sides to be put back together.
I do wonder how Shieldstar will handle things while Brock is unconsious. Undoubtedly the Council and C-sec is going to start asking questions about the small illegal army that sprang out of nowhere, why they were here since obviously nobody could have known geth were coming, so it looks like a small army complete with air power was on the Citadel for unknown reasons. Unless Brock preplanned a story like he had information that said Saren was targeting the citadel and somehow planned to use infantry, and his best guess was shipping inert geth in and activating them here, and Shieldstar had no way to know how many, and he took precautions in case it was to many for Csec to handle. Even with all they've done, the govern,ent leaders are not going to be happy they were shown up, and there's a real chance they'll kick up a fuss, or that someone somewhere in the chain of command, maybe even Sparatus, will try to impound and confiscate Shieldstar weapons and those Grims, and detain the soldiers. Then what, do they fight csec? turn themselves in to be locked up while the bosses sort things out? Without Brock awake to run point, it's possible things could spiral pretty quick. Of course I could be catastrophizing a bit, but it seems relevant. Despite the assistance, the situation is going to leave a lot of questions needing answering.
Only two changes I'd make. First is I'm still lost on how the mass effect converted-minigun Brock had invented played no role in any of this. You broke that out what, just the once to off one guy on Omega? That thing isn't just perfect for a krogan heavy weapon, but it would work as a machine gun emplacement that could have been used at the ingress relay. Just two of them properly positioned even if he didn't have them pre-deployed would have been both strategic and awesome to get them set up and start unloading on the waves of geth. could take two soldiers to move, one for the gun, the other the ammo and coolant. Machine gun paired soldiers for one gun were a thing in WW2, no reason it couldn't be used here for a sci-fi machine gun.
The other change is why couldn't it be his left arm so he could get a Winter Soldier arm? Pretty sure Mass Effect doesn't have any tech for a prosthetic that will get his leg up to being reliable in combat again. The only thing that ever came up was Project Lazarus piecing Shephard back together, but that was what a couple billion credits? Shieldstar can't drop that much on just one soldier even if it's the boss, it would be beyond a waste of resources with funds that could buy several dozen smaller or a few bigger ships. At least with an off-arm being what was lost he could still work pistol, and maybe have a functioning arm by the time the Reapers role in. At least the impression I got was that the leg is definitely done, already amputated and way to damaged on both sides to be put back together.
I do wonder how Shieldstar will handle things while Brock is unconsious. Undoubtedly the Council and C-sec is going to start asking questions about the small illegal army that sprang out of nowhere, why they were here since obviously nobody could have known geth were coming, so it looks like a small army complete with air power was on the Citadel for unknown reasons. Unless Brock preplanned a story like he had information that said Saren was targeting the citadel and somehow planned to use infantry, and his best guess was shipping inert geth in and activating them here, and Shieldstar had no way to know how many, and he took precautions in case it was to many for Csec to handle. Even with all they've done, the govern,ent leaders are not going to be happy they were shown up, and there's a real chance they'll kick up a fuss, or that someone somewhere in the chain of command, maybe even Sparatus, will try to impound and confiscate Shieldstar weapons and those Grims, and detain the soldiers. Then what, do they fight csec? turn themselves in to be locked up while the bosses sort things out? Without Brock awake to run point, it's possible things could spiral pretty quick. Of course I could be catastrophizing a bit, but it seems relevant. Despite the assistance, the situation is going to leave a lot of questions needing answering.
4/30 c57 20ColtKit Productions
I think you enjoy having brock get hurt
lol
probably to avoid the "Mary Sue" stigma that follows fics like these.
but anyway
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this
20ColtKit ProductionsI think you enjoy having brock get hurt
lol
probably to avoid the "Mary Sue" stigma that follows fics like these.
but anyway
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this