for Now What?5/29/2017 c1 kreeft123xx
Although your spelling and grammar needs some work here and there, it's quite enjoyable to read.
Keep it up.
Although your spelling and grammar needs some work here and there, it's quite enjoyable to read.
Keep it up.
5/26/2017 c1 
2PearlTapioca
So far, this is very intriguing with Hoshi that likes the planet Venus that represents goddess in beauty and love in Roman mythology. Similar to Ichika's introduction of how he can pilot an IS instantly by touching it. The only thing that irked me was punctuation errors. Put periods at the end of the sentence because it took a while to see where it ends. Keep that it mind so your story does have a wall of endless words without a pause. I also like how Hoshi is not the type to sit down silently when Cecilia ran her mouth, and he fired back. Anyway, I'll be looking forward to see more out of this, and keep it up.
2PearlTapiocaSo far, this is very intriguing with Hoshi that likes the planet Venus that represents goddess in beauty and love in Roman mythology. Similar to Ichika's introduction of how he can pilot an IS instantly by touching it. The only thing that irked me was punctuation errors. Put periods at the end of the sentence because it took a while to see where it ends. Keep that it mind so your story does have a wall of endless words without a pause. I also like how Hoshi is not the type to sit down silently when Cecilia ran her mouth, and he fired back. Anyway, I'll be looking forward to see more out of this, and keep it up.
5/26/2017 c1 54Kerlongsj Evert Orlejov
Okay, that wasn't so bad. I had my share of OC adding or replacing Ichika fics rewrites (did one myself so I'm not going to call it stupid) and so far, this is decent. Not that good but not that bad either. It has a nice setting, an OC who is not immediately unlikeable and a decent paced story and well worked out idea. If I were you, I'd look around and read a bit.
And let me tell you right now. Infinte Stratos is a fun section to work in with a lot of possibilities in it. But don't count on reviews from your first story. This sections is hard work, low pay off. And that's not a lie. That's just how it is. And I'm doing this for two years. Well, not going to close up. I don't know what to think but I'll be sure to stick around. If you want feedback, contact me.
You wouldn't be the first writer I was a senpai for. And you won't be the last.
Saluut.
54Kerlongsj Evert OrlejovOkay, that wasn't so bad. I had my share of OC adding or replacing Ichika fics rewrites (did one myself so I'm not going to call it stupid) and so far, this is decent. Not that good but not that bad either. It has a nice setting, an OC who is not immediately unlikeable and a decent paced story and well worked out idea. If I were you, I'd look around and read a bit.
And let me tell you right now. Infinte Stratos is a fun section to work in with a lot of possibilities in it. But don't count on reviews from your first story. This sections is hard work, low pay off. And that's not a lie. That's just how it is. And I'm doing this for two years. Well, not going to close up. I don't know what to think but I'll be sure to stick around. If you want feedback, contact me.
You wouldn't be the first writer I was a senpai for. And you won't be the last.
Saluut.