6/30/2017 c1 3ealpha-scorpio
Kinda short, but I like where it's going. It would be great if we could see what that 'something' is. Imperfection, mortality, sin, etc...I like it when writers make a comparison between them [MonadRe-L), and you picked a critical point to start your work with. I really like that too. It's one scene in Ergo Proxy that I find heartbreaking, sad and yet enlightening. One my favorites, actually. Keep working on this. I think you need to give it more depth. Like why exactly Ergo Proxy chose the imperfect and descended