for A Dragon's Roar8/29/2024 c2 slademartin123
I love that instead of just flipping cersei and jamie’s personalities, you’ve made them take on what an outside element like there mother being alive into the equation. Thank you as its thr first in many fics I’ve read.
I love that instead of just flipping cersei and jamie’s personalities, you’ve made them take on what an outside element like there mother being alive into the equation. Thank you as its thr first in many fics I’ve read.
8/28/2024 c17 i.amdizzy2
I wouldve got this stupid ass King put to rest . For the good of the realm .
I wouldve got this stupid ass King put to rest . For the good of the realm .
8/14/2024 c33 
5The Smoky Joe
"she ripped the dagger out of her first kill"?
dude, her first kill happened on the way to Storm's End, remember? It as a whole thing for Jaime
5The Smoky Joe"she ripped the dagger out of her first kill"?
dude, her first kill happened on the way to Storm's End, remember? It as a whole thing for Jaime
8/13/2024 c31 The Smoky Joe
Dude, why the F would you tell us Rhaegar's plan? That just ruined half the suspense for me... Thatjust bad writing, here I am wondering what is going on, wondering what will happen... oh no wait, two lines down you tell me and now I know his plan will fail and i don' care anymore...
in all seriousness, I love your story, but I dislike your writing style. You should more often clarify who is being referred to instead of "he said" all the time. You can only do that effectively if you have recently clarified who is involved. But if the previous aragraph contains three possible names, how are we to know without a doubt who is meant?
Also, what's up with the words in italics? it's jarring and obnoxious, taking away any sort of mystery, you are making it way too obvious that these words have deeper meanings...
Seriously it's not a bad story, but you're sabotaging yourself by giving away half the plot in the author notes, amateur mistake
Dude, why the F would you tell us Rhaegar's plan? That just ruined half the suspense for me... Thatjust bad writing, here I am wondering what is going on, wondering what will happen... oh no wait, two lines down you tell me and now I know his plan will fail and i don' care anymore...
in all seriousness, I love your story, but I dislike your writing style. You should more often clarify who is being referred to instead of "he said" all the time. You can only do that effectively if you have recently clarified who is involved. But if the previous aragraph contains three possible names, how are we to know without a doubt who is meant?
Also, what's up with the words in italics? it's jarring and obnoxious, taking away any sort of mystery, you are making it way too obvious that these words have deeper meanings...
Seriously it's not a bad story, but you're sabotaging yourself by giving away half the plot in the author notes, amateur mistake
8/11/2024 c1 The Smoky Joe
I don't if it's because I just spent a few days with my own mother, but the way you wrote Daeron and is inner monologue, it made me slightly tear up. I think any son would relate to this, and I commend ou for writing it well and tastefully.
I will now proceed with your story. So far, it's better written than a lot of stuff on here, both narratives and grammatically , which is not always the case here
I don't if it's because I just spent a few days with my own mother, but the way you wrote Daeron and is inner monologue, it made me slightly tear up. I think any son would relate to this, and I commend ou for writing it well and tastefully.
I will now proceed with your story. So far, it's better written than a lot of stuff on here, both narratives and grammatically , which is not always the case here