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4/9 c30 Guest
Pretty shitty performances all around. Everyone was stupid. This isn't even a tenth as good as Lung or GG fights, author. The whole thing kinda sucked from the moment action started. You need to work a lot more on your nonduel fights.
4/9 c27 Guest
You do a good dumbass teen, author. Well done.
4/9 c22 Guest
This is the sort of dumb bullshit that should happen when teenagers are involved. I'm officially rating this better than at least 80% of all Worm fanfictions, author. Well done.
4/9 c18 Guest
Good job, author. You managed emotion well enough. You're not great at writing anything in particular but above average at everything. Very high bar for fanfiction.
4/9 c9 Guest
Protip: Nobody likes flashbacks. Even if they're somehow leading up to some big twist later on. Especially if they're somehow leading up to some big twist later on.
4/9 c5 Guest
An Armsmaster who isn't a robot, douche or robot douche? What a novel Worm fanfiction.
4/9 c2 Guest
A teenager having this much restraint is more unrealistic than all magebabble of Nasu combined, author.
4/5 c31 4SilverstormXD
I guess thats the final straw for me, no matter how you wanna try to twist the story and make Taylor as sympathetic as humanly possible that Sophia was there to rape torture and murder Taylor it doesnt fucking matter because Taylor Killed Sophia and Sophia didnt do shit yes she caused her to trigger yes she made her life miserable but Taylor still murdered Sophia and there is no justification you can pull out of your ass to make that ok.
4/1 c89 josematos977
Taylor/Lisa is a way better ship Clockblocker is funny and a good match for Taylor but Lisa is the perfect match for this Taylor.
3/22 c1 ElyseSyrova
... no TORT lawyer would pursue a class action against Victoria and New Wave for the civil equivalent of reckless endangerment on behalf of the other hostages and possibly even the Undersiders).

Also, there would be a separate Assault (NOT attempted) waPA charge against Vista, with possible Illegal abduction considerations, for her part in the illegal arrest attempt, as well as whatever charges are relevant for violating classification of info re Apocrypha, and sharing of classified information, both potentially separate felony charges.

Basically, what I'm saying is that this is less of a matter of "teaching a lesson", and more of a case of a poorly constructed sting operation against a rogue LEO agent and a known malcontent and public hazard in "hero's" costume, and potentially a play against said malcontent's criminally abetting vigilante organization (or at least the malfeasant element within the group, aka Carol, who renders it such).

tl;dr Both Vista and Glory committed several rather serious felony crimes here that probably should have netted them serious prison time, including a Birdcage, 3-strikes one for the latter, JUST based on their interactions with Apocrypha.

Yeah, that's how messed up this setting is: you don't measure it in the crimes the "villains" commit, but in the crimes the "heroes" do that are more or less completely ignored. Junior "heroes"aren't a bad thing just because of the child soldier aspect, but because they're generally stupid little s#!7s that do really boneheaded things that will automatically tank otherwise open-and-shut cases just by virtue of not knowing what the hell they aren't allowed to do and why not..
3/22 c41 ElyseSyrova
Just a reminder re this section and the matter of the attempted illegal arrest (doubly so as neither girl guilty of which has anything resembling legal arrest authority nor immediate probable cause), it also included an attempted assault with a parahuman ability for Victoria, with possible enhancement for depraved indifference and possible escalation to attempted murder (remember the fight at the bank, which should have netted Victoria actual AwaPA criminal charges, especially since it was in a bank with security cameras going, and the post facto explanation to her of the physical consequences of her actions, not to mention that while the bank might not have pressed criminal vandalism waPA charges, their insurance company most certainly would have brought civil suit against her if only to mitigate their own liability and costs, and it's unlikely that no lawyer wou
3/20 c16 Guest
Corrupt and/or incompetent authorities who screwed it all up

The shards screw with peoples heads and seek out conflict

On top of trauma the shards give you want you think you want in the worst possible way

Choose the worst of us at our lowest

So there is no using tinker tech to improve society medically or arcology building and farming and the environment because they are there to make things worse

Maybe all powers like that

Conflict is apparently more interesting to read about for most people than post bio/cyber solar punk post scarcity still I want to read about it

Some think if it goes on like this it's not going to be any different than if aliens conquered/enslavevd humanity we'd be bred to be like dogs who genetically worship our masters as work/herd/guard/attack/lap/etc dogs

Survive-flight/eat/fight/mate THIS is who we are at our core we can't control our nature but we can control our actions

Sythdroid hench dies becomes two (max one thousand for balance) becomes fire team, squads, and sections, companies, platoons, and regiments, they cover entire continents entire worlds, behind them roar and howl the engines of battle tanks war machines so massive they crush mountains to dust beneath their treads, ships and attack craft blot out the sun

Some will root for the underdog no matter what heroes don't punch down

Amy far more good as part time research assistant than first responder

Vicky more good as construction worker for habitat for humanity than superhero

Canned hunt rich kids pretending to be great white hunter

It's staying with an abusive spouse/friend because have no life skills or can't admit made a mistake with narcissistic sociopathic idiot some change for either better or worse

Some can only validate their own existence by grinding someone else beneath their heel

Some can only see the fight in front of them

Winning a duel is not winning a battle is not winning a war is not winning peace

Call out ten paces and try to kill like civilized human beings

There is always someone better fighting like a weakling is just common sense

For the law binds the mighty.

The law sets free the powerless and defends them from the cruel.

For we are not dumb beasts that know only the way of tooth and claw. Mercy. Justice. Duty. Those things we know

In the name of Justice. Of Law. Of Civilization

We Rise

Not always true. There had been more than a few times that the law was used to bind the weak and empower the ruthless. But this was the ideal, the thing that people aspired to.

We the people

As above, so below

And you’re the youngest and weakest?

Luddites always lose

See the enemy you should respect not the enemy you despise hating them doesn't make them weaker or less intelligent neither blind self to the flaws of those you love

No fight is ever truly fair the opponent of one or an army will have better arms or armor, training or experience, tactics or strategies, or skill and talent, more comrades, or just luck

There is a fine line between courage and stupidity if a stupid plan works it doesn't make it any less stupid you just got lucky, there is always someone stronger/smarter/faster/sneakier and so on so learning to fight like a weakling is simply common sense

Duty is to the people if it was just a constant duels deciding everything

Just because they aren't a threat to the heroes doesn't mean they can't destroy civilization or lessen the quality of life of the common people

Clever assassination or attrition

Everyone should have Symbioid duplicate a dozen like thoughtforms

Some think if it goes on like this it's not going to be any different than if aliens conquered/enslavevd humanity we'd be bred to be like dogs who genetically worship our masters as work/herd/guard/attack/lap/etc dogs

Survive-flight/eat/fight/mate THIS is who we are at our core we can't control our nature but we can control our actions

Sythdroid hench dies becomes two (max one thousand for balance) becomes fire team, squads, and sections, companies, platoons, and regiments, they cover entire continents entire worlds, behind them roar and howl the engines of battle tanks war machines so massive they crush mountains to dust beneath their treads, ships and attack craft blot out the sun

Kthanid
Time Clocks- transcend time and space Goldeneye (pocket)watch hyperspace weapons and gadgets flying castle tank (jet/submarine/spacecraft)/suit (White Shadow-symbioid/Spawn/Angelus Warriors/thoughtforms)- Avengers One Million BC-Panther(fauna/chimera/kaiju), Thor, Sorcerer Supreme, Ghost Rider, Iron Fist (Cap America), Phoenix (Cap Marvel), Starbrand, Hulk, Iron Man

Battery sized cold fusion power cities across planet

Reborn as noble abhumans-Dwarf/Giant
Beast(flora-Jack o Lanter)(chimera/kaiju)/Golem-robot cyborg)folk/ogre/troll Heroes of the Storm/Starfinder

Spelljammer

TF2/Fortnite

Orks become Krork- Maestro/Leader/Doc Green/Professor/Green Scar/Sakaarson/Nul “Breaker of Worlds” as well as Hobgoblin/Demogoblin

Eldar become Asurai organic Amazos/ Warhammer Fantasy Elves

Krork-Maestro/Leader/Professor/Doc Green/Doc Samson/Green Scar/Sakaarson/Nul “Breaker of Worlds” as well as Hobgoblin/Demogoblyn, Eldar become Azurai Magno organic Amazos/Brother Grimm Warhammer Fantasy Elves, A/ErakylonCelestial-halfangel-half devil demoness, Fairy/Pixie/NegaSpyte/Genie, Gnome, arch/uber/ultragremlin/demiimp-antifairy, replicae (genetic diversity different races and genders) perfect human (captain America/Nick Fury/Cable) clone, enhance (cybernetic brains) completely under thrall Symbioids Justice Titans-Supermartian/Rann/(Skorp Von Warstar)Adam Strage-John Carter/Flash Gordon, Wonderhawk, Aquaorion, Alakazam-Captain Marvel/Shazam/Zatara-Doc Fate(Wyrd)Mandrake, Bat-Lantern, Zauriel, Superdemon, Squad Superman (Earth 14/33/13)

Oxy-chew/Ninja Gum
Sythdroid hench dies becomes two (maximum one thousand for balance) becomes fire team, squads, and sections, companies, platoons, and regiments, they cover entire continents entire worlds, behind them roar and howl the engines of battle tanks war machines so massive they crush mountains to dust beneath their treads, ships and attack craft blot out the sun

Skins no two exactly alike enough genetic diversity gender and color

General Industrious

Scientific facts are true and denying them for corporate greed only gets people killed

Corporations being allowed to run every industry and infiltrate every facet of life is a recipe for disaster — especially when it comes to public safety — and they should always be made to know their limits. At the same time, corporations exist for a reason and are made up of people, not cartoon villains (even if the people at top can be greedy jerks) and "tearing down the system" instead of fixing it will lead to just as much death and horror as letting them run rampant.

More upset won't kill them

Nurture means teaching to take care of themselves and praising when earned and scolding not shaming when deserved

Horokoth/Zoar/Serpos

Krakoa/Superego/Phalanx seeds

Techno Organic Jungle virus Intergalactic Empire of Wakanda

Telefloronics

Asteroid M(s)-Krakoa- Savageland(s), Danger, Planet X Attilan(Zero-Techno-organic-Technoarchy, Phalanx, Barbuda, Builders

Yuuzhan Vong biots/Star Forge

Miniature thundercloud engine
Bug Out vehicles
Army tank truck Motor homes/RVs run only human waste replicator

Sunstone/Fortress of Solitude(Kole)/Wonderdome/New Themyscira/Thalarion/Mythlands-Cosmopolitan, Multiethnic/Omniethnic/Citizenry of the Empire of the Silver Snake/Zerox/Skartaris/Nth Metal/Mother Box-Element X-Celestial City/Warworld

Flying teleporting superscience city on own planet in own solar system in own pocket dimension each in own five hundred trillion alternative universes

Aether dragons wear city as crown crew spaceship fleets

Prim8-werecyborggorilla (duplicate eight for balance) with superintelligent tinker/thinker build nanoforge/fabricator post scarcity barrel of monkeys army armed with monkeywrench for super science magic wand

Kong/Grodd/Ultra-Humanite/Jokaero/Captain Simian and the Space Monkeys/Super Apes/Super Abominapes/Ghouloon

Kwisatz Haderach powers summon and command the cinnamon spice like dust and sandstorm Cinnamon beach desert sandstorm make grains of sand enlarge to boulders to asteroids

Castlevania summon castles, hordes of armors/wolves/bats/birds/mist

picotech tooth jewelry

summon copy of opponent under thrall

Gemflamelasersnakebeard

High tech and/or mystic slingshot infinite effect/infinite prehensile ricochet maybe limit amount of ammunition every twenty four hours ammo for balance

Force field tinker
Number Man/permanent Miss Militia-tank/Doomfort-Fortress of Doom/Matrix powers
Summon like Super Best Friends South Park

Utility fog
Shmoo
Pancea more good as part time research assistant than first responder
Eierlegende Wollmilchsau or egg laying wool-milk-sow
Fiery Dino Piranha

Everyone should have Symbioid duplicate a dozen like angelus warriors

Some think if it goes on like this it's not going to be any different than if aliens conquered/enslaved humanity we'd be bred to alter brain chemistry to be like dogs who genetically worship our masters as work/herd/guard/attack/lap/etc dogs

Survive-flight/eat/fight/mate THIS is who we are at our core we can't control our nature but we can control our actions

G.E.C.K
matter replicator-Vending Machine

Synthdroid

Human replica droid

blasters, droid army, ships

medpack- diagnostics such as medisensors and also could provide flexclamps, synthflesh, irrigation bulbs, bacta, kolto, spray-bandages, bacta patches, spray hypos, bone stabilizers, antiseptics, medical drugs, coagulants, stimulants such as stim-shots, and other essential medicines for the treatment of wounds.

Terraform processor
Farkiller
Single atom wide blade

Infantilization is also abuse

the real world is a harsh and violent place that sometimes takes a fair amount of violence to survive in

Floating teleporting archipelago palace eyerie pyramid with a dozen smaller of same in garage

Spore-virus/bacteria
Swarms wasp/kaiju dragonmen snake/scorpion tails
Packs of Heavenhounds batwinged three headed wolfmen/werecerberusmen
Flocks (fauna)chimera-wyvern/wolf/sabretooth(stripes/spots)/bat/avianmen

Omnipurpose VI drones mech biopsyber one atom/pinpoint/marble baseball/basketball/(taser)deathstar duplicate to swarms

Cell/Insect swarms/bird flocks/gynoid armies/dragon Kaiju hordes

Battleorbs-medic/taser/sniper/machine gun nukes
teleporting flying castletank/battleship hordes

Construction/deconstruction drones teleporting flying marble-castletanks/battleships

hordes lion and eagle headed angels heal peak human with one swing of flaming word

Medusa
Nolabab Mane of Snakes
SnakeflameMane

Truthbrarian
Omnikron

Got thinking Black Lagoon omakes
Gun Pixie (BB Hood)
summon werebear/lightning Celestial dragon commandos (Fin Fang Foom wear cities as crowns crew fleets of spaceships)
Tanya von Degurechaff

Zerg/Tyranids

Ice/Acid/Taser/Impact/Magnetic/Lead-Line/Flame/Sonic Disruptors/Expanding Web-Foam/Micro-Coiled Z-Metal/Quick-Drying Web-Cement Webbing
Specialized Voice Commands
Web Barrage/Wide Net/Recoil Strand
Spider-Boy
Richard Wenthworth
Spidercar
Spider Noir
Slingers
Prodigy's Suit, Ricochet's Suit, Dusk's Suit and Hornet's Suit
Symbiote

Stark enhanced Iron
Insect Queen Bee Exobytes, One Earth Regime Troops 5-U-93-R Woden's Blood
Queen Desira
Zealot
Jestra, Sphinx
Blackfire, Jinx
Tokyo Rose (Kasumi twin sister Cassandra Cain)
Nightflame
Mirabai
Enchnatress
Nightshade
Matrix, Belinda Zee, Supra/Ultra/Ubergirl, Superior Girl, Divine, Nuclear (Wo)Men, Bizarros-stronger, Smarter, faster, tougher, better looking than Supes, Ms. Gsptlsnz, Gzntplzk
Astarte/Veronica Cale Theana, Paula/Gerta von Gunther, Bruna-Brunhilde, Gudra/Gundra, Deva, Dark Angel, Deathbringer, Grail, Queen of Fables, Crow Children
Barda, Bekka, Maxima
Blithe, Twilight, Majesty, (Herculina)
Theana, Satin Satan Girl
Dawn/She-Ra (Bruna Ambrozia Fay)
Thundra, Zarda
Zamaron
Wonder Woman One Million
Transportation
Invisible Spacecraft made by Harmony and Charity
Weapons
Harmony and Charity: Wonder Woman wields a pair of bracers with an AI in them that could create Energy Construct Creation Force Field indestructible force-field objects like shields and swords in addition to providing tactical advice.
Purple Healing Ray/Mental Radio
Hephaestus guns/lasers/invisible jet

Society's Fault/Social Contractors
Lesser/Necessary Evil/Utilitarians/Pragmatists

Without a competent bureaucracy all you have is urine soaked graffiti

Heroes of the Storm Stukov Ellisberg/Eagleton

Schrodinger Alucard Hellsing Tigerclaw/Shadowkhan like Glaistig Uaine and Noelle organic but cybernetic brains VI

Construction/deconstruction drones teleporting flying marble-castletanks/battleships

Omnipurpose VI drones mech biopsyber one atom/pinpoint/marble baseball/basketball/(taser)deathstar duplicate to swarms

Cell/Insect swarms/bird flocks/gynoid armies/dragon Kaiju swarms

Battleorbs-medic/taser/sniper/machine gun nukes
teleporting flying castletank/battleship hordes

hordes of eagle and lion headed angels with flaming swords to heal cities with a wave of sword and call down rain of fire

So like Alabaster come back if dead but with ten VI drones and one hundred for each of them a thousand for each of them and so on maybe limit a thousand for balance

Sage Tessa X-Men

Still want to see Taylor infinite multitask queen administer maybe her create a VI gynoid cybernetic brain polity/culture

Fortnite creative app on a mirror/crystal post scarcity for everyone

I think of Taylor as Cincinnatus civic duty citizenship duty to future generations community service as close to an ideal autocrat as human beings get discounting lack of communication skills
Do anything sacrifice time/money/effort/anything for humanity, for her city, for a stranger

Everyone has some tunnel vision

Do we do away with fire because of arson

Steal or starve, kill or be killed, when the devil is the only one offering you hand up you take it

"Everyone is a criminal, we bribe people every day to not commit crimes. Little offers of things like security and comfort in exchange for not simply taking what is wanted. We write arbitrary rules that define criminal and not criminal activities and then we withhold the generous bounty of society from those that do not conform to the rules we have written Heros, villains, rogues, these are labels we apply out of some adolescent desire to make the world black and white. this is the real world, street level drug dealers are desperately peddling drugs to feed their own addictions, women are forced into prostitution to feed their families, kids join gangs to get enough money to help their parents. The conventions of good and evil, us and them, are the simple bigoted stereotypes of an older age. If you want to solve the problem you have to remove your blinders and actually see what's going on here. A few kids have crashed into an upscale party and held up a bank while wearing little more than Halloween masks. Sure the kids have prior felonies, and sure they are armed with extra-normal abilities, but if we treat them like supervillains then that is exactly what they will become. We are the ones that define these people. If we stick the wrong label on them then ten years from now, when they aren't half our size we will be facing hardened criminals with body counts. The system does not work. I have seen the statistics. Outside of lifetime sentences in the Birdcage the recidivism rate on criminal behavior is almost eighty percent. "

It comes down to ability and opportunity

Equitability and equality
Standard of living and quality of life

Where are the hospitals and universities

Mad dogs need to be put down but lambs are only good for going to the slaughter

We aren't worker/warrior ants we're tool using killer apes

Crime is a systemic problem most of the time, at least the crime you're dealing with here. You can't get rid of it by punching it in the face. A dying city with more and more of the population falling destitute as there's just not enough work to go around. If you can't work, you can't earn money. If you can't earn money, you can't afford shelter, food, and so on. Much less if you have any offspring or other dependents. Problems inherent in a system that requires people to pay for the right to live, but that in turn is inherent in a society that's scraping up against scarcity of resources even without the executioner's axe in the form of the Endbringers."

"So you wind up with a ton of people without great options. Join a gang, get money, survive and maybe more. Kaiser rallies people to the E88 by blaming the minorities. So there's a situation of "Join us! Food! Protection! Improve the city by getting rid of all of those minorities dragging us down and taking our jobs!" And then on the other hand you have Lung who came over after Kyushu sank. Gotta hand it to the guy, stood toe to toe with Levi and is still here. Granted, Levi is fine and Kyushu is gone despite Lung physically stalemating him, which is actually quite symbolic for the state of your world…"

"Oh! Off subject! Ok, so, he takes over immigrants from a place far worse than even Brockton Bay here and then co opts the local asians though with Kaiser beating his drums he doesn't exactly have to go hunting for people that want in to get away from that. So the Heroes are basically a bandaid on something that's in desperate need of surgery, slowing the rate of collapse but doing nothing to actually stop it."

She finally paused to take a breath and pointed at me dramatically. "And that's why you can't just punch out an Endbringer!"

She seemed to consider her words for a moment, mulling them over before shrugging. "Huh. Basically the same thing when you really get down to it. Neat! Can't punch out crime, can't punch out Endbringers. Gotta plan and use your resources effectively, applying your strength in the critical locations where it will advance your goals. Little clicks here and there until it cascades into your victory. Just matching strength to strength with these kinds of things causes lots of collateral damage and you lose anyways, just like Kyushu."

"Clean it up a bit, shift everything over to victimless crimes. Use the funds generated to improve the living quality of the people that live in the city so that they're not as desperate, impoverished, and pretty much given up. Probably throw a chunk of money at one of the many parahumans that could trivially clean up that eyesore of the boat graveyard so the port can be used for trade again. Really, the constant reminder of the state of the city is a horrific morale sink. Don't get me started on closing international shipping because of fear of Leviathan. The Endbringers attack cities on basically a schedule for "

Another blink on my part. It wasn't really that simple, was it? I mean, sure. There were plenty of parahumans that could take care of it. Hell, E88 could probably have handled it in under a month if they were so inclined. Alexandria could handle it in a day. The right tinker could…"Holy fuck. Why hasn't anyone done it?"

"The city itself doesn't have the cash to gamble on it helping. Lung doesn't care about much in general, Kaiser is advancing himself on the fear and misery of the current status quo, and so on. Trivial problem to solve when we have the resources. Just call up the Toybox and see what they would charge to handle it." She waved her hand dismissively as though taking care of one of the biggest problems in the city for long as I cared to remember was nothing. I guess compared to saving the multiverse it kind of was
3/20 c62 1MysticRising
There was something off with the writting. Some of the plot is great such as Coil, but Kelphi really ruined it. It just seemed so... pathetic that Taylor had so many HS as options, and Kelphi was the only option. It felt too forced, and at the very end she basically used non-Kelphi powers to seal Noelle. Like really there was no point to it, and how it's developing is just soo... melodramatic.
There are genuine great plot points like Sophia's death, and some that are so forced and tepid like the PRT's reaction (I partially mentioned that before). Im dropingthis fic, but I hope you continue to improve your writing.
3/19 c23 MysticRising
I wonder if Victor can steal those skills. I doubt it as they are magical in nature, but it would be interesting to explore. He's a rather lame villain, so it would be interesting to explore this avenue.
3/19 c16 MysticRising
Personally I found the whole identify reveal to be illogical. It makes much more sense for them to explore other more logical ideas first, such as someone killed sophia and gave it to Taylor as a GIFT. Like someone was aware of her circumstances and did it for Taylor rather than it being Taylor herself who killed her. I mean identifying Taylor as a cape makes some sense, but maybe a later avenue of thought and still a possibility rather than the certainty they are treating it as.
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