for Slices of Life11/28/2018 c13 Guest
Lol i got dream fem Corrine on the first try and i didn't even have the orbs for it.
It was the free summon XD
Ah...
Wait where's mini-zura?
Lol i got dream fem Corrine on the first try and i didn't even have the orbs for it.
It was the free summon XD
Ah...
Wait where's mini-zura?
11/8/2018 c12 Guest
Chapter of every summoner life.
Chapter of every summoner life.
10/18/2018 c11 Guest
Please continue this you glorious # $!
Please continue this you glorious # $!
9/28/2018 c10 deadaccount562
Chapter ten is now the best chapter.
I probably shouldn't have found that as funny as I did.
Chapter ten is now the best chapter.
I probably shouldn't have found that as funny as I did.
9/17/2018 c10 Guest
Please continue!
Please continue!
3/28/2018 c10 kylC
RIP Alm. I've always wondered how smite would work with a calvary unit. Welp.
Also, congrats on the Alm! I have yet to get one myself damn it.
RIP Alm. I've always wondered how smite would work with a calvary unit. Welp.
Also, congrats on the Alm! I have yet to get one myself damn it.
6/23/2017 c3 
15Maxcy Leland
Ohhh yes! When I realized it was Alfonse talking, I died. Poor little blue swordsman is on the wrong end of Kiran's annoyance, just because he's himself and not the Hero King.
So many blue-haired lords. It sounds like Alm might call Seliph 'Marth' on accident. And I'm sure that masked Lucina isn't going to make things easier, even with name tags. Maybe people get used to constantly introducing themselves when they need a partner or some help? If Kiran brings from home a couple packages of those sticker name tags that say 'Hello, my name is _', that would be a sight to see.
15Maxcy LelandOhhh yes! When I realized it was Alfonse talking, I died. Poor little blue swordsman is on the wrong end of Kiran's annoyance, just because he's himself and not the Hero King.
So many blue-haired lords. It sounds like Alm might call Seliph 'Marth' on accident. And I'm sure that masked Lucina isn't going to make things easier, even with name tags. Maybe people get used to constantly introducing themselves when they need a partner or some help? If Kiran brings from home a couple packages of those sticker name tags that say 'Hello, my name is _', that would be a sight to see.
6/15/2017 c2 limitBREAK4
Ooh, I'm liking this a lot. Nice to see the summoner not treated as some psychotic win-at-any-cost tactician. Hope to see more!
Ooh, I'm liking this a lot. Nice to see the summoner not treated as some psychotic win-at-any-cost tactician. Hope to see more!
6/15/2017 c2 Maxcy Leland
"I FOUND THE SUMMONER!" Absolutely hilarious. XD I liked how smoothly the characters played off each other here. Anna and Ephraim are both so dedicated to their fetish of choice. Imagine if Anna insisted on being paid with orbs or thousands of hero feathers. Imagine having to pay any of the Heroes a salary. Poor Alfonse, lol. I can just see him sitting at a desk in a rumpled collar shirt and loose tie, running his hands through his hair as he looks at the mountain of paperwork. Good thing Heroes work for free [or because it's 'mutually beneficial' ;-)]. Wow, did I ever go off on a tangent.
Body language is a huge percentage of our communication, so putting the actions of one person with the speech of someone else can make things confusing.
Here's a section of the dialogue redone as an example:
"Welp sorry, but I haven't seen them today."
Ephraim's shoulders slumped yet he nodded. "Thank you. If you do, please let me know."
The way it is currently written makes it sound like Ephraim said what Anna actually said. Sorry if this is confusing! Besides that, the conversation flowed quite naturally.
"I FOUND THE SUMMONER!" Absolutely hilarious. XD I liked how smoothly the characters played off each other here. Anna and Ephraim are both so dedicated to their fetish of choice. Imagine if Anna insisted on being paid with orbs or thousands of hero feathers. Imagine having to pay any of the Heroes a salary. Poor Alfonse, lol. I can just see him sitting at a desk in a rumpled collar shirt and loose tie, running his hands through his hair as he looks at the mountain of paperwork. Good thing Heroes work for free [or because it's 'mutually beneficial' ;-)]. Wow, did I ever go off on a tangent.
Body language is a huge percentage of our communication, so putting the actions of one person with the speech of someone else can make things confusing.
Here's a section of the dialogue redone as an example:
"Welp sorry, but I haven't seen them today."
Ephraim's shoulders slumped yet he nodded. "Thank you. If you do, please let me know."
The way it is currently written makes it sound like Ephraim said what Anna actually said. Sorry if this is confusing! Besides that, the conversation flowed quite naturally.
6/14/2017 c1 Maxcy Leland
Aaaa! I love Soren! I see that confession from him as his decision to lay all the cards on the table, so that you don't accidentally associate yourself with him and end up stained with the stigma of the Branded. Because deep down he cares. Loved Kiran's gentle acceptance and welcome.
If I could suggest something, when Kiran responded to Soren's confession, they said that there are people who are different and judged, but that they aren't 'one of those people'. The problem is that Kiran didn't make it clear that they weren't someone who judged. It sounds like they said that they weren't someone who is different or judged. You might want to modify that.
This was a cute beginning to a fic that sounds really snuggly and fluffy! Happy summer to you! :D
Aaaa! I love Soren! I see that confession from him as his decision to lay all the cards on the table, so that you don't accidentally associate yourself with him and end up stained with the stigma of the Branded. Because deep down he cares. Loved Kiran's gentle acceptance and welcome.
If I could suggest something, when Kiran responded to Soren's confession, they said that there are people who are different and judged, but that they aren't 'one of those people'. The problem is that Kiran didn't make it clear that they weren't someone who judged. It sounds like they said that they weren't someone who is different or judged. You might want to modify that.
This was a cute beginning to a fic that sounds really snuggly and fluffy! Happy summer to you! :D