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7/11/2017 c1 19Masane
It was good, but at the same they seem to have so many errors at each sentences that I the reading wasn't really smooth even if I'm sure I understand 100 % of what you wanted to said ...but it could be my imagination or because I'm tired.

This aside, good job, look forward for the next.
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6/21/2017 c1 5HonoMaki22
Faito Da YO! hahaha
YES! HONOMAKI! hahah

continue this please! :)
6/18/2017 c1 Misaka22
Congrats on your first story! Hoping you continue this ehehe :))
HonoMaki is 3
6/19/2017 c1 143YayaSamuko
You have some grammatic error, but i guess it's normal for a first time. Lem me point few things that i found while rrading thus:

1. Always start a sentence with capital letter and end it with a dot (. or ! or ?) (e.g: They went by her house first.)
2. Always put a space after each sentence before starting another one (e.g: She was right. I was wrong.)
3. Get a new paragreach each time the person talking changes. (e.g: "I want a shower." Maki said.
"I want to take one with Maki-chan too." Honoka insisted.
"B-baka! What are you talking about?")

These were the most visible mistakes i saw. Overall, I really love Honoka and Maki so much. These two are so cute together and it always makes me happy to find stories about them.

Good day to you!

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