for To The Next10/3/2021 c38 Guest
Why are you making Alex act so stupid?
Why are you making Alex act so stupid?
10/3/2021 c8 Guest
I'm super embarssed that Alex let's herself be bullied, especially Hufflepuffs...
I'm super embarssed that Alex let's herself be bullied, especially Hufflepuffs...
9/24/2021 c59 nolongeracollegestudent34
I love your OC! I am excited to see her journey continue and I love that she acts like a mentor/older sister to the firsties!
I love your OC! I am excited to see her journey continue and I love that she acts like a mentor/older sister to the firsties!
9/10/2021 c1 Meg
I found this story last week and am OBSESSED! You go through the school years at a perfect pace, you know what to focus on, and you write SO WELL. Can't wait to read more!
I found this story last week and am OBSESSED! You go through the school years at a perfect pace, you know what to focus on, and you write SO WELL. Can't wait to read more!
9/9/2021 c11 So long ago
I like your writing style.
I hope the story line will diverge from the books. After so many years I guess I love the universe, but find the plot too familiar if there is no disconnect from canon.
I like your writing style.
I hope the story line will diverge from the books. After so many years I guess I love the universe, but find the plot too familiar if there is no disconnect from canon.
9/6/2021 c59 Jiopaba
Interesting direction to go at the end there. I do have to say I'm a bit disappointed that nothing came of the Veil of Death though. Like... did everyone just forget what happened? Wasn't Harry staring straight at it? Did the whole universe just hiccup and forget how she got to the atrium, especially since for Harry to be in that position he had to have sprinted up to chase down a death eater in a rage over that exact event?
It's weird that it just gets completely wallpapered over. After six books worth of the story I think I've finally come to the conclusion that Alexandra must be an unreliable narrator in more ways than are immediately obvious.
Interesting direction to go at the end there. I do have to say I'm a bit disappointed that nothing came of the Veil of Death though. Like... did everyone just forget what happened? Wasn't Harry staring straight at it? Did the whole universe just hiccup and forget how she got to the atrium, especially since for Harry to be in that position he had to have sprinted up to chase down a death eater in a rage over that exact event?
It's weird that it just gets completely wallpapered over. After six books worth of the story I think I've finally come to the conclusion that Alexandra must be an unreliable narrator in more ways than are immediately obvious.
9/6/2021 c44 Jiopaba
In some senses, the thoroughly failing memories of Alexandra Fortescue are a bit disappointing. I mean, yeah, it'd probably get a bit old if she overcame every problem with the power of foresight, but stuff like this is still a bit egregious.
Really, the fact that years later the French delegation from Beaubatons split up amongst the school along lines of languages spoken goes to show that her fears about easy translation charms were unfounded. Surely she at least could have left herself a few more clues doodled in crayon than one crude picture per book. I just pretend in my head that Alexandra had only read the Harry Potter books once ten years ago even when she died in her last life, and could barely remember any of it to start. Otherwise it's just hard to credit how bad her lack of foreknowledge is in most cases. The story works almost just as well so far if she weren't reincarnated at all, and merely blessed with good intuition and a cold disposition.
Really though, I do want to say that you'd probably benefit after years of writing it from reading your own story again once in a while. I notice a lot of minor little problems like Alex forgetting that she learned the basics of the Patronus charm at the start of her fourth year, or that Voldemort was killed nearly two years after she was born, and not a matter of months. Just little things that would be caught on a bigger editing pass maybe, or which are only obvious when reading the story all in one go.
In some senses, the thoroughly failing memories of Alexandra Fortescue are a bit disappointing. I mean, yeah, it'd probably get a bit old if she overcame every problem with the power of foresight, but stuff like this is still a bit egregious.
Really, the fact that years later the French delegation from Beaubatons split up amongst the school along lines of languages spoken goes to show that her fears about easy translation charms were unfounded. Surely she at least could have left herself a few more clues doodled in crayon than one crude picture per book. I just pretend in my head that Alexandra had only read the Harry Potter books once ten years ago even when she died in her last life, and could barely remember any of it to start. Otherwise it's just hard to credit how bad her lack of foreknowledge is in most cases. The story works almost just as well so far if she weren't reincarnated at all, and merely blessed with good intuition and a cold disposition.
Really though, I do want to say that you'd probably benefit after years of writing it from reading your own story again once in a while. I notice a lot of minor little problems like Alex forgetting that she learned the basics of the Patronus charm at the start of her fourth year, or that Voldemort was killed nearly two years after she was born, and not a matter of months. Just little things that would be caught on a bigger editing pass maybe, or which are only obvious when reading the story all in one go.
9/3/2021 c59 N
Oh fuck yeah, nice to see some lgbt representation on fics, specially when that isn’t the main focus of the fic! Also, Tonks was a really good choice lol I adore her
Oh fuck yeah, nice to see some lgbt representation on fics, specially when that isn’t the main focus of the fic! Also, Tonks was a really good choice lol I adore her
18/31/2021 c59 OneWhoReadsTooMuch
I'm glad to see that Alex is taking any opportunity to learn from experienced Witches/Wizards and aurors. She's aware that things are only going to get worse from here and she NEEDS to be prepared. Hopefully the rest of the teens realize that maybe they should start annoying the adults to teach them to.
I'm glad to see that Alex is taking any opportunity to learn from experienced Witches/Wizards and aurors. She's aware that things are only going to get worse from here and she NEEDS to be prepared. Hopefully the rest of the teens realize that maybe they should start annoying the adults to teach them to.