for Justice10/5/2024 c28 
3omegadramon2
Great chapter don’t have much say it was great i eagerly await the next chapter
PS did you always plan to use Transponder Snails here or was do to my advice or another’s.
3omegadramon2Great chapter don’t have much say it was great i eagerly await the next chapter
PS did you always plan to use Transponder Snails here or was do to my advice or another’s.
10/5/2024 c28 Hannibal the Bahamut
Thank you for the new chapter. Loved the interaction between Luffy, Bats and Wondie. Glad Luffy has made 2 new friends! Wonder what a dose of armament haki can do to an immortal. Definitely looking forward to the next chapter!
Thank you for the new chapter. Loved the interaction between Luffy, Bats and Wondie. Glad Luffy has made 2 new friends! Wonder what a dose of armament haki can do to an immortal. Definitely looking forward to the next chapter!
10/5/2024 c28 BrianShooter672
Glad to see you back Author. That's was a great chapter and i'm looking forward for the next Chapter in the Future.
1. And here i though Batman would still be Naive. But somehow he finally figure out what kinda a person Luffy is, bet that even he wouldn't risk of pissing the Idiot in the Future went involved his Nakama.
2. Went you think about it, the Straw Hats somehow agree that the moment went their Declare war with a Tyrant ruling a nation's. People will die regardless if their think it could prevent, it sicken them sure but their knew it would be a lot worse if they didn't. People who knew that learn the hard way from their past experience.
3. While Wonder Woman complaining that Luffy just show the World what happen went Meta people's Heroes or Villains work as a team would be like, Luffy being him. He just told the League to work harder and better if they want to get stronger. What of the odd Luffy ends up in Themyscira and save their island from a Threat like Ares or other, maybe he end up befriended all of them like he did with Amazonian Lily.
4. Knowing The Straw Hats, Luffy will probably beat Salvage to the point that he just destroy his dreams or his ambition like he did with the rest of other's people he encounter in the past, or their just figure it out how to break his immortality and left him to live in fear knowing he can't escape death or Hell.
Glad to see you back Author. That's was a great chapter and i'm looking forward for the next Chapter in the Future.
1. And here i though Batman would still be Naive. But somehow he finally figure out what kinda a person Luffy is, bet that even he wouldn't risk of pissing the Idiot in the Future went involved his Nakama.
2. Went you think about it, the Straw Hats somehow agree that the moment went their Declare war with a Tyrant ruling a nation's. People will die regardless if their think it could prevent, it sicken them sure but their knew it would be a lot worse if they didn't. People who knew that learn the hard way from their past experience.
3. While Wonder Woman complaining that Luffy just show the World what happen went Meta people's Heroes or Villains work as a team would be like, Luffy being him. He just told the League to work harder and better if they want to get stronger. What of the odd Luffy ends up in Themyscira and save their island from a Threat like Ares or other, maybe he end up befriended all of them like he did with Amazonian Lily.
4. Knowing The Straw Hats, Luffy will probably beat Salvage to the point that he just destroy his dreams or his ambition like he did with the rest of other's people he encounter in the past, or their just figure it out how to break his immortality and left him to live in fear knowing he can't escape death or Hell.
9/25/2024 c3 Haha
Yeah Lois Lane isn't nothing more than an annoyance at this point. Plus, the fact that she sides with the Justice League should have been called out by someone and accusing her on playing faves just because she's going out with superman.
Yeah Lois Lane isn't nothing more than an annoyance at this point. Plus, the fact that she sides with the Justice League should have been called out by someone and accusing her on playing faves just because she's going out with superman.
9/25/2024 c1 Guest
Seriously?
"Lots of companies, including both Wayne Enterprises and LexCorp, have been trying to buy the company," Clark explained, "except none of them have been successful."
"Alright," Lois agreed with raised eyebrows, "that is suspicious. I know Bruce Wayne's smart and got good people working for him, and if they think it would be a good deal, they'd do all they could to get a hold of Cherry Blossom. Just legally. But keeping Lex out!? How're they doing that!?"
That right there is the most dumbest reasons to have the Justice League be sus of the Straw Hats and felt like a forced excuse to go after them. Just because Lex's couldn't obtain their company automatically equals "OMG CHERRY BLOSSOM IS DOING SOMETHING VERY BAD, WE MUST TAKE THEM DOWN NOW!". Honestly, dumbest and forced reason ever.
Seriously?
"Lots of companies, including both Wayne Enterprises and LexCorp, have been trying to buy the company," Clark explained, "except none of them have been successful."
"Alright," Lois agreed with raised eyebrows, "that is suspicious. I know Bruce Wayne's smart and got good people working for him, and if they think it would be a good deal, they'd do all they could to get a hold of Cherry Blossom. Just legally. But keeping Lex out!? How're they doing that!?"
That right there is the most dumbest reasons to have the Justice League be sus of the Straw Hats and felt like a forced excuse to go after them. Just because Lex's couldn't obtain their company automatically equals "OMG CHERRY BLOSSOM IS DOING SOMETHING VERY BAD, WE MUST TAKE THEM DOWN NOW!". Honestly, dumbest and forced reason ever.
9/15/2024 c1 Disgruntled Seer
Go die already, you brain dead prick.
Go die already, you brain dead prick.
8/28/2024 c6 Sideways8
Is Bizarro going to join the straw hats? Because I could see that happening whether intentionally or not
Is Bizarro going to join the straw hats? Because I could see that happening whether intentionally or not
8/19/2024 c27 Guest
I confess, the wait is killing me! I want a new cap! (T_T)
I confess, the wait is killing me! I want a new cap! (T_T)
7/29/2024 c4 Sir Cookie
Hello,
I generally don’t enjoy one piece fanfiction. Mostly due to loving the series so much. No author i have read has ever written one piece as well as the original author.
I see the direction you are taking the story and that sounds really interesting, however the way you are getting there, doesnt really make sense from one piece perspective. The things the crew have actually done: steal, set up company for medicine, brook performance, etc these all make sense and would be what they would do. Avoiding the justice league, one hundred percent thsi is what they would do, avoiding/running from the heroes, hundred percent they would do this.
Zoro’s eye replacment kind of bothers me, i cant really see him agreeing to this, but a case can be made that he would say “why not” and get it. But the big thing that bothers me, is how you are portraying the entire crew as hating/disliking justice. Which doesnt make sense. None of the crew have ever shown hating justice. Even robin, the person affected the most by the world government, and a much smaller part, the marines, doens thave any issue teaming up with marines.
Luffy himself says that he likes heroes. In fact you can say that luffy himself has dispensed justice in almost every major arc, where the marines were unable, unwilling, or ignorant, he didnt blame the marines for not knowing. He didn't say tear down the system, why is this built the way it is. Luffy is not an idealist, he is a realist, he looks at life how it is, not how it could be. And the entirety of the crew follow him in that regard.
Honestly, the mindset you have the crew adopt towards justice and the ruling body of this world is more in line with how Blackbeard views justice. Inadequate, worthless, hypocritical but unable to be torn down. Easily at least.
One thing to remember is that at the end of the day, every single one of the one piece pirates are selfish. If they cared about how the world is and to better it, they probably would never have left their home island. They would have stayed unable to abandon friends and family and done what they could to better their friends lives, or join the marines and fight the good fight. They have selfishly chosen to follow only their own dreams. A really good example is Yassop who abandoned a wife and child purely to follow his own selfish desire for adventure.
The crew speaking out and criticizing the way this world is makes no sense after they have abandoned their own world to do whatever they want, good or bad. It comes across like they are angry at this world for not allowing them to accomllish their dreams and they are going to nitpick every little stupid thing they think they see, not caring if they misinterpret or take things out of context.
Also, them deciding that things from their world and this world shouldnt mix makes no sense. That sounds like something robin would say offhandedly, then luffy would do that exact thing and she would shrug and be like, “what can you do?” Also zoro’s eye is this exactly, just occured to me while typing.
These are my closing remarks, i think i am going to continue reading but i may drop this story in the next chapter or two. Most character are just too out of character for me. Part of it may be the difference in meduim. One thing that is under appreciated in one piece is how oda does dialogue/thinking. Specifically Luffy, he almost or has never shown luffy using thinking bubbles. Because luffy just says whatever is on his mind. One of the underrated things is that when luffy doesnt talk i cant even imagine what he’s thinking. This kind of thing is really hard to represent in writing.
Thanks,
Sir Cookie (my handle dm me if you want to repsond)
Hello,
I generally don’t enjoy one piece fanfiction. Mostly due to loving the series so much. No author i have read has ever written one piece as well as the original author.
I see the direction you are taking the story and that sounds really interesting, however the way you are getting there, doesnt really make sense from one piece perspective. The things the crew have actually done: steal, set up company for medicine, brook performance, etc these all make sense and would be what they would do. Avoiding the justice league, one hundred percent thsi is what they would do, avoiding/running from the heroes, hundred percent they would do this.
Zoro’s eye replacment kind of bothers me, i cant really see him agreeing to this, but a case can be made that he would say “why not” and get it. But the big thing that bothers me, is how you are portraying the entire crew as hating/disliking justice. Which doesnt make sense. None of the crew have ever shown hating justice. Even robin, the person affected the most by the world government, and a much smaller part, the marines, doens thave any issue teaming up with marines.
Luffy himself says that he likes heroes. In fact you can say that luffy himself has dispensed justice in almost every major arc, where the marines were unable, unwilling, or ignorant, he didnt blame the marines for not knowing. He didn't say tear down the system, why is this built the way it is. Luffy is not an idealist, he is a realist, he looks at life how it is, not how it could be. And the entirety of the crew follow him in that regard.
Honestly, the mindset you have the crew adopt towards justice and the ruling body of this world is more in line with how Blackbeard views justice. Inadequate, worthless, hypocritical but unable to be torn down. Easily at least.
One thing to remember is that at the end of the day, every single one of the one piece pirates are selfish. If they cared about how the world is and to better it, they probably would never have left their home island. They would have stayed unable to abandon friends and family and done what they could to better their friends lives, or join the marines and fight the good fight. They have selfishly chosen to follow only their own dreams. A really good example is Yassop who abandoned a wife and child purely to follow his own selfish desire for adventure.
The crew speaking out and criticizing the way this world is makes no sense after they have abandoned their own world to do whatever they want, good or bad. It comes across like they are angry at this world for not allowing them to accomllish their dreams and they are going to nitpick every little stupid thing they think they see, not caring if they misinterpret or take things out of context.
Also, them deciding that things from their world and this world shouldnt mix makes no sense. That sounds like something robin would say offhandedly, then luffy would do that exact thing and she would shrug and be like, “what can you do?” Also zoro’s eye is this exactly, just occured to me while typing.
These are my closing remarks, i think i am going to continue reading but i may drop this story in the next chapter or two. Most character are just too out of character for me. Part of it may be the difference in meduim. One thing that is under appreciated in one piece is how oda does dialogue/thinking. Specifically Luffy, he almost or has never shown luffy using thinking bubbles. Because luffy just says whatever is on his mind. One of the underrated things is that when luffy doesnt talk i cant even imagine what he’s thinking. This kind of thing is really hard to represent in writing.
Thanks,
Sir Cookie (my handle dm me if you want to repsond)