for The Apocalypse6/22/2022 c3 MAYATHEDEATHGOD
Nice chapter but quick suggestion when a character talks give some space so dialogue doesn't end up being a paragraph, when you do give dialogue try adding action that the character may do while talking.(not all the time but sprinkle what they may do to "show" what they may be thinking) and lastly add a break line or large spaceing when changing pov or scenes so it's easier for the reader to know something changed. Overall it's a good story
Nice chapter but quick suggestion when a character talks give some space so dialogue doesn't end up being a paragraph, when you do give dialogue try adding action that the character may do while talking.(not all the time but sprinkle what they may do to "show" what they may be thinking) and lastly add a break line or large spaceing when changing pov or scenes so it's easier for the reader to know something changed. Overall it's a good story
9/1/2017 c3 Lancelot702
First, I enjoy the concept as I have been waiting for someone to do a dxd fic with something to do with the horsemen.
Second, her name is Aika not Alia
Third, please check through for grammar and spelling mistakes. Is english your first language? I understand there are a lot of writers here who are not natural english speakers.
Lastly, to me the writing needs much more detail. Everything seems much too rushed and bland
First, I enjoy the concept as I have been waiting for someone to do a dxd fic with something to do with the horsemen.
Second, her name is Aika not Alia
Third, please check through for grammar and spelling mistakes. Is english your first language? I understand there are a lot of writers here who are not natural english speakers.
Lastly, to me the writing needs much more detail. Everything seems much too rushed and bland
8/23/2017 c4 1stHorseman
I would like to see this as a harem with the ORC girls including Rias, Gabriel, Let Fey, Kuroka, Sona and Aika. Great chapter by the way hope to see more soon
I would like to see this as a harem with the ORC girls including Rias, Gabriel, Let Fey, Kuroka, Sona and Aika. Great chapter by the way hope to see more soon
8/22/2017 c4 
3TheUnknownUser2
great chapter I still say single with Koneko or double with Koneko and Kuroka, I'd say don't pair him with Rias no matter what, Adam should by no means get attracted to someone who ordered his friend to let him die
3TheUnknownUser2great chapter I still say single with Koneko or double with Koneko and Kuroka, I'd say don't pair him with Rias no matter what, Adam should by no means get attracted to someone who ordered his friend to let him die
8/17/2017 c3 Guest
Can the harem be Oc x Rias, Akeno, Koneko, Sona, Tsubaki, Serafall, Irina, Xenovia, Grayfia, Rossweisse, Kuroka, Ravel, and Ophis
Can the harem be Oc x Rias, Akeno, Koneko, Sona, Tsubaki, Serafall, Irina, Xenovia, Grayfia, Rossweisse, Kuroka, Ravel, and Ophis
8/17/2017 c3 Guest
Wasn't one of the horsemen suppose to be a woman like in Darksiders
Wasn't one of the horsemen suppose to be a woman like in Darksiders
8/8/2017 c3 Guest
I like this can you make a harem and don't let issei be in this story if he does give him a oc girl no harem for him too many fanfics for him and less for the oc category
I like this can you make a harem and don't let issei be in this story if he does give him a oc girl no harem for him too many fanfics for him and less for the oc category
8/8/2017 c1 MOrntem
The title and description caught my attention
The title and description caught my attention
8/8/2017 c1 TheUnknownUser2
I really enjoyed this first real chapter and I can't wait for more. I also think that it would be cool for you to do either a single pairing with Koneko or a double pairing with Koneko and Kuroka
I really enjoyed this first real chapter and I can't wait for more. I also think that it would be cool for you to do either a single pairing with Koneko or a double pairing with Koneko and Kuroka
7/20/2017 c1 SHiva
Was already there and was fucking Trash! OC are in most Storys the greatest Trash. An Issei as Descendant of the Four Horsemen that would be good but not this crap.
Was already there and was fucking Trash! OC are in most Storys the greatest Trash. An Issei as Descendant of the Four Horsemen that would be good but not this crap.