12/30/2013 c1 Grimreaper21
It was cool but to be honest it needs to be longer I know u wanted to make some more chapters but it still needs to be longer well anyway it was aswome and if your taking ideas I'd love to give you some I don't write so I give people ideas you can find me at makaylaholloway.50 yahoo k great then see yeah on the other side of the bone ethers well
It was cool but to be honest it needs to be longer I know u wanted to make some more chapters but it still needs to be longer well anyway it was aswome and if your taking ideas I'd love to give you some I don't write so I give people ideas you can find me at makaylaholloway.50 yahoo k great then see yeah on the other side of the bone ethers well
6/21/2010 c1 3Storyluver101
you should make the lines go out longer and shorter paragraphs. like two to three lines. to make it easier to read. when someone talks start and knew paragraph. then u have a WAY better setting
you should make the lines go out longer and shorter paragraphs. like two to three lines. to make it easier to read. when someone talks start and knew paragraph. then u have a WAY better setting
6/7/2008 c2 KRISTEN
hi i dont have an account so i cant write this i dont know if its been done yet but you could make a fanfic of them fighting but inuyasha goes off DURING the fight and comes back 2 find that kagome killed the demon but got really hurt and every1 knew where he went
p.s.I HATE KIKYOU!
P.S.S YOU DONT HAVE 2 USE THIS ITS JUST A SUGGJUSTION[SRRY CANT SPELL 4 MY LIFE :P ]
hi i dont have an account so i cant write this i dont know if its been done yet but you could make a fanfic of them fighting but inuyasha goes off DURING the fight and comes back 2 find that kagome killed the demon but got really hurt and every1 knew where he went
p.s.I HATE KIKYOU!
P.S.S YOU DONT HAVE 2 USE THIS ITS JUST A SUGGJUSTION[SRRY CANT SPELL 4 MY LIFE :P ]
6/15/2007 c2 Sheta ley deamon
Oh my god!you absolutely have to continue this marvolous piece of work,personnally, I've read alot of novels, books, and all kinds of stories and this is deffinatly in the top 10.
Oh my god!you absolutely have to continue this marvolous piece of work,personnally, I've read alot of novels, books, and all kinds of stories and this is deffinatly in the top 10.
8/20/2006 c2 11pnai-87
I like the story line. You should work on format, spacing, grammar, spelling and punctuation. There's no reason not to make it professional.
I like the story line. You should work on format, spacing, grammar, spelling and punctuation. There's no reason not to make it professional.
1/13/2006 c2 8Angels-do-exist
Aw that was sweet! and cute!
And made me feel fuzzy after the sad/no happy ending one i just read!
Aw that was sweet! and cute!
And made me feel fuzzy after the sad/no happy ending one i just read!
12/1/2004 c1 Victoria
The idea of the story is really cute. I could not read the entire story. It was too difficult to follow, because of inproper paragraphs.
A new paragraph for each new thought,and speaker.
This will make your stories easier to read.
The idea of the story is really cute. I could not read the entire story. It was too difficult to follow, because of inproper paragraphs.
A new paragraph for each new thought,and speaker.
This will make your stories easier to read.
7/25/2004 c2 just another Inu Yasha Fan
Very nice, I think it showed a little nicer than normal Inu Yasha but unlike some fan fics I've read, you didn't change him completely. (THANK YOU!) heh, I don't like when characters change too much and you DID NOT do that so good job lol. Well, anyway, nice work. (my work -not ffs but just writing is on fiction press under aLwAyZgRaY02 if you wanna read it) So yea keep writing and remember don't get wrapped up in the story so much the real character is lost! Thankx again for writing this! :D
Very nice, I think it showed a little nicer than normal Inu Yasha but unlike some fan fics I've read, you didn't change him completely. (THANK YOU!) heh, I don't like when characters change too much and you DID NOT do that so good job lol. Well, anyway, nice work. (my work -not ffs but just writing is on fiction press under aLwAyZgRaY02 if you wanna read it) So yea keep writing and remember don't get wrapped up in the story so much the real character is lost! Thankx again for writing this! :D
5/31/2004 c1 9KHStennis01
You have some spelling things. first thing its not BABA
it BAKA! sry... Now uc... i Have spelling issues too! (don't worry thats why we have spell check)
:)
KWEL!
You have some spelling things. first thing its not BABA
it BAKA! sry... Now uc... i Have spelling issues too! (don't worry thats why we have spell check)
:)
KWEL!
3/4/2004 c2 johnnie mae
your story line is wonderful it takes a lot to get me interested and you got me hooked
your story line is wonderful it takes a lot to get me interested and you got me hooked