8/20/2017 c1 8Touzoshin
Congratulations on your first story. I like the characters that you chose as the protagonists. Future Gohan and Future Trunks are under utilized characters when it comes to crossovers. I'm generally not a fan of OC's, but I really can't speak on yours since I know little about her. Why is Iamari's hair brown when neither of her parents have that hair color? And is her name a pun of anything?

There were quite a few spelling mistakes in this chapter. I don't know if you have a beta or if you just proofread yourself, but this chapter could use a re-edit. Grammar is not one of my linguistic strong points, but I bypass that by using apps and websites. I would recommend using Grammarly. It's free and you can even add it as a plug-in to Microsoft Word.

Now, as for the actual story itself, it was fine. You chose a reasonable way for the DBZ characters to enter the DC Universe. None of the DC characters seemed out of character. The DBZ characters stayed true to their canon counterparts as well. My biggest gripe with this chapter was just the grammatical errors. If you work on that this could be a good story.