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10/19/2017 c8 Viper4K
Well, I do suspect certain new woman for Yeol's death...
10/12/2017 c7 Viper4K
Now let's hope she will not destroy Stephan's life again...
10/1/2017 c6 Viper4K
Well, that escalated quickly... And now I'm curious about his new haircut :P
9/28/2017 c5 NuclearBird
Okay, so I found this story through a link posted on the TwoKinds forum, and after reading through all of it I have to say that it's actually a good story, better than the usual that can be found on .

The premise, while not being very out of the ordinary did manage to draw me in enough to get to the most recent chapter and your character writing, while a bit rushed in my opinion, seems consistent and believable enough.

One of the few criticisms I have is that the narration is a bit too heavy on the dialogue side. It kind of ruins the flow of the writing to have little to no description or exposition outside of characters speaking to each other. I recommend that you focus a bit more on longer pauses between conversations, and significantly longer descriptive sections, along with showing the internal thougths of certain characters, most important being the main viewpoint characters.

The second hangup I have is that the story progression is a bit too quick for my liking, the events come and go too quick and that leaves little time for the reader to adjust to new developments between scenes and chapters. The most important tip I can give is the same as before.

Having said that, I still found this fic and enjoyable, if light read and I'm waiting for more. Also, you should really check out the forum and sign up, since there are no downsides and the community is pretty nice and willing to help.
9/22/2017 c5 Viper4K
Two surprises in the price of one. That's surprise on its own :P
9/14/2017 c4 Viper4K
Another good chapter! I think I can see the pairing here...

I have an idea... Why won't You post the link to that fanfic in Twokinds forum? It might get You some reviewers!
9/9/2017 c3 Viper4K
I like how professional Your chapters look!

And I really do hope Stephan can take one of wolf puppies as his pet friend, could be awesome!
9/5/2017 c2 Viper4K
Is it me or Stephan is developing feelings for Aikan?
I also can't wait to see a meeting with Emily!

Good story so far! Keep it up!
8/30/2017 c1 Viper4K
Nice fanfic! Well written, and with lots of potentials!

Continue it please, just for sake of reviving twokinds fanfics category...

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