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10/4/2022 c1 Bloody Rewrite
We inhabit a lot of the same fandoms and I enjoy your reviews and how you always take the time to leave them on five you read I respect that. Keep on keeping on bubba.
We inhabit a lot of the same fandoms and I enjoy your reviews and how you always take the time to leave them on five you read I respect that. Keep on keeping on bubba.
6/6/2020 c1 Some dude that likes to write
No one:
No one still:
The thot that plickens:
This story: *drip drip drip drip*
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The thot that plickens:
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4/9/2020 c1 
16mihairu7
Crap I sent it twice again...
Oh well, two's a charm! Or was that three? Meh, doesn't matter, this fic rocks
16mihairu7Crap I sent it twice again...
Oh well, two's a charm! Or was that three? Meh, doesn't matter, this fic rocks
4/9/2020 c2 mihairu7
That was pretty rad. Using his hollowed sense to make this Vorago was a cool idea since you can relate that spending so much time in a cell with nothing but rats for company would soon make you go mad.
I liked the dialogue Alacris and Vorago have as they debate about the items they find, and their conversation with Oscar was even funnier than I would have expected. While I agree that no dying undead wants to be told that their corpse will be looted, the honesty he reveals is like a saving grave for a person's sanity.
Alacris' confrontation with all the hollow's in the Asylum was also a big hit for me. I would have never thought of trying to converse with them myself (as I had thought that they all lacked the ability to comprehend anything besides 'undead', 'meat', 'kill', 'eat?').
Lastly, the slowly decaying memory you emphasized in chapter 1 was really good. I don't mind the first person POV and it really helped hammer in the point of how and undead feels when imprisoned like that, their minds slowly degrading as it loses its sense of time and clarity.
Overall, I really enjoyed this, especially the line towards the Asylum Demon before a blade was plunged into it's eye.
That was pretty rad. Using his hollowed sense to make this Vorago was a cool idea since you can relate that spending so much time in a cell with nothing but rats for company would soon make you go mad.
I liked the dialogue Alacris and Vorago have as they debate about the items they find, and their conversation with Oscar was even funnier than I would have expected. While I agree that no dying undead wants to be told that their corpse will be looted, the honesty he reveals is like a saving grave for a person's sanity.
Alacris' confrontation with all the hollow's in the Asylum was also a big hit for me. I would have never thought of trying to converse with them myself (as I had thought that they all lacked the ability to comprehend anything besides 'undead', 'meat', 'kill', 'eat?').
Lastly, the slowly decaying memory you emphasized in chapter 1 was really good. I don't mind the first person POV and it really helped hammer in the point of how and undead feels when imprisoned like that, their minds slowly degrading as it loses its sense of time and clarity.
Overall, I really enjoyed this, especially the line towards the Asylum Demon before a blade was plunged into it's eye.
4/9/2020 c2 mihairu7
That was pretty rad. Using his hollowed sense to make this Vorago was a cool idea since you can relate that spending so much time in a cell with nothing but rats for company would soon make you go mad.
I liked the dialogue Alacris and Vorago have as they debate about the items they find, and their conversation with Oscar was even funnier than I would have expected. While I agree that no dying undead wants to be told that their corpse will be looted, the honesty he reveals is like a saving grave for a person's sanity.
Alacris' confrontation with all the hollow's in the Asylum was also a big hit for me. I would have never thought of trying to converse with them myself (as I had thought that they all lacked the ability to comprehend anything besides 'undead', 'meat', 'kill', 'eat?').
Lastly, the slowly decaying memory you emphasized in chapter 1 was really good. I don't mind the first person POV and it really helped hammer in the point of how and undead feels when imprisoned like that, their minds slowly degrading as it loses its sense of time and clarity.
Overall, I really enjoyed this, especially the line towards the Asylum Demon before a blade was plunged into it's eye.
That was pretty rad. Using his hollowed sense to make this Vorago was a cool idea since you can relate that spending so much time in a cell with nothing but rats for company would soon make you go mad.
I liked the dialogue Alacris and Vorago have as they debate about the items they find, and their conversation with Oscar was even funnier than I would have expected. While I agree that no dying undead wants to be told that their corpse will be looted, the honesty he reveals is like a saving grave for a person's sanity.
Alacris' confrontation with all the hollow's in the Asylum was also a big hit for me. I would have never thought of trying to converse with them myself (as I had thought that they all lacked the ability to comprehend anything besides 'undead', 'meat', 'kill', 'eat?').
Lastly, the slowly decaying memory you emphasized in chapter 1 was really good. I don't mind the first person POV and it really helped hammer in the point of how and undead feels when imprisoned like that, their minds slowly degrading as it loses its sense of time and clarity.
Overall, I really enjoyed this, especially the line towards the Asylum Demon before a blade was plunged into it's eye.
9/19/2018 c2 2Billyyumyum2X4
The story is very good! I hope you continue it soon, and good luck! May great ideas come to you faster than they did to me!
2Billyyumyum2X4The story is very good! I hope you continue it soon, and good luck! May great ideas come to you faster than they did to me!
9/21/2017 c2 Guest
I guess the increased knockback on the Demon's swings is one of those things you changed.
I guess the increased knockback on the Demon's swings is one of those things you changed.
9/21/2017 c1 Guest
Interesting take on the curse, not a fan of the first person bits at the end. When we're looking at his mind, its understandable. Glad it is just for this chapter.
Interesting take on the curse, not a fan of the first person bits at the end. When we're looking at his mind, its understandable. Glad it is just for this chapter.
9/10/2017 c1 3Supreme Gamer
Bro, this is a great start for your story. It won't happen all at once or overnight, but there is literally no doubt in my mind that this is going to be a fun read. Also, that disclaimer and AN is freaking hilarious.
3Supreme GamerBro, this is a great start for your story. It won't happen all at once or overnight, but there is literally no doubt in my mind that this is going to be a fun read. Also, that disclaimer and AN is freaking hilarious.