
9/28/2017 c1
32The Passionate Admiral
Indeed. No offense, but it is plainly obvious that English is not your first language. I already assumed as much when I discovered that you're from Italy. Aside from that, there are a number of conspicuous errors in spelling and grammar throughout this chapter.
However... the story itself is fairly interesting. The concept of having two kings at once - one on the Iron Throne and one who travels the realm - is rather unique. That is a very original premise. Perhaps Aenys and Aegon will actually manage to establish order for the first time in a very long while.
Of course, I cannot speak too soon. For the present, the two kings seem to have thought this plan all the way through. I still wonder if Brynden Rivers will eventually go to the Wall. If not, the Three-Eyed Raven arc will not be able to happen in the future.
Lastly, young Walder Frey... how odd that HE bring up the issue of heirs. I suppose he WOULD be an expert on that subject.
It looks good so for. I'll read more.

Indeed. No offense, but it is plainly obvious that English is not your first language. I already assumed as much when I discovered that you're from Italy. Aside from that, there are a number of conspicuous errors in spelling and grammar throughout this chapter.
However... the story itself is fairly interesting. The concept of having two kings at once - one on the Iron Throne and one who travels the realm - is rather unique. That is a very original premise. Perhaps Aenys and Aegon will actually manage to establish order for the first time in a very long while.
Of course, I cannot speak too soon. For the present, the two kings seem to have thought this plan all the way through. I still wonder if Brynden Rivers will eventually go to the Wall. If not, the Three-Eyed Raven arc will not be able to happen in the future.
Lastly, young Walder Frey... how odd that HE bring up the issue of heirs. I suppose he WOULD be an expert on that subject.
It looks good so for. I'll read more.