for If One Never Left REWRITE9/27/2017 c1 TheGirlNoOneSeesBoo
I didn't see this till today, but this is such a cute little early bday suprise.
I didn't see this till today, but this is such a cute little early bday suprise.
9/24/2017 c1 asia.joanna.7334
I loved this. It's an amazing start and I'm extremely curious as to how this story is going to progress. I'm a fan. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
I loved this. It's an amazing start and I'm extremely curious as to how this story is going to progress. I'm a fan. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
9/23/2017 c1 
6Chipster-roo
I like it. It's well-written, the plot is interesting, and there are a few funny passages. There are a few minor typos, but other than that I have no complaints. I will be looking forward to future updates.
6Chipster-rooI like it. It's well-written, the plot is interesting, and there are a few funny passages. There are a few minor typos, but other than that I have no complaints. I will be looking forward to future updates.
9/23/2017 c1 Lili
I love it XD estaré esperando con todo mi corazón los siguientes capítulos ; ) kisses
I love it XD estaré esperando con todo mi corazón los siguientes capítulos ; ) kisses
9/23/2017 c1 Guest
WHAT IF... BELLA WAS BEATEN BY LAURENT, BEFORE THE WEREWOLFS GOT THERE AND LOST HER MEMORY DURING THE CHANGE?
WHAT IF... BELLA WAS BEATEN BY LAURENT, BEFORE THE WEREWOLFS GOT THERE AND LOST HER MEMORY DURING THE CHANGE?
9/22/2017 c1 Guest
That was super cute/sad
ship Jasper x Bella
That was super cute/sad
ship Jasper x Bella
9/22/2017 c1 Guest
This made me cry sweet salty tears of bitter sadness. Good shit.
This made me cry sweet salty tears of bitter sadness. Good shit.
9/22/2017 c1 seablue4u
This is good. It has promise. I can see it being longer than 4 chapters. My piece of advice is work on line spacing for when the characters are talking. It makes it easier for the reader to read if there is space and it's not blocked.
This is good. It has promise. I can see it being longer than 4 chapters. My piece of advice is work on line spacing for when the characters are talking. It makes it easier for the reader to read if there is space and it's not blocked.