for Coffee by the Campfire4/7/2019 c1 RandomIdiot1816
The Chocolate Milk Order is satisfied with your partisan efforts against the Empire of Caffeine with that last sentence.
(this was really good)
The Chocolate Milk Order is satisfied with your partisan efforts against the Empire of Caffeine with that last sentence.
(this was really good)
1/19/2019 c1 Your Fan
Short and bittersweet. You might want to cut back on how much angsty/dramatic/tragedy stories you put out. Doing it too often can lead to your thoughts being as bitter as the stories themselves. Being more positive gives more chances at being disappointed though, as everything has at least two sides.
Short and bittersweet. You might want to cut back on how much angsty/dramatic/tragedy stories you put out. Doing it too often can lead to your thoughts being as bitter as the stories themselves. Being more positive gives more chances at being disappointed though, as everything has at least two sides.
10/16/2017 c1 WhoNows
Wha- what is this? It feels so nice and warm in my heart. It feels... So good. A fanfic did this? Really? How? Would be because it is a narrative that concentrates in the feelings an toughts of the characters? Or because it dosen't go full "fantastic" and "extraordinary" in the story telling, being simple and relaxing? (Yes, in conclusion it is good my friend. Sorry for the bad english tho)
Wha- what is this? It feels so nice and warm in my heart. It feels... So good. A fanfic did this? Really? How? Would be because it is a narrative that concentrates in the feelings an toughts of the characters? Or because it dosen't go full "fantastic" and "extraordinary" in the story telling, being simple and relaxing? (Yes, in conclusion it is good my friend. Sorry for the bad english tho)
10/15/2017 c1 Draxinus
You know sometimes it’s good to step away from all the long stories and just read something nice and heartwarming for a change
You know sometimes it’s good to step away from all the long stories and just read something nice and heartwarming for a change
10/15/2017 c1 
6AKhaos
Aw, this was quite cute. Coffee by the Campfire. I used to always drink coffee at night, because I'm a nocturnal being that doesn't want to go to sleep. This was cute, and although I found the emotional break on Jaune's part to be a tad bit forced, this was still quite enjoyable.
Hmm... I feel that Ruby undermining Jaune's position on the team doesn't quite make sense. He's the oddball in the group when it comes to fighting, sure, but his role has surely improved. I will agree, he's not a great battler yet. Can't say much about his cooking skills. However, saying he's not much of a strategist is simply untrue. Before JNPR even became a thing, he was directing his team pretty confidently in most battles. He recognizes opportunities to push, when to retreat, and when the situation gets a bit desperate, he directs his team towards enemy weak points and other tactics to win. I understand you were using the sentence to highlight Jaune's importance to Ruby in personal terms, I have to disagree with her analysis. She's been shown to trust Jaune's lead, after all.
Still, besides that, (and this overwhelming paragraph, my God!) nice work. Short and sweet!
6AKhaosAw, this was quite cute. Coffee by the Campfire. I used to always drink coffee at night, because I'm a nocturnal being that doesn't want to go to sleep. This was cute, and although I found the emotional break on Jaune's part to be a tad bit forced, this was still quite enjoyable.
Hmm... I feel that Ruby undermining Jaune's position on the team doesn't quite make sense. He's the oddball in the group when it comes to fighting, sure, but his role has surely improved. I will agree, he's not a great battler yet. Can't say much about his cooking skills. However, saying he's not much of a strategist is simply untrue. Before JNPR even became a thing, he was directing his team pretty confidently in most battles. He recognizes opportunities to push, when to retreat, and when the situation gets a bit desperate, he directs his team towards enemy weak points and other tactics to win. I understand you were using the sentence to highlight Jaune's importance to Ruby in personal terms, I have to disagree with her analysis. She's been shown to trust Jaune's lead, after all.
Still, besides that, (and this overwhelming paragraph, my God!) nice work. Short and sweet!
10/15/2017 c1 1EvilMagicman
Aw~ Ruby and Jaune by the campfire having such a sweet moment and all- Wait a sec, there's a new fic coming up already on my inbox brb...
1EvilMagicmanAw~ Ruby and Jaune by the campfire having such a sweet moment and all- Wait a sec, there's a new fic coming up already on my inbox brb...
10/15/2017 c1 Guest
WTFu..
wait it's not weird...
still great thogh :D
WTFu..
wait it's not weird...
still great thogh :D