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2Sasugasm
- RyuujiVantek
It's definitively a girl for now and until the end of the story. A long time ago, the citizens mistook her for a man — which is why they referred to the Miracle Knight as a 'he' and not a 'she'. (I'm making it confusing on purpose because she is not human)
2Sasugasm- RyuujiVantek
It's definitively a girl for now and until the end of the story. A long time ago, the citizens mistook her for a man — which is why they referred to the Miracle Knight as a 'he' and not a 'she'. (I'm making it confusing on purpose because she is not human)
10/29/2017 c1 RyuujiVantek
Im still comfused xD
Is your oc a guy or a girl? In first chapter "he" was mentioned on fpv but when mirkha addressed the oc as a "she"...
You said you havent thought of it, then... what is the oc's gender? Ahhahaha mate... im really confused! XD
Im still comfused xD
Is your oc a guy or a girl? In first chapter "he" was mentioned on fpv but when mirkha addressed the oc as a "she"...
You said you havent thought of it, then... what is the oc's gender? Ahhahaha mate... im really confused! XD
10/24/2017 c1 Mamon the lich king
it looks really interesting. i was wondering why would ainz attack without reason, so thanks for clarification.
it looks really interesting. i was wondering why would ainz attack without reason, so thanks for clarification.
10/23/2017 c1 Sasugasm
RyuujiVantek
I did not even think about this x) That would have been a marvelous idea. Strange, but great at the same time.
fan boy
I will try to make a thorough answer for this — as I think it is important to get my point across (TLDR at the end).
To be clear, it was my exact goal but to make you question the reason behind. ‘Why?’ Why would the Sorcerer Kingdom act like this ? It is true, Ainz would never attack a nation just in the name of conquest — either because it isn't his style, or because of his second persona (the Supreme One) who would know that they couldn’t possibly win the heart of the citizens this way. But that may not be the case of his followers. Remember that I am narrating the story from the subjective point of view of each character so it is only natural that the global picture is biased. Although, I can only admit that I failed to get the trust of the reader in that matter. I guess it is a failure as a writer, and, for this reason, I will explain the choices I made so, perhaps, people will understand. In fact, I started the story at the end of a complicated political intrigue that I wanted to reveal throughout the chapters.
***********************start of spoiler***********************
If you’ve read the books, you will have seen that Ainz still does not know who’s responsible for Shalltear mind control — or at least he’s only suspecting. My idea was to entangle the Dark Knight in the story (who’s originated from the City-States Alliance) and make Ainz get intel on him and his nation — because who else than one of the Thirteen Heroes would be owning a World-item ? Thinking like this, I meditated on how Ainz would have proceeded and imagined it began between the eighth and ninth book. To explain it very lightly, Jirvnic has links with the City-States (it's canon) — and knows what’s up in the Alliance. Therefore, with Jirvnic knowledge, Ainz could send PA as an ambassador and get an idea of the potential danger of the Alliance, making him search the true nature of the Dark Knight in the meantime.
BUT —
At the same time, in the Karnassus City-States Alliance, there is an intricate plot undergoing. Just imagine. Six City-States — each one having its own governmental system, economic resources, military power — regrouped around a single democratic system. Different rules govern each City-States, but they still have to respect the higher authority — which is the Alliance itself. And guess who controls it all ? A Senate which holds of the votes, and the six Mayors who own the rest (the number of votes of each being decided by the City-States power, population, and seniority).
Now, imagine that two factions formed in this somewhat complicated country. It would only be natural to have the City-States choose between the two and support the most potent City-State within. Then, you’ll understand that everything (in the political term, I mean) became a shock between the two most influential military states to see who will get all the power. And guess who holds most influence in that city ? The Mayors.
This is where the antagonist comes. Clavo Hadrian Sueltos, the Mayor of the 1st City-State, and a man obsessed with making a name for himself. As a cunning strategist and an outstanding politician, he managed to find a fault in the system that he could exploit. I won’t go into details, but he managed to get enough power to be able to pass any law as if he was the only one deciding. If needed, Clavo could have climbed the steps, little by little, and finish at the head of an authoritarian regime. But, his nemesis, the Mayor of the 2nd City-State is not dumb — and he would never have allowed him to transform the country. That is the first complexification.
Here comes PA, the ambassador of the Sorcerer Kingdom, who happens to propose an offer.
At first, it is information that PA seeks — traded against high-quality materials and goods made by the Sorcerer Kingdom (remember that Ainz was experimenting in that domain). But Clavo happened to get an idea, and it started this dark scheme. As an impatient man, he’s saddened to have lost the support of his neighbor (the Empire) to Ainz, but he also knows about the power of the Sorcerer Kingdom. So he’s willing to propose a significant offer that both sides would consider advantageous — just so he could betray the Sorcerer Kingdom afterward (after all, who would trust an undead in this world). Hang on, it’s going to be difficult, and Ainz (as per usual) will have his own idea on the matter.
This is what they came up with:
Clavo could have enforced the rules (slowly), but people already doubted him - so instead he chose to take advantage of Ainz’ needs. This way, he gets information on his new powerful enemy while, on the other hand, preparing to overthrow him.
He ended with a plan to get everything in the wheel.
First, he would feign inferiority and fear to propose a losing deal to the Alliance (the deal was to become vassal states of the Sorcerer Kingdom in exchange for several advantages). That way, the Mayors would believe he’s closing himself in a bubble because of the fear of the Sorcerer Kingdom. Therefore, the Alliance refused the idea (it was intended). The thing is that he planned to have an incident (the battle of chapter 1) to eliminate two of his grandiose enemies (Mirkah, a trusted general of his nemesis, and the Miracle Knight, who caused a lot of problems in the past) as well as instilling fear into the other City-States. That way, the losing deal would reveal itself as an attractive opportunity for the Alliance, and the majority would accept what he proposed — even thanking Clavo for his foresight. Thus the Alliance would become a vassal-state to the SK for an exchange of tributes, workforce, and protection — Clavo becoming the bridge between the two nations. In the end, there would only be wins for him since he hardly proposed his help to get the deal across the Alliance while managing to bargain a high authority for himself alongside the many benefits of the agreement.
On the other side, Ainz has overheard of the potential danger that the Miracle Knight represented. You don’t know it yet, but Halona has a fearsome Talent (see Ninya) that could end up in a problematic situation for Ainz — she's barely stronger than the Black Scripture 1st Seat, but she could end up killing of the guardian (with a considerable quantity of luck). Imagine now that, suddenly, Clavo presents the weakness of the only threat of the City-States in a golden plate — giving the opportunity to get rid of her, and even proposing to become a vassal state of the Sorcerer Kingdom. It’s just too good. Of course, Ainz does not know of the real intention of Clavo — but the Guardians think he’s feigning ignorance to get control of the Alliance by deliberately letting him believe they're unaware.
Are you still following ? Clavo believes he manipulates Ainz when — in fact — he is losing what is most precious to him - to be said, total control of the Alliance.
The Sorcerer Kingdom actions will then serve as much as establishing their power than to make the City-States dependent on them (that part is what Demiurge and PA would have guessed, and not in Ainz’s plan). But it also serves as a hole to gather information on the military extend of the Alliance (given by King Clavo himself as a bargain of their trade), resulting in having in-depth knowledge of the various treasures and opponents they could face. That way, they can plan to annihilate the potential 'problems' by absolute power without risking anything in return — all the while gaining a kingdom with a minimum of victims and effort. A win-win trade, knowing that they will learn intel on the potential World-Items who could have mind controlled Shalltear.
And that is far from being the whole thing… It's just the first layout. I didn’t talk about the other Mayors in the process, how Clavo managed to keep them in guard, what was planned to lure Halona and Mirkah, Ainz thoughts process or how he managed to get those ideas… There is just so much more to this apparent 'conquest' of the City-States that I decided to make them transparent.
***********************end of spoiler***********************
That was just to apologize for my lack of prevision and explain my choices in repayment. I could have made a chapter long to set up the story (before going head first), but I thought it was better to encapsulate everything and directly goes with the result. I only thought this is what Maruyama would have done — but I forgot that I had to earn the trust of the readers beforehand.
TLDR: My bad, should have made a prologue to explain everything.
RyuujiVantek
I did not even think about this x) That would have been a marvelous idea. Strange, but great at the same time.
fan boy
I will try to make a thorough answer for this — as I think it is important to get my point across (TLDR at the end).
To be clear, it was my exact goal but to make you question the reason behind. ‘Why?’ Why would the Sorcerer Kingdom act like this ? It is true, Ainz would never attack a nation just in the name of conquest — either because it isn't his style, or because of his second persona (the Supreme One) who would know that they couldn’t possibly win the heart of the citizens this way. But that may not be the case of his followers. Remember that I am narrating the story from the subjective point of view of each character so it is only natural that the global picture is biased. Although, I can only admit that I failed to get the trust of the reader in that matter. I guess it is a failure as a writer, and, for this reason, I will explain the choices I made so, perhaps, people will understand. In fact, I started the story at the end of a complicated political intrigue that I wanted to reveal throughout the chapters.
***********************start of spoiler***********************
If you’ve read the books, you will have seen that Ainz still does not know who’s responsible for Shalltear mind control — or at least he’s only suspecting. My idea was to entangle the Dark Knight in the story (who’s originated from the City-States Alliance) and make Ainz get intel on him and his nation — because who else than one of the Thirteen Heroes would be owning a World-item ? Thinking like this, I meditated on how Ainz would have proceeded and imagined it began between the eighth and ninth book. To explain it very lightly, Jirvnic has links with the City-States (it's canon) — and knows what’s up in the Alliance. Therefore, with Jirvnic knowledge, Ainz could send PA as an ambassador and get an idea of the potential danger of the Alliance, making him search the true nature of the Dark Knight in the meantime.
BUT —
At the same time, in the Karnassus City-States Alliance, there is an intricate plot undergoing. Just imagine. Six City-States — each one having its own governmental system, economic resources, military power — regrouped around a single democratic system. Different rules govern each City-States, but they still have to respect the higher authority — which is the Alliance itself. And guess who controls it all ? A Senate which holds of the votes, and the six Mayors who own the rest (the number of votes of each being decided by the City-States power, population, and seniority).
Now, imagine that two factions formed in this somewhat complicated country. It would only be natural to have the City-States choose between the two and support the most potent City-State within. Then, you’ll understand that everything (in the political term, I mean) became a shock between the two most influential military states to see who will get all the power. And guess who holds most influence in that city ? The Mayors.
This is where the antagonist comes. Clavo Hadrian Sueltos, the Mayor of the 1st City-State, and a man obsessed with making a name for himself. As a cunning strategist and an outstanding politician, he managed to find a fault in the system that he could exploit. I won’t go into details, but he managed to get enough power to be able to pass any law as if he was the only one deciding. If needed, Clavo could have climbed the steps, little by little, and finish at the head of an authoritarian regime. But, his nemesis, the Mayor of the 2nd City-State is not dumb — and he would never have allowed him to transform the country. That is the first complexification.
Here comes PA, the ambassador of the Sorcerer Kingdom, who happens to propose an offer.
At first, it is information that PA seeks — traded against high-quality materials and goods made by the Sorcerer Kingdom (remember that Ainz was experimenting in that domain). But Clavo happened to get an idea, and it started this dark scheme. As an impatient man, he’s saddened to have lost the support of his neighbor (the Empire) to Ainz, but he also knows about the power of the Sorcerer Kingdom. So he’s willing to propose a significant offer that both sides would consider advantageous — just so he could betray the Sorcerer Kingdom afterward (after all, who would trust an undead in this world). Hang on, it’s going to be difficult, and Ainz (as per usual) will have his own idea on the matter.
This is what they came up with:
Clavo could have enforced the rules (slowly), but people already doubted him - so instead he chose to take advantage of Ainz’ needs. This way, he gets information on his new powerful enemy while, on the other hand, preparing to overthrow him.
He ended with a plan to get everything in the wheel.
First, he would feign inferiority and fear to propose a losing deal to the Alliance (the deal was to become vassal states of the Sorcerer Kingdom in exchange for several advantages). That way, the Mayors would believe he’s closing himself in a bubble because of the fear of the Sorcerer Kingdom. Therefore, the Alliance refused the idea (it was intended). The thing is that he planned to have an incident (the battle of chapter 1) to eliminate two of his grandiose enemies (Mirkah, a trusted general of his nemesis, and the Miracle Knight, who caused a lot of problems in the past) as well as instilling fear into the other City-States. That way, the losing deal would reveal itself as an attractive opportunity for the Alliance, and the majority would accept what he proposed — even thanking Clavo for his foresight. Thus the Alliance would become a vassal-state to the SK for an exchange of tributes, workforce, and protection — Clavo becoming the bridge between the two nations. In the end, there would only be wins for him since he hardly proposed his help to get the deal across the Alliance while managing to bargain a high authority for himself alongside the many benefits of the agreement.
On the other side, Ainz has overheard of the potential danger that the Miracle Knight represented. You don’t know it yet, but Halona has a fearsome Talent (see Ninya) that could end up in a problematic situation for Ainz — she's barely stronger than the Black Scripture 1st Seat, but she could end up killing of the guardian (with a considerable quantity of luck). Imagine now that, suddenly, Clavo presents the weakness of the only threat of the City-States in a golden plate — giving the opportunity to get rid of her, and even proposing to become a vassal state of the Sorcerer Kingdom. It’s just too good. Of course, Ainz does not know of the real intention of Clavo — but the Guardians think he’s feigning ignorance to get control of the Alliance by deliberately letting him believe they're unaware.
Are you still following ? Clavo believes he manipulates Ainz when — in fact — he is losing what is most precious to him - to be said, total control of the Alliance.
The Sorcerer Kingdom actions will then serve as much as establishing their power than to make the City-States dependent on them (that part is what Demiurge and PA would have guessed, and not in Ainz’s plan). But it also serves as a hole to gather information on the military extend of the Alliance (given by King Clavo himself as a bargain of their trade), resulting in having in-depth knowledge of the various treasures and opponents they could face. That way, they can plan to annihilate the potential 'problems' by absolute power without risking anything in return — all the while gaining a kingdom with a minimum of victims and effort. A win-win trade, knowing that they will learn intel on the potential World-Items who could have mind controlled Shalltear.
And that is far from being the whole thing… It's just the first layout. I didn’t talk about the other Mayors in the process, how Clavo managed to keep them in guard, what was planned to lure Halona and Mirkah, Ainz thoughts process or how he managed to get those ideas… There is just so much more to this apparent 'conquest' of the City-States that I decided to make them transparent.
***********************end of spoiler***********************
That was just to apologize for my lack of prevision and explain my choices in repayment. I could have made a chapter long to set up the story (before going head first), but I thought it was better to encapsulate everything and directly goes with the result. I only thought this is what Maruyama would have done — but I forgot that I had to earn the trust of the readers beforehand.
TLDR: My bad, should have made a prologue to explain everything.
10/23/2017 c2 1Shalltear Bloodfallen
Their reason is to conquer you. Idiot.
Hopefully this guy isn't a stupid powerful level 100 oc.
1Shalltear BloodfallenTheir reason is to conquer you. Idiot.
Hopefully this guy isn't a stupid powerful level 100 oc.
10/23/2017 c1 fan boy
you should give it a reedit.
Attacking nations without reason and in the name of conquest isn't Aniz style.
Try to form a political and entertaining story more like the LightNovel.
you should give it a reedit.
Attacking nations without reason and in the name of conquest isn't Aniz style.
Try to form a political and entertaining story more like the LightNovel.
10/22/2017 c1 Guest
I like the authors name
I like the authors name