for Holocron7/11/2020 c10 kenodoxia
This chapter seems way too forced, like you had to make the 4 year results be exactly the same. You're sprinkling stuff to the story but if the story reaches the exact same end what is the point of the whole story. what is the point of adding the holocron if it does not change anything resembling plot points? It's the same story. maybe just jump to the end of the books and build from there. Where is the agency of the main characters. and he is a jedi, he should have felt something about crouch, resisted, or at the very least reacted. you made Jedi powers useless.
This chapter seems way too forced, like you had to make the 4 year results be exactly the same. You're sprinkling stuff to the story but if the story reaches the exact same end what is the point of the whole story. what is the point of adding the holocron if it does not change anything resembling plot points? It's the same story. maybe just jump to the end of the books and build from there. Where is the agency of the main characters. and he is a jedi, he should have felt something about crouch, resisted, or at the very least reacted. you made Jedi powers useless.
7/8/2020 c4 Dinkledork
Alright this is looking to be good. But i want to know if harry is going to get a light saber? And i dont mean turn your wand into a lightsaber like some of the fics i read. And does harry need a wand? He can probably do everything without it and the incantation.
Alright this is looking to be good. But i want to know if harry is going to get a light saber? And i dont mean turn your wand into a lightsaber like some of the fics i read. And does harry need a wand? He can probably do everything without it and the incantation.
6/25/2020 c14 claton fromMoga
its not voldy harry
look ... closer
its not voldy harry
look ... closer
6/25/2020 c13 claton fromMoga
i was hoping it would be green but the description of asimbling the saber more than makes up for it
i was hoping it would be green but the description of asimbling the saber more than makes up for it
6/25/2020 c9 claton fromMoga
Darth Wesly Ron ?
Darth Wesly Ron ?
6/25/2020 c3 claton fromMoga
i always felt nither the sith or jedi were right about the light/dark thing raven's balenced force makes the most sence to me
i always felt nither the sith or jedi were right about the light/dark thing raven's balenced force makes the most sence to me
6/21/2020 c3 
2dhairyasood748
Hey I'm reading this story and believe me it's GREAT. But I can't help but wonder something. Are you planning on making every magical person a Force-sensitive? If you are then it opens up possibilities, but if you're not, then you have your own ideas to this story. I mean this is still your story but if every magical person is Force-sensitive then we get many new possibilities.
2dhairyasood748Hey I'm reading this story and believe me it's GREAT. But I can't help but wonder something. Are you planning on making every magical person a Force-sensitive? If you are then it opens up possibilities, but if you're not, then you have your own ideas to this story. I mean this is still your story but if every magical person is Force-sensitive then we get many new possibilities.
6/21/2020 c16 24Stainless Steel Fox
I have no doubt that when Ron gets his lightsabre to work it will be a nice bright Griffindor red.
24Stainless Steel FoxI have no doubt that when Ron gets his lightsabre to work it will be a nice bright Griffindor red.
6/21/2020 c14 Stainless Steel Fox
Yes, Voldemort, it has to be Voldemort who's never even heard of the Jedi. Not Ron 'Hair Trigger Temper' Weasley who is gaining dark force points at a great rate of knots.
Yes, Voldemort, it has to be Voldemort who's never even heard of the Jedi. Not Ron 'Hair Trigger Temper' Weasley who is gaining dark force points at a great rate of knots.
6/20/2020 c10 Stainless Steel Fox
The only problem I have with this chapter is that it implies that this version of Voldemort is actually competent and pragmatic, rather than the grandstanding nutso Harry normally has to deal with. But that's okay, I guess. This Harry is far more capable than in canon.
The only problem I have with this chapter is that it implies that this version of Voldemort is actually competent and pragmatic, rather than the grandstanding nutso Harry normally has to deal with. But that's okay, I guess. This Harry is far more capable than in canon.
6/20/2020 c8 Stainless Steel Fox
A barely trained Force User, even if he had a great talent for it, managed to make a golden BB shot on a thermal exhaust port. I agree that Quidditch would hardly be an issue to three trained Force Users.
A barely trained Force User, even if he had a great talent for it, managed to make a golden BB shot on a thermal exhaust port. I agree that Quidditch would hardly be an issue to three trained Force Users.
6/20/2020 c4 Stainless Steel Fox
Harry the Jedi in Hogwarts is something I've been looking for. I never found a good one, so I was thinking of writing my own, based on the idea that Harry sees a marathon of the original Star Wars movies on TV while the Dursley's are away for a bank holiday and leave him behind to clean up. He panics when he realises how much time he's lost, and his accidental magic kicks in and cleans the place for him. Obviously, he decides he must be a Jedi, and decides to follow the instructions on screen to become one. Cue a version of Harry who uses magic to emulate the force.
So this story is right up my alley. I look forward to reading more.
Harry the Jedi in Hogwarts is something I've been looking for. I never found a good one, so I was thinking of writing my own, based on the idea that Harry sees a marathon of the original Star Wars movies on TV while the Dursley's are away for a bank holiday and leave him behind to clean up. He panics when he realises how much time he's lost, and his accidental magic kicks in and cleans the place for him. Obviously, he decides he must be a Jedi, and decides to follow the instructions on screen to become one. Cue a version of Harry who uses magic to emulate the force.
So this story is right up my alley. I look forward to reading more.
6/7/2020 c1 11tscchope
I hope the guide reports the Dursleys. You don't want to hear the midichlorians? Have the nargles and wrackspurts jointly taken control of your mind? We all spent those first three films wondering what made a Jedi a Jedi. Wasn't it worth the wait for the payoff? Midichlorians!
11tscchopeI hope the guide reports the Dursleys. You don't want to hear the midichlorians? Have the nargles and wrackspurts jointly taken control of your mind? We all spent those first three films wondering what made a Jedi a Jedi. Wasn't it worth the wait for the payoff? Midichlorians!
6/3/2020 c14 1MakhaiArcanum
Nooo! Poor Ron. But he’s also kinda gonna deserve it. I can’t believe Harry hasn’t noticed what’s going on.
1MakhaiArcanumNooo! Poor Ron. But he’s also kinda gonna deserve it. I can’t believe Harry hasn’t noticed what’s going on.