for Her Lotus-Eyed Hero10/14/2021 c8 Anonymous
Please continue
Please continue
8/30/2020 c7 Guest
Hope you continue this.
I like that you include Kariya's flaws in this story as well. Throughout Fate Zero you feel so bad for him that you can forget that he has serious flaws of his own namely his refusal to accept that Aoi does love Tokiomi and not him and at times he can let his (completely understandable) hatred for Tokiomi take control of him. Here where he has someone as wise as Rama with him he can possibly try and move on with his life.
Poor Saber she has feels so inadequate when compared to possibly the greatest conquer in history and possibly the most legendary figure in Hinduism.
Speaking of Hinduism is it safe to say that Sakura and Kariya (if he lives) will be converting to it after the war?
Hope you continue this.
I like that you include Kariya's flaws in this story as well. Throughout Fate Zero you feel so bad for him that you can forget that he has serious flaws of his own namely his refusal to accept that Aoi does love Tokiomi and not him and at times he can let his (completely understandable) hatred for Tokiomi take control of him. Here where he has someone as wise as Rama with him he can possibly try and move on with his life.
Poor Saber she has feels so inadequate when compared to possibly the greatest conquer in history and possibly the most legendary figure in Hinduism.
Speaking of Hinduism is it safe to say that Sakura and Kariya (if he lives) will be converting to it after the war?
8/25/2020 c8 Guest
This is a great story i hope that you will continue it.
This is a great story i hope that you will continue it.
9/30/2018 c7 
30jackelgull
I love this story so far, but I don't think Kariya giving Sakura back to her family would be the ideal solution. Tokiomi has already proved he is a magus rather than a father - Unlimited Bladeworks is clear on that point. If you abandon your child to enslavement and rape, you shouldn't get a second chance. Short of a visible realignment in Tokiomi's priorities, some kind of sign he wouldn't make the same choice all over again, I think it'd be a mistake for him to get Sakura back. I hope what this story builds to is Kariya letting go of his hate and instead making an objective assessment and realizing Sakura shouldn't go back to her family - Aoi seemed to accept her child's disappearance easily enough. I hope this story ends with him trying to be her father.
30jackelgullI love this story so far, but I don't think Kariya giving Sakura back to her family would be the ideal solution. Tokiomi has already proved he is a magus rather than a father - Unlimited Bladeworks is clear on that point. If you abandon your child to enslavement and rape, you shouldn't get a second chance. Short of a visible realignment in Tokiomi's priorities, some kind of sign he wouldn't make the same choice all over again, I think it'd be a mistake for him to get Sakura back. I hope what this story builds to is Kariya letting go of his hate and instead making an objective assessment and realizing Sakura shouldn't go back to her family - Aoi seemed to accept her child's disappearance easily enough. I hope this story ends with him trying to be her father.
7/12/2018 c7 7GhostXavier
"And Kariya, his master couldn't stop shouting in excitement!" Easily my favorite line. That scene was a nice touch.
I like the introspection and comparisons Saber goes through, but the last two scenes are the most touching. Rama bringing Sakura to the playground so she can find out how to be herself again is nicely paralleled with the same issue for the unknowing Kariya. Guess this will be a double self-realization story, and you certainly give an interesting setup for a unique, possible ending.
You definitely have my interest for where this will go next. There's a few typos here and there, but I know English isn't your first language so I wouldn't worry about them. Yours are rather easy to miss anyhow unless the reader tends to crawl slowly through sentences like I do. Keep it up, friend!
7GhostXavier"And Kariya, his master couldn't stop shouting in excitement!" Easily my favorite line. That scene was a nice touch.
I like the introspection and comparisons Saber goes through, but the last two scenes are the most touching. Rama bringing Sakura to the playground so she can find out how to be herself again is nicely paralleled with the same issue for the unknowing Kariya. Guess this will be a double self-realization story, and you certainly give an interesting setup for a unique, possible ending.
You definitely have my interest for where this will go next. There's a few typos here and there, but I know English isn't your first language so I wouldn't worry about them. Yours are rather easy to miss anyhow unless the reader tends to crawl slowly through sentences like I do. Keep it up, friend!
7/10/2018 c7 ArcherShirou
Kariya is being forced to see that his choices for war could result.
Rama has no problem putting salt in the wounds if it helps heal Kariya in the future, but those words must have hurt Kariya.
unfortunately he does not have many choices, since his life span is short, is the only way he can continue to live really is the grail, that even winning will fuck him somehow, or Iirisviel who may perhaps know enough about healing to help him.
Kariya is being forced to see that his choices for war could result.
Rama has no problem putting salt in the wounds if it helps heal Kariya in the future, but those words must have hurt Kariya.
unfortunately he does not have many choices, since his life span is short, is the only way he can continue to live really is the grail, that even winning will fuck him somehow, or Iirisviel who may perhaps know enough about healing to help him.
7/7/2018 c7 3JediMasterDraco
Well looks like we've got a story where I'm pulling for Gilgamesh to corrupt Kirei. That way, Tokiomi gets sent to the hell he deserves and the girls should have a happy childhood. X-factor is Aoi, but hopefully she'll be ill inclined the bastard after she learns about what happened to Sakura.
3JediMasterDracoWell looks like we've got a story where I'm pulling for Gilgamesh to corrupt Kirei. That way, Tokiomi gets sent to the hell he deserves and the girls should have a happy childhood. X-factor is Aoi, but hopefully she'll be ill inclined the bastard after she learns about what happened to Sakura.