for The Ninja Overlord Part 1: Rise of an Overlord!10/14/2018 c9 Ezeakel
Nice chapter.
I'll be waiting for the next one but I begin to hate those flashbacks.
Nice chapter.
I'll be waiting for the next one but I begin to hate those flashbacks.
10/14/2018 c9 
1xXCoopyXx
Another good chapter. Also if you want to have an idea on why the reviews might have lowered then it might be because there would be nothing to review. Don’t get me wrong it’s a good story and all but you also need to take into account that this is a slow burning story. ( I would probably advise having a time skip here up until he either gets the overlords power or meets his grandfather and then you can use flashbacks for some of the more important stuff in the story ) in other words you are not going to get a review on every chapter especially if it’s a slow burning story.
1xXCoopyXxAnother good chapter. Also if you want to have an idea on why the reviews might have lowered then it might be because there would be nothing to review. Don’t get me wrong it’s a good story and all but you also need to take into account that this is a slow burning story. ( I would probably advise having a time skip here up until he either gets the overlords power or meets his grandfather and then you can use flashbacks for some of the more important stuff in the story ) in other words you are not going to get a review on every chapter especially if it’s a slow burning story.
10/12/2018 c8 woodssaayy
Naruto’s Harem:
Hinata Hyuuga
Hanabi Hyuuga
Izumi Uchiha [Your female Itachi]
Karin Uzumaki
Tayuya
Naruko/Akane
Kushina Uzumaki
FEM!Kyuubi
Naruto’s Harem:
Hinata Hyuuga
Hanabi Hyuuga
Izumi Uchiha [Your female Itachi]
Karin Uzumaki
Tayuya
Naruko/Akane
Kushina Uzumaki
FEM!Kyuubi
10/12/2018 c8 Mutant Ascension
Yes quick update, and I'm glad that Naruko is getting through Naruto's head and he is really starting to understand what it means to be a leader of a village especially a village with mercenaries/assassin's. And just because one believes what they are doing is for the greater good or at least that's what they say, doesn't mean it is. That's the thing about that phrase the "greater good" it can be used to justify pretty much anything no matter how horrific. Anyway I look forward to your next chapter.
Yes quick update, and I'm glad that Naruko is getting through Naruto's head and he is really starting to understand what it means to be a leader of a village especially a village with mercenaries/assassin's. And just because one believes what they are doing is for the greater good or at least that's what they say, doesn't mean it is. That's the thing about that phrase the "greater good" it can be used to justify pretty much anything no matter how horrific. Anyway I look forward to your next chapter.
10/11/2018 c1 5Indra Sparrow
I liked where the chapter went and can definitely see where the inspiration is coming from. However, I think that the transition between chapters is some what odd, while not bad it is not quite good. I is somewhere in the middle, but is to be expected with different inspiration.
I am glad to see some reasoning to actions that may be seen as bad, but no outright character bashing. On the topic of characters, I can say that you have more depth than a great deal of other stories.
I would like to say that I know that there are going to be explicit scenes, sex scenes, and when writing what happens after, I hope you don't make character interactions freeze or stagnate. What I mean is that it would add a level of realism that shows that a relationship does not end with sex. There is still room for character interactions to develop and change, as they would in real life.
All in all I like the chapter and where the story is going. I look forward to the next chapter.
Sincerely,
Indra Sparrow
5Indra SparrowI liked where the chapter went and can definitely see where the inspiration is coming from. However, I think that the transition between chapters is some what odd, while not bad it is not quite good. I is somewhere in the middle, but is to be expected with different inspiration.
I am glad to see some reasoning to actions that may be seen as bad, but no outright character bashing. On the topic of characters, I can say that you have more depth than a great deal of other stories.
I would like to say that I know that there are going to be explicit scenes, sex scenes, and when writing what happens after, I hope you don't make character interactions freeze or stagnate. What I mean is that it would add a level of realism that shows that a relationship does not end with sex. There is still room for character interactions to develop and change, as they would in real life.
All in all I like the chapter and where the story is going. I look forward to the next chapter.
Sincerely,
Indra Sparrow
10/11/2018 c8 fresh prince1
after this chapter I kinda wanna see him do something besides the two options that he's being put toward by his sister and the Hokage though i don't know why.
after this chapter I kinda wanna see him do something besides the two options that he's being put toward by his sister and the Hokage though i don't know why.
10/11/2018 c8 1xXCoopyXx
Uuurrggghhh I wish this story was updated faster~
Anyways I am curious as to hi naruto will actually become so strong later also what are the pairings in this (harem?)
1xXCoopyXxUuurrggghhh I wish this story was updated faster~
Anyways I am curious as to hi naruto will actually become so strong later also what are the pairings in this (harem?)
10/9/2018 c7 Lord Glaiveglory
Hey cool start but I would like it if you at least give some explanation for making Naruto and kushina part of his harem. Like masato's experiments on uzumakis and kyubbi influence on Naruto and Naruko making them genetically not as close. Incest is just not great genetically especially really close. Even first cousins isn't terrible right away but siblings and parents are really gross. You get people like Joffrey Waters. Just saying. For someone so focused on the strength of the uzumakis I don't think masoto would let that happen.
Hey cool start but I would like it if you at least give some explanation for making Naruto and kushina part of his harem. Like masato's experiments on uzumakis and kyubbi influence on Naruto and Naruko making them genetically not as close. Incest is just not great genetically especially really close. Even first cousins isn't terrible right away but siblings and parents are really gross. You get people like Joffrey Waters. Just saying. For someone so focused on the strength of the uzumakis I don't think masoto would let that happen.